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From Elvenprincess on March 22, 2009
Beautiful.

Gonna be honest, I didn't notice, or obviously mind the shortness of that chap. It went above and beyond any scenarios I had dreamed up while anticipating the next update. This only makes me all the more nervous for their return, because even if Draco decided to switch sides I'm sure not everyone will be all to pleased about what has happened and Hermione's feelings, in the event that does happen I do hope it won't take everyone to long to come to their senses and be happy about Hermione's happiness. Anyway, I'm rambling, sorry, loved it!
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From andarte on March 22, 2009
I'm really enjoying it, though I'm eager to see where you are going to go with the story. Their first time was really sweet and Draco seems so vulnerable I just want to hug him.
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From chickaboo on March 22, 2009
I love this story. I really hope that when it's time for them to return Draco will have grown a pair and stay with Hermione. lol I can't wait for more!!
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From kazfeist on March 21, 2009
Loved the story, so far. I am wondering where you have them, back in time, that would now be in present-day London, as opposed to one of its suburbs. And I am wondering about the stone.....was it in the bag, or did Hermione manage to keep it on her person? :D
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From margaritama on March 21, 2009
I really like this little chapter...it shows progression of their relationship. Hey, I'd do whatever Draco wanted for a repeat of what he did in the forest...yummy
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From caseyjarryn on March 21, 2009
thanks for the quick updates!! :o)
I like the direction you are taking this!
keep it up!

xoxo
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From Elvenprincess on March 21, 2009
You are an update machine, and I'm not going to complain about it one bit. Historical fiction has always been my weakness, so when this story cropped up I was beyond excited. You write the period well, and I've been enjoying your writing immensely, can't wait for more!

I'm looking forward to Draco making good on his promise, but I do hope it works out, since sometimes a lack of food and then suddenly eating what can seem like a feast can sometimes make one drowsy O.o, ah, I wont worry myself, I'll just be impatient in my wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - Anon on March 21, 2009
Sneaky Draco - what a Malfoy wants a Malfoy gets indeed. Still they have their food now and all we have to do is wait for nightfall and that promise he made. LMAO Damnit, have to wait for another chapter now, don't we? LOL

As for Hermione, I wish she wasn't so self sacraficing all the time. She does need to take better care of herself in order to be at her best for everyone else when they need her. Times like these that she reminds me of Molly Weasley, running around being everyone's 'mother' and taking no time out for herself. Did I mention I'm looking forward to nightfall? LOL

Oh and I guess if we're right, Margaritama and I will be sharing a cuppa. I hope we get cookies with that. ;) LMAO And finally (yes I will be shutting up shortly) thank you for taking a quick peek at one of my stories too, much appreciated. :)
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From ANON - Anon on March 21, 2009
Bloody hell, I only just finished chapter 9 and now there's another one. Woo hoo! LOL Best of luck with your writing degree and I do hope you get your dream of writing a best seller (or several) some day. :) Oh and if my spiels do bother you, please let me know and I'll curb it down.

LMAO - All that passion, all those kisses and racy thoughts stemmed from the innocent way she leaned up to tell him it was her turn to take watch!!!!!! LOVED IT! And the imagery of a male actually popping a vein in his dick = priceless. He did a great job of giving her her first orgasm but it's a bit unfair that he had to then take care of himself. Given the state of her innocence I guess he did the right thing though. But I love that she was more realistic about things then he was. She seems to have already accepted that it's a sidetrack for them while he seems convinced she's going to fall in love with him and it's just another bit of guilt he'll have on his conscience. Having the wolf in the forest was a great addition too, I was expecting that given the time they are in so am pleased to see mention of it. :) Damn lucky they managed to find an apple tree too. LOL

And there's the Gryffindor I love, coming straight out with it and saying what she wants and expects of their time together and the attraction she knows he feels. And another aww moment that she took the pain of his shoulder from him. I was a bit surprised that Hermione would only research half a spell but who knows why that's the case, the important part was it made Draco realise that not everyone is as selfish as he expects them to be and there are some poeple willing to sacrafice things even for him. Brilliant!! Okay, next chapter.

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From Juana13 on March 21, 2009
dont worry, it wasn't too short. and you update so fast! *stares in awe*
loved it. i'm glad they finally made it to a town, and i wonder if they're going to find a room that night. and will draco do something naughty to hermione? *giggles* oh, and i hope hermione is ok. dont want her getting sick too badly... :(
looking forward to more! : )
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From Juana13 on March 20, 2009
thanx for updating so soon! i'm glad that draco hadn't stolen the bracelet and the map for selfish reasons to take off. i can see that draco is slowly starting to become nice and I'm so glad that he's finally realizing his "love" for hermione. I can tell he loves her already. *squeals with happiness*
that one scene with hermione was hot. i loved that you added that bit. so glad that they managed to relieve some stress since they're being hunted down and all... lol
are they going to go further soon? i hope that if they do, draco will be really gentle with hermione. i hope that them having sex might speed draco's mind up a bit about him loving hermione.
loving your story so much! cant wait for your next update! looking so forward to it!
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From margaritama on March 20, 2009
I think this was a fantastic chapter - I love how you mix the realism of the time, their predicament and attraction all in one. Oh Draco taking her like that was hot and I'm so proud of Hermione staking her claim, even if its temporary (can I hope and pray that it won't be by the end?). I hope Draco becomes the man we all know he can be other than the man his father expects him to become. He needs to make his own choices and follow his gut and feelings. One can hope for him, I think Hermione does.

I'm a bit worried about her dealing with the pain now in her shoulder, I hope they get to their destination quickly for some relief.
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From margaritama on March 20, 2009
Actually this trip is an important one for Draco. It's a life changing one - when (if) they get back he has a choice whether or not to do the right thing and fight for what's good. Will he allow his prejudices (which he knows deep down are wrong) to rule him or will he make a decision based on how he truly feels and knows in his gut is right? It's also important for Hermione - will she allow her own prejudices to rule her? Will she believe that people can change and that a man's actions make him, not what he spews from his mouth? Believing in Draco and standing by him will be good for her as well.

I loved the "Well fuck. He did." OMG - I was just ROFL! And I'm so glad he kissed her again at the end, he must realize she's not experienced. Oh, and I caught the 'make love until we drop' instead of 'fuck you until we drop' comment. I wonder if Draco realized what he had said.

Oh and I guess they get there the day before she 'dies' (am agreeing with Dreamweaver's theory) so they have a day or night to plan what they will do. I think you'll give them that edge.
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From LadyBlueEyes on March 20, 2009
Poor Draco it must be really tough to want someone you were taught to hate. He's weakening though....and its obvious to see that She is as irresistable to him as he is to her. I'm enjoying them struggle to want to be with each other and try to figure out whats right. You're doing a wonderful job writing their emotions....

Your descriptions are awesome as well...I feel like I can see where they are and what they are doing.

As for when they will get to the cottage? I am thinking they'll get there just in time, but so will the Trackers so there will be some sort of confrontation..... =) I look foraward to more!
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From kazfeist on March 20, 2009
So her cloak is gone? And he's got the food? Or just the stone? Anyway, update soon. :D
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