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Reviews for The Depths of Darkness

By : jaspersparkles
  • From Ryan on December 19, 2015
    This is a good story please continue.
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  • From cobraqueen on August 07, 2009
    Poor Harry just keeps getting more and more piled on.
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  • From thrnbrooke on June 11, 2009
    Soooo need chapter 7!!! What does Ron's letter say? What do the three High Lords plan?
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  • From anniea on April 11, 2009
    wow i really like this story, please update soon! *kisses*
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  • From Stefanorkle on April 10, 2009
    Great story!!! I love it! I can't wait till you update again! I hope it's soon!
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  • From arashi1412 on March 30, 2009
    wow....
    i wonder...
    who's the Dom n Sub for Harry??
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  • From kyuubifreak on March 30, 2009
    awesome story!! i am looking forward for the next one
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  • From thrnbrooke on March 30, 2009
    Soooooo need chapter 6!!!!
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  • From Mystique887 on March 30, 2009
    Ok I can finally sleep now that I know what happens in the chapters available lol. I love how Soren had a total Pocahontas moment I could just hear the words to "Colors of the Wind" playing in my head. I'm really interested to see your take on Evil!Dumbledore, it's usually very poorly done but I'm confident that you can pull it off. Well TTFN, please update soon...wow ok that sounds greedy even to me. Ok, even though you posted 5 chapters (all of which are lengthy and well written) at once, please update again soon =D. I am now done attacking you with reviews.

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  • From Mystique887 on March 30, 2009
    Aw how cute, the first glimpse of slashy goodness! I think it makes things so much more realistic that Harry now has enemies other than Voldemort. I love that you acknowledge that power brings contention no matter where you are. Many authors ignore this and ONLY focus on Voldemort as his enemy as if the rest of whatever new world he's in is made up of nothing more than mindless zombies who apparently didn't exist before Harry came into their lives and have no other purpose than to aid the young hero in his tasks. I thought I would go to bed after this...but then I thought well there's only one more...So needless to say that's what I'm doing next lol. I promise better reviews in the future, not the sleep deprived rants I'm spamming your review board with right now lol.
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  • From Mystique887 on March 30, 2009
    I loved this chapter too! I still spotted a few mistakes and I'm really REALLY sorry that I keep pointing this out, because I know you know. Well ok I suppose I don't KNOW that you know, but it's a pretty solid assumption. The thing is I'm just way too anal retentive to be leaving a review and NOT say anything. However, I will try to work on that for both our sakes. Yours in that you won't have to listen to me go on and on about them, and mine in that I won't have my head cut off by an annoyed writer. So on a different note, I love how you included details about their society, and Lothair's motivations, and their history, why their branch is where it is and all those other little details. I simply love when authors are able to create a whole new world for their characters while still retaining who they are, which is why we love them in the first place. Oh, and the cross dressing part...lol. I just looked at the clock and it is 2:30am here lol, no wonder I'm rambling! Well I'll probably just read one more chapter and then hit the sack.
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  • From Mystique887 on March 30, 2009
    I LOL'd at how their cute little happy vibe was disrupted. Ok I loved so many things about this chapter so I'm just going to list them all. I loved the contrast of light/dark when Harry was regaining consciousness, and your descriptions and attention to detail are simply marvelous! When you were describing his new appearance and well...everything really, it just seemed so real. I also love how you are able to achieve a sense of realism that is completely beyond the grasp of many (read: most) authors. It's not just *BOOM* Hey guess what you're an elf, *BOOM* You now rule us all with ease and absolutely no transition, subtext or character development whatsoever *BOOM* Mate *BOOM* Incredible powers that literally come out of nowhere *BOOM* Hey I just defeated Voldemort, Hoorah! In the beginning Soren's speaking pattern was a little repetitive, but other than that he seems like a pretty cool character. There are still a few errors, but I'm sure they're just minor editorial issues, like when you say (or rather Harry says): "I mean, I only just been through this change." would probably be better as "I mean, I only just went through this change" or something like that. Or where you say "Each of the three High Lords resides
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  • From Mystique887 on March 30, 2009
    Ok so I've thought it out and actually "affective" could be used in that sense, however it's highly unusual...well anyways sorry for jumping you and for thinking out loud on your review page lol, I'm about half way through the second chapter and I absolutely L-O-V-E it!!! It is much much better than the first chapter and leads me to believe that any minor mix-ups came from the rigors of getting started lol. Well I'm off to finish and then review! It would be so much easier if I wasn't interrupted by that stupid server maintenance thingy that makes you play ping-pong for twenty-five when it says it'll only take fifteen lol.
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  • From Mystique887 on March 30, 2009
    Hm I just read the first chapter and it seems really interesting so far so I definitely plan to continue. I like how you actually give him some credit in recognizing Petunia as family, and a witty sense of humor lol. However, there are a few grammatical/other problems. In the first chapter you use the word "affective" when I'm sure you meant "effective". I've never heard of anyone making that mistake before, but for future reference it is "effective" and "affected", simply because the derivative words "effect" and "affect" are a noun and a verb respectively. For instance it would be okay to say "it had an effect on me," but one would never say "it had an affect on me,
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  • From hieisdragoness18 on March 29, 2009
    this seems really cool and i can't wait for more! update soon please
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