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By : ajgordon
  • From ladyedgecombe on May 27, 2009
    That was awesome. You really have a flare and I give your muse extra bonus points and a piece of chocolate cake for that one. I Severus going to brand Harry? Or maybe put a collar on him that no one can see but him and Harry? Something Dumbledore would not detect but still keep Harry bound to Severus. Sev is going to have to do something, everyone is going to be after Harry if he doesn't. Of course Sirius and Remus can't know yet either. Thanks for the Chapter.
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  • From knj4k4 on May 27, 2009
    Its so close to rape it bothers me., like how he didn't really want some of the things Severus did...I guess I want something other then a relationship based on his lust for Harry's body..sorry. Its well written but it kind of makes me sick. at least Remus and Sirius loved him...the virgin potion was a neat idea.
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  • From ladyedgecombe on May 27, 2009
    Wow! I go visit my father for the weekend and come home to find not one but three new chapters. Cookies for the next week and 100 Slytherin points!!!! Severus should definately spank Harry for his loose ways. He is an apprentice and as such, should report to Severus for everything he needs and does. Right? He will have to wear a cock ring all day to be reminded of how Severus is the master of his apprenticeship and how EVERYTHING he does as school is with Severus' approval. I can see several times where Harry is 'punished' because he let his natural self loose and Severus took exception to it. I can also see him 'punished' when Sev finds out about Harry's condition. As his master he will have to know and Harry will have to let it slip or Sev will have to find out another way. Of course this is all contigent on your muse that takes over and comes up with such delicious little plot twists and turns. Have to love that muse.
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  • From on May 26, 2009
    I think Severus should definitely bring out the paddle! That would be very entertaining!
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  • From on May 25, 2009
    that was hot. i much prefer draco as dominate. harrys such a cute little bottom. i cant wait to read more.
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  • From Elphaba on May 25, 2009
    Great chapter
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  • From TheQuiveringQuill on May 25, 2009
    oopsies, Harry was so caught up in the moment, he didn't cast a contraceptive charm when Draco had his turn.
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  • From Hambares on May 25, 2009
    I am really enjoying this story! I think your muse is doing an excellent job. And I find nothing at all wrong with Draco being dominant. I love him that way!
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  • From LadySilver on May 25, 2009
    AWSOME!! I am absolutely LOVING this story!! I cant wait to read more!! NO HET PRETTY PRETTY PLEASE!!!
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  • From wolfcathope on May 25, 2009
    wow Harry still going to be Snape's right what of children?
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  • From kyuubifreak on May 25, 2009
    damn, how do u come up with stories so fast
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  • From DaemonSadi on May 25, 2009
    Severus so need to give harry an anema. Since the Naughty boy has let himself be dirtied by someone else. He has to be pure for Severus aftr all. As for punishemnt well i cant really think of anything right now but i'll review again if i can.
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  • From BouncyTime on May 25, 2009
    Wonderful, as always. And super, amazing hot! I can't wait to see Sev and Harry together finally, and to see Sev's reaction to Harry's little secret. Thank you for updating so quickly I simply love checking the Harry Potter section and every time I see your story at the top with a new chapter it gives me a huge grin.

    My only question would be, well Draco is still only an 11 year old boy. So in general one would assume he isn't that well endowed and Harry seems to like a larger size. I say that because of the situation before Sirius ever had sex with him and he kept moving from smaller dildo to the next and with his experience with Sirius and Remus and even the Slytherin 5th year that he might like something bigger. And if that is the case why would Harry enjoy Draco quite as much? I know he loves the dirty talking, and so do I very much so, but could that override all other things as well?

    Either way, besides little things like that, it was mind blowing and super hot!

    Looking forward to the next chapter, and the next, and the next, oh hell I'm just looking forward to it all in general.

    Great job keep it up, and just let your muse run wild!!!
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  • From Juana13 on May 25, 2009
    ooooooooh, finally some harry/draco action!! yay!! : )
    i hope theres more sex between them again in the future. oh, that'd be hot for a draco/harry/severus threesome...
    cant wait for the snarry scene!
    update next chapter soon please!!! cant wait!! : )
    already looking forward to it!!
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  • From inuyoukaigirl1984 on May 25, 2009
    Wonderful story so far. I'm not one for Harry Potter stories, but you captured my interest with this one and I am glad that I started reading this one. I can't wait til you update again. Keep up the great work!
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