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By : desespoir

From emmibubbles07 on February 28, 2010
I'm not sure if I've reviewed this chapter..but I'm going to even if I did. I just re-read it again and I think you should know that I freakin love this story. This and Fete Galante! You're brilliant and I hope to see updates on both soon (or whenver you get a chance =] ).

Thanks!!
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From kazfeist on June 24, 2009
I'm so glad you updated, and the identity of the curser is intriguing...could be a Lestrange, or even an older Malfoy? Maybe, even a Lupin! Can't wait to find out more. I only hope you have our couple together and stronger by the end of this. :D
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From RynStar15 on June 21, 2009
I love this mystery, it's so intriguing! I appreciate your feedback as well, my dear. I hope you are enjoying my stories, it's an awesome feeling to know someone whose stories I admire enjoys mine :)

Can't wait to see what you have hidden up your sleeve and who your big bad wolf might be.

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From ANON - D88 on June 21, 2009
Loving your story!
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From pstibbons on June 21, 2009
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She touched the worn edges of the photograph and shook her head. She knew she would never be able to give it up. She felt like it was the one thing that she possessed from her previous life with Draco. It was the only thing that wasn’t ripped away from her when she disappeared. She knew it was stupid, non-sensical, and illogical but a part of her felt like if she kept the photograph, there would always be hope.

Why women always loved flowers so much was beyond him. They were expensive, attracted insects, and died all too quickly. At least with the aid of magic, these flowers would never die.

(Ah, but it's the fact that any man who's willing to look stupid and act as insect bait for a woman must be willing to do anything else for her...)

“I’m not disagreeing on that account. I do believe that certain wizards do have more talent for magic than others but to say that one’s entire magical power is bestowed upon them at birth? Absolutely preposterous.” She shook her head, “I find that I am the perfect textbook example against such a claim. From firsthand account, I know that my magic has improved because of my reading and endless practice.”
“See, but that’s where you’re wrong, Granger,” he teased, “You’ve always had that magical power within you. With reading and practice, you’ve simply been polishing it, making it better but not necessarily stronger or increasing its power.”

(nice discussion ... short on facts, full of opinion, modern media in a microcosm, and perfect dinner table conversation)

“Oh, by the way,” he called out, “Delightful shoes.”
She looked down at the red heels she wore and swore to burn them as soon as she got home.
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From pstibbons on June 21, 2009
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“We’re not friends, Pansy,” he said acerbically, lashing out at her thoughtlessly.
Pansy’s eyes flashed with pain for a brief moment before she quickly hid it behind a sneer

As righteous as she wanted to be, she knew she would never be strong enough to tell Draco everything. It had gone on for too long. She was too involved.
He would never forgive her.
She couldn’t lose him. He was the one constant and friend that she had her entire life and yes, she drove him crazy and yes, they often verbally attacked each other but underneath it all, she really did love him and she knew he loved her too.

And Pansy knew Draco would never cave and show her his memories because of his goddamn pride. He wanted her to come back to him on his own accord. He didn’t want to force her and he didn’t want to make her feel that she was obligated to be with him.

“Hermione,” Harry asked, his face flushing with embarrassment, “What happens in The Winter’s Tale?” He fumbled with his fingers awkwardly, “I never managed to get my hands on a copy of Shakespeare growing up. The Dursleys weren’t big readers. Shocking, I know.”
She smiled in return, squeezing his shoulder, “You can borrow some of my books. I know I have some Shakespeare lying around somewhere. Besides, it’s one of his more obscure plays anyway so don’t be embarrassed.”

(Poor Harry. Reading Shakespeare as a measure of a civilized person is rather ridiculous anyway. There are so many other, better authors.)

“Why on earth would your parents ever name you after her?”
She smiled and shrugged, “It’s supposed to be a comedy but I always found the story to be rather tragic. My mom thought it was a nice love story.”
“It is tragic,” Harry nodded in agreement, “I’m happy I didn’t read it now.”

(Hear, hear, Harry!)

He had been nothing but respectful and patient but she felt that it seemed everyone had just assumed that she would run back into his arms and everything would be roses and sunshine once again...She didn’t know what it was to love him. She barely knew him.

“I need to be honest with you,” Hermione said quietly. She played with the hem of her skirt, “I’m not her anymore.”

“Whatever it is that you remember and whoever it was that you fell in love with is a different person than the one I am now. I know you want me to just jump back into a loving relationship with you but I can’t. I don’t love you, Draco,” she said honestly, “I don’t remember you. I don’t know you... But, I want to. It won’t be easy and I know it will be frustrating for you to repeat it all again but I do want to try. I want to love you.”
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From ANON - polka dot on June 21, 2009
Draco can cook and Hermione can't, it's really is a strange universe. I had been guessing Lucius but I think I'm wrong.
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From pstibbons on June 21, 2009
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The ministry should really invest in more comfortable chairs. She wondered who she could contact about that.

“Go right ahead. You are the primary source of information on this case and it’s about time that we involve you in the actual investigation apart from questioning you.”

“What does that have to do with anything?”
“Good lord, Potter,” Draco said condescendingly, “Do you not indulge in literature whatsoever?”
“I thought muggle authors were beneath you and most pureblood interests,” Harry bit back, annoyed and slightly embarrassed by his lack of literary knowledge.

"Do you have any known enemies or people that would want to personally hurt you? I understand if you have difficulty remembering the sheer amount of people that would wish you unwell.”

“Why would they take me away only to bring me back? Why wouldn’t they just kill me outright?”
“Another form of torture, I suppose,” Draco answered honestly, “I lost you once and that killed me enough but then you finally return only not completely.” He looked down, his voice almost cracking, “It’s unbearable.” He let out a sigh, “It’s to slowly torture me until I lose my bloody mind.”

That was all she was. A pawn. Completely worthless on her own accord and easily replaceable. She wasn’t even the primary target.

She knew she shouldn’t hate him but in that moment all she wanted to do was kick and scream and hit him until he gave it all back to her. She wanted her life back. She wanted her memories back.

“I’m sorry they hurt you. If I had known-“ he stopped himself before letting out a self-deprecating sigh, “I’m sorry.”
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From pstibbons on June 21, 2009
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“I am so sick and tired of people invading my mind. It is the one thing that I have, the one thing that I am proud of and the one thing that is supposed to be mine and only mine.” She looked back at him, her eyes sad, “I was tormented in school because of my Muggle heritage and ‘muddy blood’.”
He looked away, his throat burning with shame.
“I was foul because of my status and bloodline but I didn’t care because I knew I was smarter. I knew I was better and I worked so hard to be the best. My mind was the only thing that I had and now, even that is gone.”

“Absolutely awful,” she answered honestly, “They make me out to be a maniac. They seem to have forgotten that I helped save the Wizarding world only a few years ago. I feel like everyone is just watching me as if I’m some sort of entertainment or amusement, just waiting for me to make another wrong move or something.”

Hermione had refused to give any interviews upon her return which only seemed to spawn more rumors.

(well, it's her own fault then)

“I’ll do it on one condition,” his blue eyes glimmering playfully.
“What?” Hermione beamed back.
“Promise me you’ll smile more.”

Tomorrow, she and Harry would investigate Viola’s old apartment. It felt so strange to talk about Viola as if she were a whole other person.... Just because she lost her memories didn’t mean she wasn’t still the same person, or did it? She honestly didn’t know. Viola had been kind, gentle, loyal, and extremely dedicated. She had wanted more for herself and wanted to change the world.
Wasn’t Hermione the same?
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From goldiducks on June 21, 2009
wow, this is incredibly well written. can't wait for your next update.
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From ANON - tootsie on June 21, 2009
WOW your plot make me want to more and more. great job, please keep going.
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From dragongirl on June 21, 2009
OK my money is on Lucius... Evil, evil evil. But that is what it makes it intresting.. Keep them coming...
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From margaritama on June 21, 2009
the mystery grows deeper and Hermione takes a step closer to understanding her life with Draco. Draco needs to resist Pansy already .... poor Pans. more more
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From ANON - Aun on June 21, 2009
I was waiting for you to update this, brilliant and I cannot wait! : ) Please continue this :D!
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From scarletwitchextreme on June 13, 2009
this fic just makes me want to scream in so much anger geezzzzzz, i dont know who i am more mad at draco or hermione, have u seen any more 2 stupid and clueless ppl i was wondering a while back all draco had to do was show her his memories and she would have some idea but the idiot is too much of a prde filled peacock and hermione wanted to play the blame game and hurt him. A couple of idiots they deserve each other...lol.
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