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Reviews for Family Curses

By : crissadda
  • From apkblack on November 04, 2010
    So it's a good start, and there are already 9 chapters up, but before going on to the next one just had to comment that a beta reader would be a big help to you. There are a number of errors and it really makes it an effort to get through. There are some word choices that really should be changed, like "for all intensive purposes," which you surely meant to type as "for all intents and purposes." Things like that which would make it much more readable.

    Other than the proofreading issue, it's a good start, with a strong emotional pull to the thing.
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  • From dragongirl on November 04, 2010
    Criss this was beautiful and funny........... Love it! More please!
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  • From thelovelylela on October 02, 2010
    Hey Babe,

    Really enjoy the story and would be happy to help you clean it up by fixing grammar and spellings if you wish. You are doing a wonderful job as a non-native speaker! Kudos!

    ~Tem
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  • From dragongirl on October 01, 2010
    Let the fireworks begin............ LOL
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  • From ellysetta567 on September 27, 2010
    Very well done do continue
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  • From dragongirl on September 27, 2010
    Great! Please keep them coming.
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  • From dragongirl on September 25, 2010
    The concept is simple and very nice. The complexity of the characters and the curse involve is different.. So keep them coming a little longer next time........ LOL
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  • From dragongirl on May 21, 2010
    I am intrigue... very intrigue on the path that you are trying......... Love the drama, but I am very curious and you haven't let anything slip on what will go next.......... so please update ASAP............ LOL
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  • From JillianUnleashed on May 21, 2010
    Hello,

    I just read this story (well the chapters that are completed) and I like the plot. However, there are many incorrect words used, a lot of improper tenses that are mismatched, plaural issues, comma isues, awkward word choices, and out-right grammar errors. Not to be offensive, but it reads like someone who isn't native to English wrote it. If that's the case, you're doing a great job writing in a second language. However, regardless, you really need the help of a good beta, no matter your situation. A good beta can help your decent-plot become an awesomely-written story and teach you how to improve for later works. I hope this didn't offend you, as I was only trying to help. Good luck and thanks for sharing with us.

    Jillian
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  • From lemonade8 on October 15, 2009
    I like this so far. Draco's responses are great, as are his mother's. Hermione is bitter but understandably so.
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  • From dragongirl on September 29, 2009
    Ok it catch my eyes.... and is very complex with Harry beign stuburn and all after the war, he doesn't have only one scar but many, they all are after the war. But is time for healing more than anything so bring it on this one is promising..
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  • From soldiersgirl0709 on September 28, 2009
    Hi there =) Ill admit that I read because I clicked on the reviews and saw that margaritama gave it a positive review and as she has been one of my most faithful readers I trust her opinion. Very interesting beginning. I'm not a huge fan of first person but I can see how it is important for this story if it goes the way I anticipate it to. I can tell that an important aspect will be the emotional ride the two leads are going on. Ill keep an eye out for updates.


    Happy Writing,
    S_G
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  • From margaritama on May 10, 2009
    Querida: you posted....congratulations. I'm so happy for you.
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