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From pstibbons on July 01, 2009
If Draco does end up with Jess... I like the symmetry in the way the two Malfoys choose partners of different ages. It's unlikely Draco is mature enough to settle with Jess though, so it's a pity Sev is dead. I thought you might have said in the last chapter that Hermione had, unknown to Harry and Weasel, saved Severus' life.

Best lines:

“I just want to be a part of your family.” She said. “That is all I ever wanted, a family.”

“Your mother is the woman…the woman he couldn’t save, the reason he was so determined to save me.” Jessa said tearfully.

(glad I guessed that right...)

... a large, imposing statue of a man, robes billowing behind him, arms crossed and head held high as he looked into the distance at the castle. Around him grew every species of lily a person could imagine. ...

(Nice statue. I've never forgiven Lily for abandoning Severus and refusing to forgive him when she forgave the man who bullied him into the hands of Voldemort.)

She had insisted that it not be carved smiling because would have been livid, instead his ever present scowl was carved instead.

Jessa, from what you told me he showed you affection, he was good to you and he showed you tenderness. That, from a man like Snape, was equal to a declaration of love. In truth it may have been the only way he was capable of saying it

“What he felt for my mother…it wasn’t pretty or tender, Jessa, it was obsessive and possessive.

(It certainly sounds unnatural the way Rowling described it. Some authors have suggested that Dumbledore artificially enhanced Severus' attachment to Lily so that Sev would be beholden to Albus and the Order.)

“No, please don’t push me away.” She cried, hanging on to him as though he was all that kept her from shattering into a thousand tiny pieces. “I love you, I had to say it. I don’t want to take the chance that something might happen and I never told you, I don’t want you to doubt it. I love you, Lucius, I do.”
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From pstibbons on July 01, 2009
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“I’m not a religious man, I never have been so I don’t know how to do this…but if there is a god or gods….please hear me.” He whispered, not caring that his family listened. “Save my son. I know that I am not deserving, I know that I have done nothing in my life to be worthy of the gifts I have been given but please…don’t take my son. If a life must be sacrificed then take mine, I give it freely because everyone knows I have squandered it. I will do anything, give anything to save him. Please.”

“Hermione…Lucius…my father is Morfin Gaunt.”

(Ah. Voldemort's cousin. Nice idea, that.. how old is Jess? And I'm surprised VOldemort would have introduced Lucius to his mad uncle.)

“Well you are certainly the most attractive member of that gods forsaken family.” Draco said from the doorway.

(I like the way Draco says gods instead of God - keeps in mind Pureblood's polytheist beliefs)

“Thanks…do you hate me, Hermione?” She asked, her voice small and for the first time since Hermione had known her she sounded unsure of herself.
“No…I don’t hate you, Jessa. You are not your family.”

Jessa threw her arms around Hermione and hugged her tight, kissing her cheek as she let the weight of the world lift from her shoulders.

“Draco, they are not acting like Mummy and Daddy, they are acting weird...did they get some poltergeist potion?”

Lucius’s eyes widened at the boldness of his servant then he chuckled when he realized that the staff must be rejoicing in Elias’s recovery. He had heard it said that he was a better master because of Hermione and Elias. He knew that he was a better man.

“She’s a good woman. I wish I could reward her as she deserves. It’s a shame Severus is no longer with us, I think he’d adore her.” Lucius said smiling. Hermione felt her stomach clench and she began to wonder….

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From pstibbons on July 01, 2009
best lines:
“Draco fell in love with Elias instantly and they were like two peas in a very cozy, sadistic pod.”

“Easy there, I didn’t ask you for a kidney!”

“You never show it. I’ve never seen you look anything but cool, confident and sexy.” Hermione said, awed by the tale she was hearing.
“Something I learned from him. He never showed his emotions to anyone but me.” She smiled. “I hold that very dear. Even if he couldn’t love me, he trusted me. That was enough.”

(Sounds like Jess was in love with Severus...)

“Damn it, Father, you NEVER interrupt when two hot women are holding each other! You ruined it! Now we’ll never know what could have happened!” Draco scolded his father playfully, earning himself a frown from his father.

“You look like your Daddy.”
“I may look like him but I am definitely a newer, improved model.” He smirked.

“Is that right?” Jessa liked Draco Malfoy. The gorgeous little bastard was smug as hell and she found herself growing warm and wet at the thought of having him in her bed. “Why don’t you come out front with me, Pup, let the lovers have a few moments of privacy while you and I continue this conversation.” She said, licking her lips seductively.

“Now kiss me before I hurt you, damn it.”

“No, it’s not wrong I’ve just never experienced anything like it. I like having your eyes on me when I’m making love to you, I like knowing that you aren’t lying there thinking of someone else, thinking of England.” He smirked.

Hermione smiled and opened the office door, Lucius following her into the main area of the store. Applause sounded from Draco and Jessa who were leaning against the front counter. Draco put his fingers between his teeth and whistled as though he were at a Quidditch match.

“Oh honey…the answer to my question is all over your face.” Jessa said quietly as she watched Hermione stare after Lucius. She was definitely in love, even if she didn’t recognize it.

(Highly approve of the Draco/JEss - was going to suggest it before I read this chapter)

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From pstibbons on July 01, 2009
Didn't expect this from Draco. Fine work!

best lines:

“I did but they were wrestling and I don’t think they wanted to play with me.” Elias said.
“Wrestling you say?” Draco smirked. Way to go, Dad.. “No, they were playing a grown up game. Next time keep knocking until they answer before you go in. Speaking of which…did you knock on my door?

Draco couldn’t resist reaching out to touch the soft sandy curls. He still couldn’t believe that he had a little brother.
“Really? Just us? Like real brothers?” Elias asked excitedly.
“Yes, really. Elias…we are real brothers.” Draco said smiling.

“I don’t know about that, it was the most fun I’ve ever had in this house fully clothed.”

Lucius frowned, unsure how to handle the situation. Draco had never been a rebellious child, at least not at home, the situation was unfamiliar, especially given that Draco was an adult.

“Who won?”
“Won what?”
“I came to see you this morning and you didn’t hear me, you were wrestling. Who won? It looked like Daddy was winning but when you didn’t talk to me I left and got Draco up.”
“It was a tie.” .
“Oh, that’s good! That means you get to wrestle again for a tie-breaker!”

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From HarryGinny4eva on June 30, 2009
Wild, loud clapping going on over here. :-) You know I love my happy endings, so I am waiting to see what you do. Their declarations were utterly and completely perfect. Thank you! Hg4eva
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From liagiba84 on June 30, 2009
Aww, shoot. I guess this means Severus really is dead. I'm so upset about that! But, at least the statue's robes billowed. Lol, that made me smile.
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From dragongirl on June 30, 2009
Thank you I need this light chapter after a box of tissues from the other..LOL
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From pstibbons on June 30, 2009
BEST LINES
“I can’t wait. In the first half hour he called me a dildo, outed you and dad, said he wanted to eat a whore and asked a house elf to play trains. The kid is a riot!” Draco laughed as they turned into the small dining room.

He wished with all his heart that he had been a child like Elias. The boy said and did whatever popped into his head.

“You should keep your penis to yourself. It’s private and Mum will get really mad if you don’t.” Elias said seriously.
“Keep my penis to myself….okay….I’ll try really hard.” Draco was trying to keep his laughter at bay but it was impossible. The child was just too precious and Draco was already taken with him. He understood now why his father hadn’t been able to walk away, he wouldn’t have either and suddenly wished that when he saw her years before in Diagon Alley that he had known the baby in the carriage was his little brother

“The kid would make a brilliant spy.” Draco said, in awe of the things Elias observed with no one the wiser.

“Yes! We buzzed the owlery and made all the owls shriek and scatter! There were feathers and poop everywhere!” Elias said excitedly. “And Draco let me pee in the bushes!”
“What charming habits you teach your younger brother already.” Lucius said through clenched teeth. Draco, however, did not look in the slightest bit repentant

“And he taught me a new song! There once was a witch from Paris, and I wasn’t quite certain what color her hair is! I’d almost given up hope when the wind caught her robes….”

“He could be a Gryffindor.” Hermione interjected. Both Lucius and Draco gave her an incredulous look. “Okay, probably not.” She admitted.

“A nanny-elf?” She looked over at Lucius with a frown on her face. “Lucius…”
“I know you disapprove, but Nonie is paid a wage. She isn’t a free elf and she doesn’t wish to be but she begrudgingly accepts a wage because she really wants to be Elias’s nanny.” Lucius hoped that would be enough to ease her mind on the subject.

Being a Malfoy servant after the war was a world different from being one prior, she was now very proud to serve the house of Malfoy and its softer, gentler masters.

“Knock…I can knock!” He said.
“Knock and wait for permission before you enter. Understand?”
“So I don’t catch you naked?” Elias quipped.

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From smmz79 on June 30, 2009
yeah what a great chap i am sooo glad that jessa got some closure now maybe she could move onto draco.... what a passionate love scene between hermione and lcius and i am so glad that they finally admitted their feelings.... this was the perfect end to my day... we moved all day and cleaned and it is sooo freaking hot that this was really nice to unwind too.....
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From LadyofClunn on June 30, 2009
Oh my. Crying through two chapters straight. Well done with all the emotions. I obviously can hardly contain myself.

Somebody better get Jessa to the portrait and Severus into it. He deserves to know.

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From Laurakkc on June 30, 2009
Wow--that was lovely. Snape's epitaph made me tear up. I hate to see this story end. I thoroughly enjoyed it. I hope you bring back the little Malfoy family. Elias is a hoot--his malaprops are just too funny. Thank you for all the entertainment.

--laura

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From chickaboo on June 30, 2009
Okay that last bit was just beautiful. Very emotional, I was tearing up ya know. Poor Jessa, that made me tear up too. Sheesh, what's with me? lol Fantastic update, I can't wait for more!
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From MegNutz on June 30, 2009
YAY! lol that was another great chapter and maybe snape could make an exception and come to his portrait?? hmmm just a suggestion can't wait for the next chapter keep up the good work!
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From NearlyHeadless on June 30, 2009
Bring Severus back to life!
I realize that probably won't happen, but it WOULD make me happy. I really love this fic, actually all your fanfiction is amazing. You're fics are my everyday little pick-me-up. Write on! :)
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From lilashannah on June 30, 2009
I have no idea what to say.That was great on so many different levels.You left me wanting more.
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