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Reviews for In Love and War

By : crysta656
  • From margaritama on June 05, 2009
    Thanks for letting us know where you posted. Why take it down from GE? ff.net is a strange forum, I don't post there because NC-17 stories are breaking their rules (yes, I've seen what's posted there but its not supposed to be). :-)

    Now, I hope that this "beta" comment wasn't from a review at GE? If so, you need to report that person to the administrator...flamers are dealt with swiftly and justly by the moderator there, who is AWESOME. Leave that comment up so they can see it. Onto this supposed "beta's" comment, well, I'm a beta and a writer and I don't think it's crap. Who the hell does this person think they are to be so disrespectful. A true beta offers con-crit to a writer in a way that improves their writing, they offer insights to the character, point out holes, help with character development and story ideas. They do not tear down a writer or their work. I can tell you that I've read many a terrible fics (grammar, flow, ideas, spelling, plot, etc.) and I've never, ever said anything was crap. If the writer asked for honest feedback, I would offer it - in a polite, mature and constructive manner. If I didn't like or couldn't take the story, then I simply don't continue to read it.

    It seems to me, in my humble opinion, that this "beta" is just a frustrated wanna be who is jealous of someone posting a fic. Who knows their motivations. However, I do know that you should never let it deter you from writing, if you enjoy it and if you feel a passion. Finish your story because you want too, not based on what others opinions are. Remember its just an opinion and not the be all, end all.

    I, for one, look forward to how you will get these two characters together, in light of the circumstances and his feelings for her. How will he overcome his disdain? How does he explain what he did? And how does his family react? What will Hermione's friends do when they realize he saved her life several times?
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  • From ANON - annmarie on June 05, 2009
    i think your doing a great job i like the story so far
    don't let anyone make you feel less about your work
    keep up the good work and get a new beta
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  • From ANON - VoraciousReader on June 04, 2009
    DON'T ABANDON YOUR OWN WORK!!! I don't know who your beta is, but it is not their job to tell you it's rubbish. A beta is supposed to help you improve your writing skills, such as grammar, tense and pacing, not act like a bloody theatre critic from the Times. They brit pick and help with details, thereby improving the story. Read the above reviews; we all like it. Don't leave us out in the cold, wondering what happened, please?
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  • From curikitten on June 04, 2009
    You know, I've read a lot of fic. A lot. And it's true that this isn't the world's greatest work of literature, which is probably a good thing, as anyone who wrote that would deserve to get paid for it. That doesn't mean you shouldn't keep working on it. For one thing, I really want to know what happens next, even if it's the clich
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  • From margaritama on May 30, 2009
    well written, heart-breaking and so tangible. my heart was breaking for Lucius loss and his fixation on Hermione.

    she will, hopefully, be his salvation and lay down new bricks for a path leading to a new life.
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  • From CoCoM on May 28, 2009
    I am intrigued by this beginning! Interesting twist with the binding (and what was the hair sniffing and the cheek caressing?!?). Looking forward to updates soon.
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  • From margaritama on May 28, 2009
    I find Lucius contradictory....interesting. It feels as if the story will go beyond the battle leading us to a post-war era, which I always enjoy.
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  • From catysmom1028 on May 27, 2009
    I like it. Please update soon.

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  • From margaritama on May 27, 2009
    well THAT was unexpected....Lucius put himself in a whole lotta trouble.
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  • From ANON - VoraciousReader on May 27, 2009
    You have a gift for succinct description and for personal motivations, I am looking forward to the rest of this! Keep going!
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  • From Citten on May 27, 2009
    okay i absoluately love the story!!!! i am really looking forward to reading more, lots more!! i just ask for a few things 1)DONT ABONDONG IT--first and formost if nothing else! 2)write as much as you can and 3)can you make it long and dont leave anything out! :) i think that you will do very well and that you are doing a great job of joining in on being a great lucius and hermione writer!!! please continue and soon!!!! i would love regular updates but i do know life gets in the way sometime so...anyways just keep writing and post asap! :)
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