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Reviews for See me for detention

By : dragon88
  • From JigokuDayu on July 11, 2010
    Well, you definitely got my tastes closely matched! "Secretary" is one of my all-time favourite films and Snape is my greatest passion. (I roleplayed an OC with a Maggie Gyllenhaal PB for years who got to be Snape's sub and eventual wife, so I just had to read this. Said Snape player is now my life partner!) All that is to say, great fic and great premise!

    As for criticisms, I think a beta-reader would really help your writing. It's much easier to find the errors if there's another person pointing them out. And there were a few bits that weren't my thing. Mostly he seemed a bit more Movie!Snape than Canon!Snape, but I don't hold it against you. Other than that, it was a lot of fun to read. Very yummy! If you add more, I will certainly make sure to read it. Thanks for posting it.
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  • From missanimegrl on March 09, 2010
    I'm enjoying what you've got so far! Quite good scenes, and I can imagine him doing something like this. His student is quite an odd girl. I want to see how far you can take this, or at least how far it goes. ^.^ A very enjoyable read.
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  • From fatima89 on December 16, 2009
    I actually thought it was great; I think you preserved Snape's demeanor very well, he didn't seem not one bit out of character !
    I look forward to the other chapters
    5/5
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  • From hotboz2007 on November 11, 2009
    WOW!!! I really never read fics with an original character but this is pure FIRA!!! I loved every min of it! you write very well. Plz say you will update soon??
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  • From Kayrox133 on November 02, 2009
    I hope you continue. Yasmin is such a naughty girl!
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  • From lexii019 on August 19, 2009
    that was sooo hott! Pls continue it!
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  • From on July 22, 2009
    I like the story a lot, I do hope you update. As I read through the two chapters...it sort of feels like your holding back and not coming up to your full potential and the stories just don't seem "original" it lacks something...Otherwise very good job and I hope you update you seem to get better and better with every chapter.
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  • From PensievePerson on July 20, 2009
    the second chapter was so much better. You said you want suggestions so I suggest that you don't try to copy "Secretary" film anymore. I thought that was funny how she spelt Slytherin wrong. And Yasmin's defiance in the beginning was also oddly amusing. I think you should continue. It was very hot
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  • From PensievePerson on July 20, 2009
    Yes, I can see the Secretary film resemblance. Nicely done. Too bad Snape wants to restrain himself from having with his student, Yasmin.
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  • From AlabasterPrincess on June 21, 2009
    Nice tension! I look forward to seeing this progress.
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