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Reviews for Deserving (Final Chapter)

By : tana97
  • From ANON - Honey on October 19, 2009
    great story, cant wait for the next update. keep it up.
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  • From ANON - Bunnybop05 on October 18, 2009
    Finally it would seem our lil wizard has finally begun to show his heart. I hope Singles suffer a slow and excruciating demise.
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  • From ANON - k on October 18, 2009
    How could i have missed something so great as this. I can't believe how good this is.
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  • From RoseKelly on October 18, 2009
    I say let Harry run for minister and win and kick everyones ass...even though we know he would hate the job. He would be good at it & he would clean up the corruption. Great chapter.
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  • From ANON - anhelo on October 18, 2009
    Tomorrow it's my birthday and as a gift I really would like an update!Pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee lol
    I promess you a long review in exchange!
    Anhelo
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  • From helga1967 on October 16, 2009
    Me encant
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  • From ANON - Kirikos on October 16, 2009
    I really, really, really love this fanfic! I was reading from first chapter to 26 in 3 days and you really improve your writing. Im so curious about all next chapters, especially about Severus, because i love him so much in this story. I think that he deserve a little good feelings from Harry!
    And Richard and Kreacher are both lovely :D But I dont like Dennis and Hermione.
    Kirikos
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  • From ANON - Nestedis on October 15, 2009
    WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW!
    I just read through your story the whole day. I couldn't stop to read... it was so awesome, overwhelming, stunning, amazing, wow... It was the best story I read in a long while.
    Your story is amazing! The relationship between Harry and Severus is so... I don't know how to say it... First I wanted to punch Harry in the face for all the things he did to Severus. But now he is so caring. And I just can figure out what has happened to Severus. Why is he forgiving all the things to Harry?

    I AM REALLY CURIOS HOW THE STORY WILL GO ON! YOU ARE GORGEOUS!
    (and sorry for my poor English, it is not my native language...)
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  • From Kalendral9 on October 15, 2009
    So... I wonder when Harry will stop calling him Snape and call him Severus... Just a thought... K
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  • From MalfoysBitch on October 13, 2009
    I loved this chapter!! Dont be unhappy with it!!
    Couldnt wait for the update!!
    Love Sly...
    Lets find him a girlfriend...
    Tara maybe!!lol!! ;-p

    Cant wait for the next one!!
    You developed the characters excellently!!
    :-)
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  • From ANON - batfacedgirl on October 13, 2009
    First, I just want to tell you that I have loved reading this story. I have literally checked for updates every day. There are many things I enjoy about this story, most notably the interesting dynamic between Snape and Harry, Snape's perspective that he deserves what he's getting, Harry's struggle to maintain a code of behavior contrary to his instinct, and the incredible possibilities for all things positive, like growth, forgiveness and redemption. There are many great elements that I really enjoyed (I especially like the forshadowing of Millie's miniature love interest!).

    My one critique is in the characterization of Harry. He was growing and evolving very well and in truth he still is but I feel like his transformation is happening at a rate that, while realistic, is too slow for a work of fiction. I remember you mentioning in an author's note that the story was getting long and you had to pick up the pace and I agree with your point. He and Snape are inching along but I find myself growing frustrated with him. I would really love to see him become less selfish in their love life, not just their sex life but the whole thing. He is immature and I know that has been a very affective plot device so far but I would love to see something happen that would thrust him forward into maturity and really allow him to become a man. Their relationship is just primed for this right now. Also, their love life is becoming much more passionate, even bordering on kinky as of this last chapter, but I would love to see it go deeper. Rather than sex toys, I would love a good old fashioned cathartic screaming match while naked in bed where they both got a whole bunch of crap off their chests. That way, Snape could re-emerge a little and Harry could vent his pain. If this was followed by some hot, steamy make-up sex, I would find a way to live with it ;)

    These are, of course, just suggestions that I offer up because you have so thoroughly enthralled me with your story. Keep up the good work.
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  • From Spiceholmes on October 13, 2009
    Oh finally here it is and don't worry take your time.

    Oh a this was good, but yes a but I want more interaction between Harry and Severus, but besides that this was really a great chapter. Cannot wait for the next one.
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  • From ANON - sandfull_a on October 13, 2009
    I would like you to know that I enjoy this story greatly and was very happy to see an update! There wasn't a lot of action (meaning, not only sexual one) in this chapter, but I'm sure we get to see a great deal more of unexpected twists and turns in the upcoming ones. The relationship between our heros is changing - they seem to begin accepting each other and their positions, so for now the exitement of the chapters is lower than of the first ones when the situation was "sharper". But I am sure every reader of the story has enough faith in the author to keep us, Harry and Severus on our toes)) I know - I do! Best luck and no more computer problems!!
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  • From mrequecky on October 13, 2009
    Loved this chapter and sorry to hear about your old laptop... In regard to writing, why not use Open Office? It's for free and similar to word.
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  • From Mizzfreestyle on October 12, 2009
    The love making between Harry and Snape are getting so much more passionate. I loved that you updated today. I was having this terrible, shitty and cold day and I was like, Moon of the Sea hasn't updated... grr... when is she going to udpate? And I get home to discover that you did and I made sure to get my homework out of the way before reading and it made my day warm and fluffy. Any who, I hope that Sly will see that Harry isn't a bad person. It's wonderful that Harry and Snape are starting to communicate more. When are they going to concieve their second child? And will Harry actually allow Snape the luxury of the potion? So much more to come. And I am looking forward to it all. Thank you so much for updating.
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