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Reviews for Deserving (Final Chapter)

By : tana97

From ANON - Pammy on August 28, 2009
Whoa okay first of all... you get me to read this story where Harry comes off harsh... (Im so used to a submissive harry... although a dominate one now and then in nice) But such a Harry in pain like you have threw my for a loop... and then I just keep reading (Because your good like that) and Im getting hooked... on the day I played hookie at work and called out.. I spend all day in bed reading this story...

At some point I actually grew a penis and had a BONER for the first time in my life because rapist harry was hot... and then him saying "Obey" totally had me rushing into a shower.. and then you just STOP RIGHT WHEN SEVERUS AND I WERE RIGHT THERE>....

Okay so I dont really have a penis... such a shame... but I was breathless and my eyes hurt because I forced myself to read through my crappy cell phones internet browser... and now all day at work today I kept thinking "What will happen next" and then I tried to decorate a wedding cake while I mentally had a boner thinking back to when Harry kept saying "MINE" in the shower!

I NEEEEED MORE! Please your beyond amazing your pratically cosmic!

Honestly its great... it took me a while to become used to a submissive Snape... because in my heart he will always dominate me.. but it wasnt bad. I like his defending Harry infront of others... I do want some more smutt... some more of Harry being tender... I WANT A THROW DOWN WITH HARRY AND NEVILLE over Snape... please... can you please do that for me *batts eyelashes*

And email me, or txt me so I know when you update! I'll never be able to sleep again til I know what happen! I want there to be mouth on mouth kissing... I think thats what would really make my heart explode... because I always think that kissing on the mouth is sooooo personal (Like in Pretty Woman when Vivian said she never kissed on the mouth) yea... I want that...

okay so I dont think I threatened you yet... *grabs a packet of salt* BUT i have been known to throw salt in the eyes of people who dont update! lol Cheers
Pammy
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From ANON - darrena on August 28, 2009
Beautiful chapter!!! I loved the claiming scene :D Brilliantly written.
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From mrequecky on August 27, 2009
Wow, I really loved how this chapter turned out!
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From starstruck86 on August 27, 2009
Wow, what a wonderful chapter. That little surge of humanity from Harry when he realises what he's about to do in the same position as the first time ever, that melted me.

And yes, I do get surprises like that in my writing -when I set out to do one thing and the characters take me in a completely different direction. Mostly Severus' fault as well. Maybe it's something about him in particular? LOL.

xx

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From ANON - kickthemoon on August 24, 2009
This is a great story because the characters are intriguing and developing. I agree with the author who wrote that you had grown as a writer. There is a real difference between the first few chapters and the later ones - though I would suggest you keep the services of your beta, the last couple of chapters had a few obvious typos etc and the scene where Draco and Snape were captured wasn't particularly clear.

I keep imagining what a great father Snape will make and all the stuff he will teach him, like reading, writing and perhaps preparing potions ingredients even if not the actual brewing. It does make me wonder if Harry will come to resent Snape's role in his child's life.

You've got a good plot going here and your portrayal of Harry makes it hard to know what to feel. Obviously I hate that he has become someone who thinks that slavery is an acceptable punishment for any crime but at the same time those understanding glimpses that Snape has make it clear that Harry is suffering too. He isn't normally one to stay too long in the quagmires of self-pity, but everyone has their limit.

This is one story that I definitely want to keep reading - do you send e-mails when updates are up? I'd love to be included on that list, if there is one, please! Thanks

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From kneeya on August 24, 2009
Why is everyone so quick to turn on Harry? Don't they realize the anger he's been holding? The guilt? The confusion? Of course not. Instead they betray him...again. What they should have done was follow Molly Weasleys example, and also to try and help Harry with his issues, and he has plenty, but instead they leave Harry with the only outlet there is 'Severus Snape'. Instead of turning there backs on him again, they could have helped by giving him another outlet, giving him something or someone else to vent, helping him open up, deal with his pain and suffering, because he is hurting and he's taking it out on someone else and they are letting it happen and because they are ignoring him, and to busy pointing the finger, they don't see the changes. They act like their stuff don't stink! And Neville! The jerk, yea that's right, I said it, that little snot-nosed infant! When he had trouble at school with his spells during the DA training Harry didn't ridicule him, Harry believed in him and helped him through it! And Hermoine, nobody wanted to be her friend except Harry! And don't get me started on Ron Weasley, he's the worst! And they turn their backs, a bunch if backstabbers is what they are! Self-righteous pricks! Poor Severus suffers because they're idiots! Most of them didn't even like Snape let alone trust him, and now they're all buddy buddy! Screw them! And did they forget how Snape tormented Potter during his school years? It doesn't excuse Harry's behavior, but did they get angry at Severus? Did they turn their backs on him? Did they get on his case? Of course not, they ignored it, well what did they think was going to happen with the abuse from Snape (and it was abuse people), and from his ever loving family, the death of a beloved mentor/grandfather figure at the hands of Snape,and let's not mention the revealing of half a prophecy to a psycho (delivered by none other than Snape...again), which inadvertently caused the death of his parents plus other stuff (did I mentioned he had issues)heads up people!). The war changes people, it's a fact, but none of them started out like Harry did, he wasn't given a chance to be a child, Longbottom may have lost his parents in a way, but he still had his grandma, who did Harry have? And not one of them offered console. Not one of them tried to be a real friend they just left him to deal with everything on his own and practically threw a child at a psychopath. I didn't mean to ramble on, but hope you get my meaning. Oh, by the way I really do love this story, even if I'm not to happy with some of the characters. It's not to often I get excited about something, and this has me excited. I know or at least I hope things turn out well for Harry and Severus(they are ofter all two of my favorites). Up-dates are just not coming in fast enough. Keep up the good work. Impatiently waiting, and thank you.
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From stray523 on August 24, 2009
That chapter just left me confused. What was with the collars and chains and why is Harry mad at Severus now?
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From ANON - Schwertlilie on August 24, 2009
That was a really great chapter again!!!
I can
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From mrequecky on August 24, 2009
Wow, I wonder what Harry's gonna do...
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From Nikte on August 24, 2009
I LOVE YOUR STORY!!!!!!!!! I don
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From ANON - Logan on August 23, 2009
I really do love this story, I think I'm addicted to it now - I check everyday just incase there is an early update and then I reread the entire story or just my favourite chapters.

As you said, the story is your hobby, one that you have gifted to your many dedicated readers, and if you feel the need to reduce to updating once a week then I'm happy with that - my Deserving addicted brain will readjust and acclimatise soon enough. I'd rather you were a happy author than a stressed one.

Thank you for another great chapter
Logan
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From ANON - arisblaze on August 23, 2009
You might want to explain who captured Snape & Draco & why-
it lost me.
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From linky4u on August 23, 2009
Another great chapter. thanks for the update. I love how Harrys and Severus relationships slowly develops. But when are Harry going to realise his true feelings..? I fully understand that you gonna update once a week,it
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From MalfoysBitch on August 23, 2009
Wow!! I abso love this story!!
I hope the shock of Sev's attack has shown harry his feelings for him!! We can all see it!!lol!!
Love this story!
I hope you enjoy writing it as much as i enjoy reading it!!
If its stressing you - take a break!! I know all you loyal readers will wait!!
;-)
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From Veracityrules on August 23, 2009
Thank you for the update. Excellent chapter as usual.

It's completely understandable that you are changing your publishing routine. You are right that writing should be a hobby and not a chore. Great work anyway and look forward to the new weekly updates :)
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