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Reviews for Deserving (Final Chapter)

By : tana97
  • From melitabel on March 07, 2010
    This is a very compelling story. I believe you have said its nature has changed since you started writing it (or that's how I interpreted your comments), and it shows. I'm not sure why I read the first chapter - mpreg really turns me off, and the first chapter was so grim I didn't think I could possibly like it. But I dipped into some of the chapters ahead, got sucked in, and went back & read it all. So with that unpromising beginning (I hated the first chapter, and am not into slash or mpreg), you're such a strong storyteller that you won me over.

    You are dealing with some powerful themes here, such as the malleability of human sexual preferences. I am interested in how you see Harry and Snape as becoming content with each other as sexual partner, as well as emotionally bonded. Both are presented as thinking of themselves as heterosexual to start. Do you think they were ignorant of their own preferences, living conventional lives, or has the experience of having a child mutated them in some way physically, or is it simply that their bonding over the child and having the home that each craves has changed what each sees as sexually desirable?

    I must say I want to slap this meek Snape, and I can't really believe that JKR's Snape could have turned into your Snape. Perhaps it's because you are very inconsistent in showing point of view. In the early part of the story, Snape certainly doesn't seem to feel he needs to redeem himself through physical pain - even up to the point where Harry makes the marriage conditions clear, Snape doesn't seem to feel this. (It may be that as you wrote, you changed the story so much that much more explaining needs to happen to make the early Snape consistent with the Snape you are now writing - this is so good I feel it might be worth re-writing from beginning to end when you are done). I also don't think your Snape who wants to be controlled could possibly have survived the years as a double agent. If his personality disintegrated at some point after Voldemort was vanquished, it's not apparent (to me) when that happened.

    I disagree with the Neville haters! If not for Neville wanting Snape for himself, Harry would still be in more denial than he is at this point. Frankly I think Harry must have internalized something dark while being a Horcrux, as the only explanation for his behavior now. I've wanted to slap him an awful lot too! Maybe he's the one that should bear the last child in pain; he's certainly got some repayment to do.

    One of the things that really interests me is the amount of fanfic that deals with how hard it would be for the wizarding world to live together again after the defeat of LV. Rowling's fantasy is that everything is jolly again, Drace and Harry don't like each other but that's fine - but many of us know better. I love these fics.

    Anyway, I'm now addicted to this story and look forward to Sunday evenings. Thank you!



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  • From MalfoysBitch on March 03, 2010
    I love this story!!
    There is still so much for you to write... try not to stress about it, i think it will turn out great anyway!!
    I think Harry will be all up for helping out the little snakes... dont think he would want to keep them from their magic...
    Love the progression of this story!! It wasnt just two chapters in, and he realised he loved sev... Its a real story!!
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  • From Spiceholmes on March 03, 2010
    It's a girl!

    Oh this chapter was wonderful, you did left me with a question what happened to Harry? You did left us blank there. However, after all that I still want more, as to your question. I do want Severus to help them get their magic back, but I know if he does what then will happen to him. Could they conquer the evil man or would they get burn in the process? In the other hand, if he returns the magic, wont he show that they can't be intimidated no more and won't Madam Sprout help them out after all she does love Severus like a friend. She can stop all this nonsense that is being going on, I think is time that she took her job seriously and step up.

    Keep it up, your doing great.

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  • From Kalendral9 on March 01, 2010
    YES!!! Help! Need more...
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  • From Elvira on February 28, 2010
    OOOOOHHHH! Thats tough, I have no idea what you should do.

    HHHMMMMMM.....

    Well hope you figure it out, and update real soon!
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  • From ANON - veracityrules on February 28, 2010
    Oh deep joy, another update! Yet again another spiffing chapter to this excellent fic. Please keep up the great work. You have so many followers and we crave each and every update! You are an excellent writer who produces fantastic story lines; a born Snarry writer ;)
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  • From MalfoysBitch on February 24, 2010
    Oh no, I so dont want you to wrap this story up!! I Love it!!
    Just got a chance to read the last few chapters... AMAZING!!!

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  • From Spiceholmes on February 23, 2010
    Oh, wonderful chapter. I was sad to learn that Harry had to treat him rude in order for Severus to get pregnant, however, it was so cute that he actually try to help Severus with out Severus knowing what he was doing. Making him pay with out making him suffer that was nice. I love the way you made the reader go through every emotional step that Severus felt while he was being taken, lost, scare, and emotionally drain.

    I cannot wait for the next chapter, and I knew it. This story is almost over, but I be sad, I will miss my boys. You're doing wonderful keep it up.
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  • From ANON - veracityrules on February 23, 2010
    No...no not the end of this story! Never ending! Just keep going and going and oing and going and going! We want to see the birth of all the Potter-Snape babies.
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  • From ryuchan001 on February 23, 2010
    omg, this story is like the first one to ever make me cry. i feel so bad for snape, and i can so understand how he is feeling. i LOVE ur story.
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  • From countesszero on February 23, 2010
    lovely! too bad that even the longest stories have to end sometimes :) i enjoyed it a lot! snape's suffering was so deliciously long and graphic (thanks for that!)

    another round of pregnant!severus would be so nice but i suppose one shouldn't be too greedy :)
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  • From mrequecky on February 23, 2010
    Yay, awesome chapter!
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  • From dropedonmyhead on February 22, 2010
    I've spent the better part of my day reading this and I just love it! I wanted to email you and ask you to consider posting your stories at TheRabidReader.com, cause I'm just completely in love with this story!
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  • From PantherRain on February 17, 2010
    Yes! Finally! ^_^ Dear sweet Harry...
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  • From lockheart on February 16, 2010
    I love this story sooo much. I have followed it from the beginning and every time you update I feel like it is Christmas. I love that Harry finally pulled his head out of his ass. I cannot wait until the next chapter.
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