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Reviews for HP: Crimson Silver Dragon Severus/Lucius/Harry

By : CrisNoWait
  • From ANON - Elfwyn on June 28, 2009
    I agree with Rainien about the beta. The misuse of words were a little bit annoying. As well as monarch instead of lord or aristocrat, there was also russet for Harry's hair. Harry was never a redhead, black/ebony in the books and brown/brunette in the movies, which you did get right at the very end. The spell was cool and the sex hot.
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  • From Winky73 on June 26, 2009
    Very HOT!!! Abso-fr***in-lutely love love this threesome!
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  • From ANON - kunitsu on June 25, 2009
    Definitely a hot one, loved it
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  • From alma on June 25, 2009
    Wow, that was totally hot!
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  • From Elphaba on June 25, 2009
    Damn that was HOT! Loved it!
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  • From ANON - Rainien on June 25, 2009
    Not a bad fic. The spell was a good plot device to bring the three together. You could really do with a good beta. Verb tenses shifted several times from present to past. A monarch is a king/queen/emperor/empress; Lucius is none of these. The may sound picky, but theere's only one R in prostate. ProstRate (as you have it) is to humble yourself before someone, as the Death Eaters do before Voldemort. (Sorry, but that's a pet peeve of mine.) My suggestion is to find a beta - a GOOD one. Readers will have a much more enjoyable time with your fics.
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