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Reviews for I'll Be There For You

By : Kalendral9
  • From stargirl77 on September 07, 2009
    I really like the beginning of this story and think you're doing a great job plot-wise so far. The thing that I find in your writing that you need to watch out for is your tenses. There are parts in the story where in one paragraph you go from using the past tense to the present and back to the past...I don't know if your first language is English or not but this is a really common mistake while writing. The other thing that will make me stop reading this story regardless of how much I like the plot, are the author's note INSIDE the actual story itself. At the beginning or the end of the chapter...that's fine, whatever. But when I'm lost in a story I don't want to suddenly be jerked out of it by the author telling me something that I didn't really need to know about what he or she just said. If you like to do that, fine, I can't stop you but I really like this story so far and I don't want to stop reading it. Those mid-chapter author's notes will stop me.
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  • From DracoHarry on September 04, 2009
    I love how this story is going so far. It kind of reminds me of stuff that my mom and i went through when i was younger.
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  • From Veracityrules on September 04, 2009
    Thanks for the update. I would like to make a suggestion, if I may. Try not to add comments/authors notes mid story as it can detract from the fic, pulling the reader out of the story and lose the reality of it. If you feel you need to comment on a particular part, then you could leave it to an author's note at the end of the chapter, maybe with an asterisk to denote the part you wish to comment on (like a reference key).

    In answer to your question you can bold, italic and underline by the following; start by inserting these before the text you wish to change.

    < b > or < i > or < u > (don't put the spaces though, this is just for demonstation purposes) then when you want to complete the changes, on the end word, do the same but add a / like so: < / i > or < / u > or < / b > (again don't put spaces in) and no spaces before or after the word.

    will this work on the review section?
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    will this work on the review section? (it might not work on the review section but it definitely works on the chapter/text part. You can also do any number of combinations such as bold underlined etc... simply put one type the outer and the other type next to it as the inner.
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    Hope this helps you. :)
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  • From bloodsoakedninja on September 03, 2009
    another lovely chapter, i cant wait for the next update. I wonder what Blaise is up to and if he's gone to see Narcissa yet? I feel as though hes got something brewing in the background. I'm guessing that if Narcissa's under house arrest is Lucius still locked up in azkaban? I'm also glad that you kept Remus and Tonks alive. well update soon i cant wait for another chapter!
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  • From hieisdragoness18 on September 03, 2009
    awww that was sweet poor draco
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  • From chantalmalfoy on September 02, 2009
    very good for a first time fic. you could use a beta. but other than a few typing errors and such, it's absolutly great!
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  • From sonykit on September 01, 2009
    pretty good chapter although i felt it was a little rushed, especially draco's comfortable attitude with harry. some of the consistency in characterizations were lost. while i get the out-of-school thing, i felt like the wariness should have been more prominent, especially give the premise of their meeting. then again, that is just me. :D on the other hand, i find the story building up in terms of relationships and characters. the premise for grimmauld place being used as a safe house was well-justified and touched on the resolution harry felt with finding purpose in using the house. i like the use of code names and am looking forward to the lifestyle offered at his safe house. the kids seemed pretty happy. also, loved the thing about the family tree - i find it touching especially the line about it being what sirius would have wanted. :)
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  • From Dezra on August 31, 2009
    As a person who entered one of these homes, I'm impressed you described Draco's reactions so well. It's a interesting story and concept. Looking forward to more.
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  • From Veracityrules on August 31, 2009
    Sorry I didn't leave a review yesterday. Anyway, I love this fic. I can't wait for more. I see how you acknowledged all the reviewers names at the beginning of this chapter. I don't think that will last long...you are gonna get a HELL of a lot of reviews for this fic. It'll read like a bloodly honour roll before you know it!
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  • From hieisdragoness18 on August 30, 2009
    awww! this is great! poor draco though
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  • From reid on August 30, 2009
    It a good start catchy Harry and Draco's interaction is light and comfortable,
    looking forward to some updates
    S.
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  • From gert123ca on August 30, 2009
    Great start. Very interested in where this will go.
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  • From LadySesshoumaru on August 30, 2009
    another chapters that has left me wanting more....please supply it to me i need my fix...lol(^__^) just joking but i do need another chapter to sate ny curiousity....and draco's reaction to seeing harry was priceless
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  • From Angelus82 on August 30, 2009
    This is a very good story...
    I just have to wait and see the first meeting between Harry and Blaise. I don't think balise will be the winner ^^. Love andy too. Is so sweet and maybe Harry can be is new father... a better one!!!
    More soon please
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  • From starstruck86 on August 30, 2009
    I really like this, the whole idea is very touching. Can't wait to see how this progresses and will be eagerly awaiting updates.


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