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Reviews for Yule Ball Debauchery

By : MayorHaggar
  • From jessirose85 on September 04, 2009
    Great story...can you keep going and make a side Hermione/Viktor pairing??
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  • From SalonKitty on September 03, 2009
    It was like two different stories. You start out...with two fourteen year-olds....building this sweet, little romantic scenario between these two kids, who *gosh* really, really like each other *big eyes*.

    Then, after what starts out as an innocent first kiss (and would be the second one for Harry, the first with tongue), Pavarti is grabbing his cock and the two fourteen year olds are acting like they are in a porn movie, complete with dirty talk.


    Yeah, a tad unbelievable. But your writing is decent enough, you just need to decide whether you want to write a teen romance or a PWP. The two tones you have going on here clash horribly.
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  • From ANON - karen on September 03, 2009
    finally a story with an un-common character as the staring female lead!
    great idea, great story!
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