Click Here!

Reviews for Last Hope

By : Emeraldawn
  • From horsesrules on February 21, 2014
    Write more it's good
    Report Review

  • From misaki on December 14, 2009
    wow!!! this is really good! please email me when you update it! i can't wait to see what will happen next!
    Report Review

  • From thrnbrooke on November 29, 2009
    And what will they find? Soooo need chapter 4!!!
    Report Review

  • From erospandora on November 08, 2009
    you are so evil for stopping there lol when will i learn not to read storys that are not finished lol i love it though T_T


    ~eros
    Report Review

  • From CAttwood on November 08, 2009
    Cool story!! Looking forward to the next update!!
    Report Review

  • From WynterRose on November 07, 2009
    You have an awesome story beginning. I love the intrigue. I don't mind the AU of ignoring from Sirius' death on. I like it very much so far. I am very interested in where you are going to take this story.

    My one issue would be to get a beta, if you don't already have one. I saw some mistakes that would typically make me not want to continue reading, but that is where your storyline has drawn me in. Lily's name is misspelled at least once. I'm going on only the third chapter right now. Other grammatical errors aren't as bad such as your instead of you're or there instead of their. Words that go through spell check, but mean something different grammatically. I would personally volunteer except I know I would go insane if I add anything else right now.

    I really do want to see where your story goes, so please take this as constructive, because that is how it is truly meant.

    and because the fangirl in me just has to come out...I WANT MORE NOW. *grins*
    Report Review

  • From Sakya on November 07, 2009
    While reviewing your fic, why not add the commas, question marks, etc you missed the first time around? Oh, and remove the ones you placed wrong, please. It was a nightmare to read.
    Report Review

  • From thrnbrooke on October 13, 2009
    Hope Remus found everything!!! Sooooo need chapter 3!!
    Report Review

  • From DeathDancer on October 01, 2009
    I do think it is interesting how you decided to have Harry kidnapped for him to find out his inheritance.

    Now, while I do enjoy the story, I noticed some problems with your writing. Mainly, you tend to commit the traditional faux pas that quite a few fanfiction authors make: your for you're, etc. Remember, you're is for "you are" and your means something belongs to you.

    Your dialogue can be rather sketchy at times, and though believable, not believable as it could be. For people like Sirius Black, you wouldn't find them saying "I am," but rather "I'm." Think of how you speak in real life, and apply those characteristics to your characters. Dialogue should flow and sound natural, both when spoken aloud, and when read.

    Perhaps you should have your beta look over your chapters again, this time looking for commonly misused words and a lack of punctuation.

    But otherwise, it is a very promising story, and I do look forward to more.
    Report Review

  • From hieisdragoness18 on October 01, 2009
    ha! awesome! i really love it and can't wait for more!
    Report Review

  • From Rainien on October 01, 2009
    Severus Snape. S N A P E. Not Snap.
    Report Review

  • From thrnbrooke on September 21, 2009
    Stupid Fudge!!! Soooo need chapter 2!!!
    Report Review

  • From danawarner on September 10, 2009
    Interesting.
    Curious who his kidnappers are.
    Report Review

  • From YanaYugi on September 10, 2009
    cool story
    Report Review

  • From Ecks on September 10, 2009
    This is really good so far! I cant wait to read more!
    Report Review

T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!