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By : christineyoung
  • From katiekrm on May 02, 2010
    The story is great, but I'm still mad at Draco for getting Hermione pregnant. She has enough adjustments to make as it is and their first time may as well have had a date rape drug involved, so I feel he took major advantage of her and I'm surprised she's not putting up more of a fight because of it. The least he could have done was used protection. I hope Hermione figures out a way to block those pheremones. I would think Draco would want to be loved for himself and not the pheremones. I hope the next time Draco uses those pheremones that Hermione hexes him. I guess I just want a feistier Hermione. At least give the parents some hell!
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  • From Citten on May 02, 2010
    no i loved the chapter!!! besides life always needs some contentment and peace cause face it usually life is full of troubles trials and everything in-between! :) i sure do hope that you will be posting the next chapter and soon or i might just go crazy!! i do hope that narcissa is wonderful to hermione cause she will need someone and it would mean lots to have her as a friend or even like a mom. :) well it will be very interesting to see what is going to happen next with all the malfoys.
    Question though i would think that they would want a wedding and a big one cause one they would not want a baster child (unless the veela bond is like one) and that it would strike me as a big social thing that they would love. okay question is--is their going to be a wedding? :)
    PLEASE POST SOON!!! :) Again great chapter! :)
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  • From ladysnape21 on May 02, 2010
    Love this story line. I have never known what to think of the Veela story line, but I decided to give it a try, and I loved it!!! please tell me there is more to this??
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  • From on May 02, 2010
    LOVEDIT
    KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
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  • From margaritama on May 02, 2010
    I've been reading the fic and I think you do a nice job of showing the evolution of a relationship. Also the development and growth of the individual - learning to think for yourself and overcome barriers. So good message. Some minor con-crit: as you don't seem to have a beta, ensure you give it a good once over yourself to look for errors (don't rely on spell check).

    Also, can you explain why Draco uses "cara"? He's not Italian so it's rather challenging to read, I can deal with a bit of OCC but that always throws me. Last point, good note that the baby would flutter at 4 months but there would be no kicking. The little one would not have developed enough for that. No one would feel the baby move other than the mom until he was more fully developed. Then the kicks or bumps would be felt intermittently and not, as it would appear, on command. For me and many friends, the kicking would happen when you're still or resting then all of a sudden there would be movement.

    Again, the above is minor con-crit. Nice job all around though. :-)
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  • From dracoschick007 on May 02, 2010
    LOVE IT!!!!
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  • From dragongirl on May 02, 2010
    He is so cute. Your descriptions of emotions are simply facinating. So what is next.......... whoa yeah Lucius....... Please do not make us wait to long..........
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  • From TwinSanity on May 02, 2010
    Normally I hate first person povs but this story for some reason sucks me in! Hope to see more.
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  • From TwiDi525 on May 01, 2010
    your story is one of my favorites I'm following it also on fanfiction too.. I hope to see an update soon :D

    Cheers!
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  • From voraciousreader on March 29, 2010
    I do love a possessive yet considerate mate. Your update made me very happy--so many veela fics end up abandoned; I really hope that doesn't happen with this one, it's too good to let languish in the archive. And just so you know, this story is one of the very few reasons that I even check the Draco-Hermione category. Normally I ship Lucius or Severus and Hermione (I like Rickman and Isaacs, what can I say?) but your story keeps bringing me back!
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  • From DaOnleeSam on March 27, 2010
    loved it!!! update soon!!!!!!!
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  • From dragongirl on March 26, 2010
    To be honest I simply love it....... For course more smut never damages the imagination.. LOL
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  • From newtothis on March 26, 2010
    first i would like you to now that i signed just to review your story. i like most of it.

    my problem is with the way you wrote ron. i understand he sad some very hurt full thinks. and i understand that hermoine should be mad. hermoine said some very hurt full thinks back, and she does not seem to care.

    hermonie punch ron, so are you telling me that becouse some one said somethink hurtfull to you it is ok to hit them.
    ginny did a spell on ron that was so bad he was in the hostpital, so i can nealy kill someone for saying hurtthinks.


    please understand me this is your story, and you can write it anyway you want but show vilence to other peopel for a moment of anger, and that is ok is not right.

    i will gave you some ideas, if any of them are good, please use them if not throw them away.
    the crice ginny use put ron in hostipla but he had a bad reaction and nealy dies, (nice to show some real conserqion for violence)

    hermoine even thought she is mad, goes to the hosptial to talk to ron, ron lives, but is drug and talk tell her he is sorry, that he is in love with her, and that it hurt that the person that he had to defened her from is her mate.

    ron and hermoine go back to being best firned, and he the godfather of her son, ron relize he not in love with hemoine any more and just want to protect her, ginny get taked to prison and showed that if ron would have died she would be there for 20 years, she said sorry, and never you spell on people again,

    i like your story, just i like ron, and i hate vionlence with no repercutions.

    good story good luck
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  • From tenoh27 on February 26, 2010
    A lovely read, so far! Thank you.
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  • From smmz79 on February 14, 2010
    OH wow that was agreat chap and exactly how i thought it would happen but better.... i thought the fight between ron and hermione was great and you wrote it soooo well.... and i love that harry is still supporting her... i thought it was funny when he told ron good luck and scooted away from him that was funny... i loved that hermione was able to calm draco down and i sooo love veela fics esp for the protective/possessive side of the veelas....
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