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By : booback

From ExperimentalMe on March 09, 2010
Great smut! But I find myself equally unsatisfied without a sequel. You're such a great writer! Thanks.
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From ANON - Mia on October 15, 2009
Anonna?

I respect your opinion. I can even understand completely why you have it. I see your point.

I still didagree. IMO, not everything must be empowering. Sometimes I really enjoy someone flawed getting a clue in a really harsh way. It would interestme even more if this story continued and we could see how Draco who struggles to be "the good guy" deals with Hermione and her baggage of a sexual past. Especially if things are flawed in the happily ever after she gave us. I enjoyed it, one way or the other.

~Mia
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From dragongirl on October 15, 2009
More more more!
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From ANON - Anon on October 14, 2009
I didn't mean to confuse the issue either. I have a pet peeve about double standards and was looking at the comments from that point of view only. Normally I don't add such comments in because what I get fired up about the night before, I see more clearly the next morning. Clearly the author is not offended and I did not intend to offend anyone either so I'm happy to take down that other comment if required and apologise if I upset anyone else. See what happens when I act first and think later. LOL
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From ANON - Annona Mouse on October 14, 2009
To the author, thank you for understanding my point of view and taking my review as it was meant. I know it seemed harsh but I think that reviews should be blatant and point out what the readers like and dislike. While "I like your story reviews" are good for people who just like a story it is never all right to just say oh well I hate it. if there is something you dislike even in a great story point it out because it calls for reflection. I believe authors are entitled to honest reviews instead of butt kissing for faster updates. Thanks for valuing my feed back and responding accordingly. With the exception of this fic I am very much a fan of your fiction.
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From booback on October 14, 2009
Hey everyone. I did realise when I started writing this story that it was not something that I usually write about, and when I was posting it, I realised how stupid and whiny both Hermione and Draco and even Charlie seem (I guess I should have put an OOC warning in). I actually started writing this story about four years ago, and haven't improved much on it since then, so I understand how you can get the impression of it being very underdeveloped and somewhat stupid. I'll leave the story up for now, but I will try to go back and rewrite it to make it more in-character of all of the characters. It seemed like a good idea at the time, but when people start showing me the flaws of my writing, I do take it honestly. So this one wasn't one of my best, and I'll try my best to fix it. Thanks to everyone for their reviews (both good and bad), as they help me to be a better writer, which is what we're all here for, right?

:) ~Charlie
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From ANON - Annona Mouse on October 14, 2009
To the peeved reviewers above me, to clarify, this story wasn't distasteful to me because Hermione had sexual baggage, it was who the baggage was and how she went about bagging them. Even in the story there is the suggestion of blatant disgust in the words of Ron and Harry when they discuss her sex life. I have read plenty of stories where Hermione has plenty of partners and is the sex goddess of Hogwarts, even having threesomes or being quite voyeuristic about it. This was not one of those well executed cases. Hermione came off as simply disgusting, nothing double standard about it. Had she been less random lets just do it to see if you can make my eyes roll about it or better executed about it. "...the only single Weasley that she had yet to shag was going to be in attendance, she decided that the answer was definitely a yes." Come on what is empowering about this? There's nothing Hermione-like about this. She wants Malfoy, she bangs Charlie who turns her away. When he doesn't talk to her but treats her the way she treats others including MALFOY! she rolls out of bed, basically cum dripping and runs to MALFOY feeling wronged only to have him realize that she is all that Malfoy idolizes in a woman??? Come on, nothing against the writer but compared to her other dramione stories this leaves me disgusted and unlikely to come back for more. In addition this Malfoy seems like a wimpy leg hugger, staying celibate but for Hermione's shagging and confessing blah blah blah. I can appreciate that you tried to sprinkle some angst in, but for some of us, you missed the mark. On another note, how would the Weasleys and their women, hot headed as they are treat her, certainly not with smiles, hoping against all hope to be the one to turn her from her sluttish ways and make her their bride, knowing everyone of them has had her at a Sunday brunch. The girls wouldn't be able to justifiably stomach her either. "
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From ANON - Missed Mark, fan of author on October 14, 2009
I have to disagree with most of the other posters, I didn't realize that this was booboo by reading the entirety of this story. When I saw the author I was shocked because this story left a sub par, amateur, just writing to be crude type of story. I like a good pwp or shag story but this seemed unfounded and unfaithful to even booboo normal Hermione. She seemed like an ofc or desperate Pansy why wont you love me type here. Hermione would never accept that and the art of being a good fan fiction writer is to be true to a characters character. If they are going ooc there needs to be some precedent or standard. This had none. I don't claim to be an author but I am an editor and fact reader. I love new fics and will usually overlook minor flaws, but for booboo this was like from left field to me. But hey every author has a one off. And hey don't murder me, the link at the bottom of the fic allows for the leaving of reviews addressed to the author not other readers, my review I hope is just as valuable as the praise because its honest.
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From ANON - Anon on October 14, 2009
I don't usually jump on the bandwagon and I know this isn't really the place for this sort of thing, but I think you got a bum deal with that opinion (wasn't exactly a review). It's great to read stories that are a little different and frankly, why does a woman who takes charge of her sexuality automatically have to be a slag, slut or whatever just because she chooses to have a variety of partners anyway? The double standard is alive and well obviously, but you'd think at least in a bit of fiction that's sole purpose is to entertain and not to judge - would get the exception. Draco had slept around too, why isn't he getting a bagging then???? I don't think that was a fair statement, is all.

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From ANON - Mia on October 14, 2009
I respectfully dissagree strongly with your ninth reviewer. I have quite good tastes in literature and this one was highly enjoyable for the sheer fact that it was not cannon. There are only so many Hermione is a virgin and is marrying Ron whilst Ginny and Harry aare getting married and so on and so forth that a person can take. For me that number was 6. Thank you for giving the girl enough character to be neither a ceibate nun nor a sex goddess. Thank you for making her flawed and a little floozy.

~Mia
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From ANON - Annona Mouse on October 13, 2009
I hated it, instead of seeming empowered or in charge, Hermione was a cum basket looking desperately for good sex and blah blah blah. I know you're a Charlie fan but this was just yuckie. She did everything with a penis and was too afraid to talk to Malfoy but not to be a slag? How unHermione is that? Ron, Harry and the others? Do you think anyone would be fine with that or would want to be the one she picks whe she is so slutty? Draco was even more pathetic waiting and being her back up. I'd hate to see the bookshelves and favorites of anyone who commended this story. I'm not smashing all of your writing, just this fic because I think it needs some serious evaluation. Anyone reading this as their first of your stories would be dissuaded from reading your others because it was so poorly planned. In my opinion that would be a shame. I hope you take this as honest feed back because I have never been of the opinion that reviews should only be for hate mail or pure praise but honest commentary.
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From ANON - Roo on October 13, 2009
That was bloody brilliant!! Loved it!! I'm not sure (perhaps I haven't read carefully enough... but is this a one-shot or are you going to continue with their relationship (maybe make Charlie jealous??). Thanks!! All the best!
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From ANON - Mia on October 13, 2009
You're back!!!!!!!!!!!! You're back you're back you're back you're back you're back>>>>>>>> I absolutely adore this chapter. It could very well stand completely on its own as a oneshot. But I rather desperately want it to continue. You write the most thrilling and tantalising things. Absolutely, unforgivably gorgeous. Thank you. You made my day.

~Mia
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From mlui on October 13, 2009
Boo for Charlie and yah for Draco. I'm glad they're together now. Though I wonder if Charlie was trying reverse psychology on her...
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From Rosamund on October 13, 2009
awesome story! Loved it! Hot and with TWO wizards, not just one ;)
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