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Reviews for For the Want of a Nail

By : thewickednix
  • From ANON - diana on November 22, 2009
    Narcissa was amazing. I don't like her. Infact, I hate her. But also, I pitied her. Being so controlled by first her husband, and then betrayed and controlled by her own son. Draco's feelings in the entire scene were so believable, I keep forgetting they aren't real.

    So for waking emotions, great job!
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  • From ANON - diana on November 22, 2009
    This was smokin'. And I am soooo mad at you for pulling it our from under me! No seriously, I loved it. And I'm glad you're letting them build up the relationship, and not jump to the smex immediately.
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  • From ANON - diana on November 22, 2009
    OOH this was so HOT!

    Though Draco's reaction made me very frustrated, you wrote it very well and it was really natural. Once again, beautiful work.
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  • From ANON - diana on November 22, 2009
    Hi, it's me again.

    This is building up to be really interesting. I love how you manage to make Draco being a vampire so natural, even with his constat confusion.
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  • From Silkylove on November 21, 2009
    OMGOMGOMGOMG Loved the story, Crying but loved it. Why did you have to kill Draco. *sad* it's ok, Still loved it, every once in awhile we all need to read a story with a not so happy ending. Can't wait to read what ever else you write.
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  • From LadyFace on November 18, 2009
    I ouch, this story kept me going. I can't wait to see the next chapter. There is a next chapter, right?
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  • From hieisdragoness18 on November 18, 2009
    ooh i read this last night but i hated the ending, sorry i wanted draco to live or turn harry, i mean harry would have survived right? so i was like why wasn't he turned. still really want draco to live because i mean i know that he was a little out of it but he managed to kick bella so why could he use his vamp strength and kick her ass all the way across the field? i'm not trying to knock your story here and if you keep it the same thats cool i guess but the ending made me so sad and i was hoping for a happy one
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  • From AngelNarcissa90 on November 18, 2009
    You need to make it clear whether or not Harry is in the room. One line your saying that Harry is outside the room and the next your saying that Harry is being glared at by Narcissa. Either add him earlier in the scene as the only member of the golden trio to remain or change that line: "She looks defiantly around the room, giving both Dumbledore and Potter an especially disdainful glare." and put Shacklebolt's name there instead.
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  • From AngelNarcissa90 on November 18, 2009
    Ron really sucks with is bad attitude. I can't wait until he turns around and changes his mind.
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  • From AngelNarcissa90 on November 18, 2009
    I like the sense of dependency that you give both of them. Too bad Snape died.
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  • From AngelNarcissa90 on November 18, 2009
    I think you meant "weaving" not "woving" because that's past-tense and you're writing in present tense. good chap over all though.
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  • From AngelNarcissa90 on November 18, 2009
    All the more reason why Harry should entice Draco to sleep in bed next to him. Draco's angst is so amazingly wonderful...
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  • From AngelNarcissa90 on November 18, 2009
    I most definitely enjoyed the intensity of that scene! I'm not usually a fan of present-tense writting. But you're doing a good job.
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  • From AngelNarcissa90 on November 18, 2009
    Those are some intense emotions Draco is experiencing. So, is this winter break? Are you going to mention the month of the year?
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  • From AngelNarcissa90 on November 18, 2009
    You might want to watch word's like 'bomb' being used by a pureblood wizard who's been sheltered from muggles most of his life. Unless you give a reason as to why he would know what this word would mean. That's something I look out for when I'm writing; not to use words that don't fit a character's background or expereince of life. It's the same with phrasing, since their British and not American, the English is different.
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