Reviews for Meet Me HalfwayBy : windy |
First question: Wouldn't Harry have noticed the change in scent when he drank his Pumpkin Juice? That's one of the distinctive characteristics of amortentia. And I thought the effects were supposed to be instantaneous?
Neither here nor there, just a bit of confusion on my part.
Second question: What catalyst caused Lucius to call into question his loyalty to Voldemort? Other than a random (and as yet unexplained) meeting within Hogwarts, Lucius has given no reason to lend credence to his changing sides. While I'm glad that Sirius didn't die, Lucius changing sides inside the Ministry being based on great sex? I never really considered his character to be that shallow.
Without seeing the events that they're going through during the Occlumency lessons, without seeing Lucius form an emotional attachment to Harry, I'm having trouble reconciling his decision to try to help Harry at all.
Perhaps there's been some great event (of which we have yet to learn?) that caused Lucius to be in Hogwarts that night which would explain the reason he is changing sides. Perhaps his lust for Harry is only secondary, and he has actually been tasked to teach Harry Occlumency. Unfortunately, there are so many things missing that I honestly can't determine the reason for his actions.
As a result, without meaning to, your story is gradually turning into seemingly pointless sex between two men who are supposedly on opposite sides of a war. I'm afraid I'm just not following the process that led from Harry having a potion-induced reaction to Lucius to Lucius helping Harry to defeat Voldemort.
The sequence of events in a story not only explains characters' actions, it also explains their interactions. Harry and Lucius' interactions, at this point, are only based on the "what do I get" mentality, yet Lucius is giving Harry extraneous information. I'm not opposed to the change in character; without the background information, though, I am having trouble understanding it.
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