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Reviews for Shadow Phoenix

By : CainBlack
  • From Calmzone1 on December 17, 2015
    Great story. you might want to watch spelling of: shelves(selves is how you wrote it) vials (vitals) Chaos (caos) and I know there were others in earlier chapters but I didn't make note of them.

    Really enjoying your story, going to pop to your profile to see if you have SP II up.
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  • From ANON - Brissygirl on June 24, 2011
    I'm really enjoying this original take on Order of the Phoenix. I have noticed though that you seem to give away a lot of your good plot points when replying to comments. Maybe instead of telling people what will happen before it does, simply say that they will see what happens in upcoming chapters and you might get more comments that way especially if something really peaks the interest of your readers.

    I don't think I've read a fic with Super-powerful!Harry where he got his powers from a potion before, but I'm thoroughly enjoying the story so far even if this is my first comment. :) One last thing, you and your beta need to refresh your memories on canon spellings for things like the Hogwarts house names and things like that. I realise english isn't your first language and only have the odd spelling mistake is really well done. Keep up the great work and don't be discouraged by my comments, I only made them to make you a better author and I know what its like to have discouraging/not-encouraging comments because I write fan fic and original fiction as well. :)
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  • From marinepotterfan on January 16, 2011
    I enjoyed reading your story, I cant wait to start SP II.

    Thanks for writing
    MPF
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  • From snarkity on December 23, 2010
    Okay, good story so far, what I've seen of it. But I've seen some problems that suggest you are not a native English speaker. Syntactical problems, I guess you'd say. You say "remember" when you mean "remind" -- in English, the individual remembers something, but if person A wants person B to remember something, person A *reminds* person B of that fact. E.g., "Let me remind you that if you do that, you are liable to go off that cliff and break your neck."

    Similarly, you don't seem to get the difference in English between a borrower and a lender. The LENDER has something the borrower needs, and LENDS it to him or her. He doesn't BORROW it to them. They borrow it FROM him. The term is point-of-view specific...the person who has it, lends it, the person who needs it must borrow it.

    HTH.
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  • From on December 14, 2010
    awsome story cant wait for the next one
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  • From ANON - LadyFireCrab on November 09, 2010
    Great story! I can't wait to read part two! :D
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  • From bsmith2114 on October 09, 2010
    Excellent!!! Keep up the good work it is greatly apperated. Full marks!
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  • From ANON - Reapers Blade on September 27, 2010
    Ich habe gelesen, viele ff's rund, aber dieses hat fing meine volle Aufmerksamkeit, und ich bin sofort Jagd auf SP2

    ps: das ist die ersten 35 Kapitel Fic las ich einen Schuss

    und ja, ich habe einen
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  • From ANON - Reapers Blade on September 27, 2010
    Ich habe gelesen, viele ff's rund, aber dieses hat fing meine volle Aufmerksamkeit, und ich bin sofort Jagd auf SP2

    ps: das ist die ersten 35 Kapitel Fic las ich einen Schuss

    und ja, ich habe einen
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  • From DGKenpachi on September 20, 2010
    Great story.
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  • From firelordeg on September 17, 2010
    your alive ya! thank you for continuing this i love this story please update again a.s.a.l.a.
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  • From Shago123 on September 17, 2010
    HI
    i just started reading ur fic about 4 to 5 hours ago. i havent been able to stop since. im at ch. 26 at the moment, and seeing how its 3am right now i figured i call it a night. I love the story. i feel as if im reading the 5th book all over agian but better. i love the fact that Herminoe is with Harry only. I also have a question...J wanted to know harrys size?? and the womens sizes. anyways great work, i love the plot cant wait to finish the rest tomorrow.

    -Arshag-
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  • From danawarner on September 16, 2010
    "Harry borrowed them his Firebolt" the word is LOANED, not borrowed. He loaned TO them/ He borrowed FROM them
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  • From hawkswench on September 16, 2010
    Chapter 34 you wrote "rip of the right sleeves of their robes" shouldn't it have been the left sleeve? I thought the Dark Mark was on the left arm?
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  • From azphxbrd on September 16, 2010
    Good chapter,I dont think I would have given Fudge the toad (Umbridge) that easly.Keep up the good work.
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