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By : serpentinred
  • From TheLadyMiya on February 23, 2010
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  • From TheLadyMiya on February 22, 2010
    chapter 3
    I'm really starting to wonder how Hermione will get together with Tom. I mean, I know they will somehow because the story is in the Hermione/Voldemort section :P He is much less talkative than I would have imagined, but I guess that will come later. Mehe. Joseph and Gareth seem to be funny fellows. Although, a bit annoying somehow. To chipper. I don't trust overly joyful persons... They usually have something to hide... hmhm...
    And Harry seemed a bit dumb so far... like he was in the fifth HP-book. With the not realising he shouldn't appear to be knowing anything about Hogwarts and the wanting to hex Draco all the time. Haha, it reminds me of that youtube-clip Harry Potter in 5 seconds. Have you seen it? It's hilarious!
    Oh, well, good chapter, but not as good as the first two. I think this was one of those chapters you just need to get through to get to the real good chapters. Like a transportation. Not much happening, but you still have to do it. Take care!
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  • From TheLadyMiya on February 22, 2010
    Chapter 2
    Oooh, how exciting! I wonder who that was that sent them back in time. My money is on a Death Eater, so far, but something tells me I'll change my mind after a while.
    The dialogue in this chapter was much more suitable as well, even if I was surprised Draco didn't throw more insults at them. Oh, well, I guess he was too busy cursing Harry, haha! And I loved how you didn't use the old Time-Turner trick to push them back in time, and Dumbledore's reasoning for how they would suite in was quite believable. For it to be very believable, I guess they would have talked more, but that would have been very boring to read, so I'm glad you choose to just state that it would be best for them to say at school and change their last name as long as it would take for Dumbledore to find a way to return them.
    Giggles on Ginny's choice of last name ;)
    Great chapter! Take care!
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  • From TheLadyMiya on February 20, 2010
    Hi there! So, I finally came around to read one of your own fic. I really like the Gold Puppet (as you may have noticed) so I thought that since you were one of the co-writer, you have to be a good writer on your own as well! And Nerys told me you were... and I trust her judgement with these sort of things ^^
    Okay, so I don't have so much to say about this first chapter. It's exciting enough, creates a lot of questions, like, how did they get there, what will happen between them and Tom and so on. Really good, a lot to build a plot on! And I also like the way you describe the scenery, very colourful and poetic!
    The only thing I find negative in this chapter is your choice of word in the dialogue. You finished some sentences with "already". Ones with Pomfrey and ones with Hermione. I just didn't feel like it fitted either of them. It's sound so... teenagey. Like, I could totally see Lavender say it in those sentences, but not those two. Perhaps someone else have already pointed this out and you have changed it had that in mind in later chapters.... I just thought that it could be a thing to work on. I read your profile on this page and you seem to be one of those wonderful persons who realise they aren't perfect, doesn't really care, but try to become more perfect where it matters. So, sometime the wording in the dialogue could be better, but I loved Draco's and Harry's argument, that was so in character. And I really enjoyed how dark and controlling Tom was. Mehe, that is bound to be good! And also, very in character. I bet he must feel very angry of being hurt. It was sooo funny that they fell right on top of him. That has to mean something, but what...
    Oh, as I said, the plot is really exciting so far! I'll see how many chapters I manages to read tonight, and I'll put in a comment here and there when I feel like I have to ^^
    Toodles!
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  • From Nerys on February 16, 2010
    And here I was, checking this last chapter (16) here, in good hopes it would be ... "different" from the FFnet version.

    *SOBS.*

    IT WASN'T!!!

    Oh well, still a great chapter... even without them doing it like bunnies. ROFLMAO!

    Update soon, pretty please.
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  • From ANON - Ardara on February 11, 2010
    Love the story so far, please continue.
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  • From Nerys on February 10, 2010
    So, you picked adult+ as a rating. Does that mean you're going to add certain scenes to this version here? *bats eyelashes*
    Waits with bated breath for the rest now. ;)

    Although, I do want your betas to get a move on and finish that chapter of SIT I've been waiting AGES for on FFnet. Yes, AGES! Because I love this story. I really do. Picks 5 plusses as rating, and goes of to fill in the unreadable letters box.

    xx Nerys
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