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Reviews for What Would You Wish For?

By : ronsmistress
  • From HeroShadow on February 25, 2010
    I've gone back and read most of your other works, but personaly this is the one I like most. I love the character interaction as well as how you delt with Seamus being a jerk. I've come to admire this pairing thanks to your works, even if at first I was confused about how it would work. I've nothing negitive to say about this or any of the ones I have read. I hope your muse lets you come up with plenty more stories for this couple. In other words keep up the good work.
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  • From juisawant on February 24, 2010
    I love your story!.... its amazing. i like every single chapter and i think i want demona and ron to have umm not sex but i want her to teach him how to please a woman, just once bcoz they have nice relation and at some point i think demona like ron and it will also make there relationship stronger.

    plzzz update soon. i am so curious to know what happen next.
    take care and thx
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  • From Daye on February 24, 2010
    Chapters 15/16. I liked it and I like that they haven't jumped straight into it. Some of the dialogue seemed a bit too 'to the point' really, people tend to beat about the bush more in real conversations but otherwise its very good.

    As with the above reviewer, I hope Demona isn't going to be giving him any 'practical lessons' so to speak; its seems to be me your Ron is probably going to want his first time to be special and probably won't want to cheat on Pansy.
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  • From CrazyPedantic on February 24, 2010
    Great two chapters. The broom ride and picnic was so romantic. I like the way they can talk about anything. What a great relationship. I don't know how Demona is going to help him. Maybe a sex technique film. I only hope you don't have Demona offering herself as a means of education. Maybe she can show him memories of previous "masters" involved in sexual activities.

    Whatever you do, I'm looking forward to it. Please update soon :)
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  • From MizzDee4life on February 23, 2010
    loving it... i don't even want to guess. i'm going to just wait. :D


    ~*MDL*~
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  • From CrazyPedantic on February 22, 2010
    Two chapters at once. Wonderful :)
    Such a sweet little date. His wishes seem to be working in his favour. Loved the way that he's being such a gentleman, very rare these days. Loved the Valentines present for his genie. Very sweet.
    I want more please
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  • From Daye on February 22, 2010
    Ah, the courting period. Very good work on the slow build up.
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  • From karlminion on February 22, 2010
    Now this is sweet. Most people just jump into the sex without considering what came before or after; you're taking your time, and that's good to see.

    Not that there's anything wrong with just jumping into the sex, of course. Just that a lot of people don't handle it right, is all. I bet you could handle it fine, though you're doing an excellent job with this right here.

    The only flaws are a few spelling and grammar issues, and you mix up your pronouns at times as well. Aside from that, an excellent read!
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  • From CrazyPedantic on February 21, 2010
    hehehehehe Seamus got what he had coming to him. Very well written. I had to read several chapters at once, which is always a pleasure. I love what you have developing with Pansy. LOL especially her suggestion to Millicent that Hermione and Draco would be a good match (would be hilarious if you threw that in and have Ron telling Hermione that Draco is the sort of boyfriend she needs)

    I like the way you have Pansy and Ron's relationship develop through small inxonsequential meetings. The shy smiles, the glances all so romantic. Also liked the way you dealt with Hermione and the studying problem. Such a wonderfully well written story. It left me feeling all gooey and happy. If there were any huge errors or bad spelling your wonderful characterisations and plot made me miss them.

    Looking forward to reading more chapters. Well done! *hugs* :)
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  • From voraciousreader on February 20, 2010
    Chapters 8-12 were apparently going up at the same time I was trying to review, never had that happen before, lol...they just kept adding and adding! Loved the confrontation with Seamus, who needs to have his weenie hexed off and fed to the squid, or he should be double-teamed by Crabbe and Goyle. Nasty little git. More, please!
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  • From Daye on February 20, 2010
    Hmm. Surprised that Seamus/Ron argument didn't end up in an outright fist fight. Lucky that Seamus is all talk.

    Interesting to see where this pairing is going. Obviously with your user name Pansy/Ron is not entirely unexpected, though I admit I'd been thinking we were going to end up with Ron/Demona in this one instead.

    Only really negative thing I can say is I've noticed a tendency to uses 'your' when you mean 'You're' So maybe when you're proof-reading this you can look out for that? (your is possessive eg Your hair looks nice. You're is short for you are eg you're looking nice today)
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  • From architect on February 19, 2010
    Keeps getting better and better. I love the way you make Ron so likeable and pleasent. Please, please update soon. I'm really enjoying this so much.

    All the Best
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  • From voraciousreader on February 19, 2010
    This is absolutely charming! I find this very well thought out and extremely intricate. Bet I know what his third wish is...
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  • From MizzDee4life on February 19, 2010
    i absolutely love all your stories (yes i've read them all!!!) I'm enjoying this one so far, I can't wait for the next chapter :D

    ~*MDL*~
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  • From Daye on February 19, 2010
    I'm amazed how quickly this fic is proceeding. Good stuff.
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