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By : christineyoung

From Daniw on March 30, 2013
I'm not sure what people are complaining about, but I think the story's been very good.. I always enjoy updates and think your writing is great. Don't let what a few people say get you too down. In the end, it's really only important that you're pleased with your writing and that you get something out of it. Everything else is just a bonus.
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From ANON - Audrea on March 23, 2013
I love this story and you have done a wonderful job picking up where the last author left. Please finish this one!!!
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From ANON - Kain on January 25, 2013
Too piggy back off of my last review, may i make a request? Since i got all of that stuff off my chest, would it perhaps be possible for you too write a Dominate Fleur going after say Draco or Scorpius or perhaps a femslash with Fleur and Hermione? I have stated before that you are a master of sensuality and Dominance so thinking of those types of pairings written by you has me intrigued. It would be a nice change of pace to see one of the Malfoy's getting pursued and their are not near enough Femslash pairings.
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From ANON - Kain on January 25, 2013
Sorry if this seems a little abrupt, but here i was at work the other day, almost at the end of my shift and daydreaming to kill time, my thoughts wandered to this fic............and i had one of those grand realizations which was that I have such a bad double standard. Allow me to explain, a few people, myself included that are reading this story have criticized some of the characterizations and the relationship Hermione has gotten strong armed into and how the Malfoy's kind of come as as amoral karma Houdini's, and then it hit me, had this been a story about say, a dominant FEMALE Veela Dominating and intimidating a regular MALE or if this were perhaps a Femslash(Dominant female Veela and regular witch), No one and I mean absolutely no one would be up in arms about it. These thoughts actually first came to me while a was reading a dark dominant Fluer and submissive Hermione slash fic where Fluer is acting no better than the Malfoy's here, but she has far less tender moments and is not doing much in the way to accommodate Hermione, and the thing was....it didn't bother me too much. I'm all like "oooh Dominant Fluer is sexy and she is acting real dark", then I realized how up in a tizzy I was about this story and I felt like a total Jackass. That epiphany struck me right upside the head and i would like to take this time to apologize about any complaints I personally have levied against you. You are a brilliant writer and this is ADULT fanfiction.net and people should expect things to get a little morally ambiguous. So keep up the good work.
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From ANON - steve on January 10, 2013
there raping hermoine, magic bond it still rape, and could ron be afraid that rose would get into the bond, so i agree with him.
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From ANON - delia cerrano on January 06, 2013
Chapt 1- 16 were mind boggling for me! I liked it a lot more than I thought...in fact I thought I would just "taste"it and then leave it. But I felt so much for Draco. Scorpius is ok...kind of a typical teen ager. Poor Ron. I've never cared for Ron now there is a prat usually and I am not liking threesomes AT ALL. I'm never nuts about Hermione either (yes she is a know it all). So your story really had me reeling. Ends up I'll read it to the finish which I HOPE will be Draco & Hermione alone with a baby (Dracos) & Ron & Scorpis as dear family friends both having other mates. My favorite pairings are Harry/Draco or Harry/Snape. Not original I know but there you go. I read a Harry/Charlie once that I liked real well.
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From ANON - heath on January 05, 2013
I like you story. however, i didn't like how you tuned every thing and made an alpha wolf into a sub. you sure have kept Snape a sub and Remus dub. it didn't make any since any more...
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From ANON - Kain on January 05, 2013
Ok, you know for a fact i have read your other stories and have made it very clear that I enjoy them(guilty pleasure). and while i am happy to see you continuing this one.....there are just a few minor things that irked me a 'little', such as:

She knew that she still loved Ron. But that love was fading into the background rapidly.

Hey that's life, some times love last's sometimes it doesn't.....even if it was ended by a magically induced love that in the course of one night toppled close to 17 years of marriage. But hey loves a crazy thing ya know ;D

and:

"For giving us a chance,"

how sweet, I mean granted she didn't really have a choice in the matter..but hey semantics eh ;D

and:

'There, nestled in green velvet was her wand.'

Oh look at those 2 studs, giving her back her own possession........ which they unjustly took from her...in the process of holding her against her will until she was magically bound to one of them, but hey hey hey, their moving forward, am i right?:D

And:

That I was born to bear the heirs of the Malfoy family and now that Scorpius is the heir, I'm to be his mate to fulfill that destiny."

Well heh...that's a little....morbid and depressing, but hey all great loves have something to do with destiny right, even if it that destiny involves being a broodmare....right? :/

and:

"That's kind of cool,"
"I might finally get that brother that I've been asking for all this time."

........alright..alright heh upheaval of a lifetime, family ain't doing so good and a bonding that was under duress..that's cool is suppose, and everyone wants siblings. :|

But hey it's all good, I mean after hearing the somewhat abridged version of their mothers 'union' with the Malfoy's they will still understand their fathers reas........oh....their mad at him...for his...justified...reaction.to.....hmm..one moment please...(runs outside at punts a small child into the street while screaming "WHYYYYYYY!!",into the hysterical mothers face then runs back inside throwing several objects around and then attempting to summon Cthulhu before calming down)

(or so he thought) so.....Veela being a rare species an all...could essentially get away with almost anything, including murder as long as it involves there mate no matter how unwilling that mate is, the minister and by extension the ministry can't find any loopholes or alter the law....Rose and Hugo's mother was kidnapped by a, ahem "brash" Veela , held for a long period of time and being told by said Veela and his dad that whether she likes it or not she is going to bond with them which after the fact will a magically binding love that will noticeably alter her way of thinking, and they are ok with it and more concerned about siblings and being the same age as their mom....AND after being so stoked through t her whole story only show anger when it is revealed that their father took steps, harsh steps but steps none the less to somehow rectify the situation.

Alright now that the rage induced ranting is done just let me get it across that i am not trying to offend you, i am simply a VERY honest reviewer and i have noticed quite a few like minded individuals who have read this story and said similar things. The thing is, you have a GODLY handle on sensuality and smut....but your romance is found wanting and you make it very easy to hate the Malfoy's and as i have seen in another story of yours, you wait a bit too long too show the male POV characters softer side and they have already been too deeply entrenched in cruelty and deuchebaggery for the readers to like them. Now this is no darker than many of the other stories on this site and it just might be the netorare aspect that has people shaking their heads.The kids reactions could have played a pivotal part in the drama had they been a little more angry towards the Malfoy's and Ron not been given the 'designated villain' card. I only hope that you don't resort to a deus ex machina or something terribly cliche to reach a resolution in this fic. Now for me this story is very very very VERY hot but in the same breath extremely rage inducing(speaking of which i should probably check to see if that kid i punted is alright).

As i have said before in previous reviews I enjoy this story and your others and intend to finish it till the end no matter what route you take, but holy god I have never had such a severe Conundrum from reading a fic lol.

-waits patiently for update-

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From m1ssgreen on January 03, 2013
Update soon...
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From ANON - Wolfie on December 14, 2012
Never stop writing. Your stories are amazing, especially this one. I can't stop reading. Thank you!!!!
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From ANON - SL on December 07, 2012
Enjoyed the sensual writing on the bond with Scorpius.
Having said that, I feel Hermione's change of attitude towards Scorpius a bit too magical based on her temperament.
All in all, I can't wait to see what's come next: bond with Draco, how they all feel, etc. Will there be rivalry between father and son? Will H prefer one over another?
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From ANON - SillyGreenEyes on November 29, 2012
Oh yes you do still have readers. I must say I do need a fan after your last chapter. I can't wait for your next one!! You do have creative, fun, sexy stories!!
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From ANON - steve on November 07, 2012
one for the crime draco commit he should be in jail for life. ron has EVERY RIGHT to keep his kids for her, she told that she been kidnap, and going to be rape by magic. so he going to let his kids there, why so rose can be rape as well, i would have kill draco by know.

look her kids are adult or close enought, and he is willing to let her see them with out draco, but how does ron know how the magic is changeing hermoine.

so if your ex wife had a mentel brake you would not let her see kids by self, that what hermoine had, magic is force her to love two people she did not like before, forceing her to deal with being rape.

so if there even a small chance her kids can get hurt, hermoine should grow up and understand ron doing the right thing, and since there so close to being adult, then they can make there own chooices when that day comes.

hope this make sence.

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From pepperdoc on November 05, 2012
I still read! I love the stories you've been posting!! You write so wonderfully!!!
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From ANON - Silversal on November 03, 2012
That was great! And happy belated birthday hon, keep up the great work.
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