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By : Daye

From SalonKitty on September 19, 2011
Wow, that was like night and day, the first draft to this. I LOVE what you did with Hermione, spot on work. But even better was how you changed Ron's pov, and all of those little references to chess were *brilliant*. We got to see his thought process unfold during the whole fight and it really made him shine as a character. When you get Ron right, it's the dog's bollocks.

The fight was really gripping and filled with excitement. Great cliffhanger. I'm seeing the escape from the Ministry all over again, but this time Ron's injury might be a bit more serious. And what of Fenrir raking his nails across Harry? Uh-oh, not good in his state, to have the added aggression.

Wondering how Harry will ever forgive Pansy at this point. It does not look good for our lovers. But great work!

My captcha word was iBreath, lol.
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From ANON - Anon on September 18, 2011
Oh-ho! As good ol' J.R. would say, "Business is about to pick up!"
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From ANON - ares88 on September 17, 2011
Hm... i guess it was plausible how it ended. Pretty close to what happened in book with few MINOR expections. Well, still liked it.
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From ANON - MayorHaggar on September 17, 2011
Aww...Harry TOTALLY should have choked the life out of Malfoy. A Lannister always pays his debts. Wait...wrong series...

Sex was completely unnecessary in this chapter, so you won't hear any complaints from me. Honestly, I don't see how you can feasibly do any sex in the next chapter either, unless it's between Ron and Hermione. (Have they actually gotten "together" yet in this story? I don't remember; I find them to be a terrible match and have thus been focusing mostly on Harry and Pansy in this story.) Things should not be that easy/quick to patch up between Harry and Pansy, in my opinion.

I look forward to what's coming next...and once again, I'm torn as to whether I'd rather see you update this or DTDM next.
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From MDB021Boo on September 16, 2011
Judging by Hermione
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From ANON - anonymous on August 19, 2011
Its funny and interesting how an extra character or a different relationship can change an entire fic. i really am enjoying this and having read your post about the strain of too many fics and how they each require a different mindset.

I can never say how compelling this story is in the right words because each chapter brings such a great change to the original that you don't know where to start. Hermione leaving instead of ron was one example. most writers would have stuck to the script as it were and made ron bugger off. You didn't however and the way you did it was both plausible and well done. Am i right in saying that you wish to portray Hermione's dislike of Pansy as due to her belief that she will leave and break harry's heart and that she doesn't want to see that happen because she loves him so much? (love not in-love)

I do hope you can continue and ultimately finish this satisfactorily. till then i watch with hope
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From ANON - AndrewRyan on June 24, 2011
Another great chapter. The comparisons between Harry and Draco's dick was amusing. They were the same, but different lol. If I was Harry I would ignore her entirely. I know she didn't enjoy it, but she definitely didn't hate it. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
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From newtothis on June 24, 2011
first i love yoru story, and i agree, that if there was a girl that hermoine could leave and ron could stay, the othere think you have to remember is ron was hurt that make a differents,

as for ron, i like him. four he did fight with harry but he found a way to tell him about the dragons, 5 year he stay with him even when the school was agaist him, stood with him when hermonie was fighting with him. and the 7 book he did a lot that was brave, he was one of the 7 that look like harry risking his life, he save tronks lifes she was proud of him. save harry, stay with harry at the end risking his life. ron a pureblood he could have stay out of it and been fine. hell he could have sold harry out and got everythink people stay he wanted.

out side of the big fight where ron left, and tried to come back a few minute later, there was know fight between ron and harry for the last 3 years. there was one between ron and hermoen but that was her fault, thank about what she did, she ask to a party but yell at him why saying i was thinking about asking your, and calling him a jerk. attack him with bird that mark his face and stop talking to him for over a mouth, for what he kiss a girl. he did nothing wrong. so some of the fight where hermoine fault.

ron loves hermoein he would do anythink for her. all she had to was tell him. and maybe show him. for some reason people dont get this, LOVE LEAST OF ALL YOU BROTHERS, all the time ron wanted fame he want the love of his family. is that so wrong.
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From MayorHaggar on June 23, 2011
Well, that was not easy to read...but I think that was pretty much the point, so kudos.

I think one of the earlier reviewers was a bit overly harsh on Pansy, as I didn't see what other options she had in that situation. It also seemed like she wasn't really enjoying it, and was more or less just waiting for it to be over. That probably made it a BIT easier for me to read, but damn...poor Harry! I hope you aren't planning on a quick reconciliation there, because I feel like it would take Harry quite a while to start putting something like this behind him. I also hope you're planning on a different fate for Draco--this doesn't feel like the conflicted Draco we saw in DH, so he deserves a much harsher end.

I hope you don't take this as a negative review, because I don't mean it that way at all. This was the most emotionally-charged and memorable chapter in this little saga so far (either story), and I literally cannot wait to see what happens next. I'd been enjoying your Harry/Tonks story more recently, but this chapter was so riveting that I find myself hoping you'll continue focusing on this story for the time being, just so I can see where the heck things go from here.
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From MDB021Boo on June 23, 2011
When I read the
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From ANON - Pugnacious P on June 23, 2011
I'm not sure why you didn't just have Draco blow his load inside of Pansy, since all the other standard insults and indignities that could be thrown at Harry were already there.

Pansy barely paused before she started stripping out of her clothes, She engaged in a heated kissing session with Draco (there are even prostitutes who don't do kissing...) and clearly enjoyed it what with all the groaning, she sucked him off, squealed, shrieked and moaned with pleasure as he toyed with her, rhapsodized about how Draco's dick was bigger than Harry's (an unnecessary blow, and it was obvious she was enjoying the difference) then literally bent over and let him plow her like a jackhammer... and she was clearly more than 90 percent willing from start to finish - No noteworthy attempt at resistance whatsoever.

I'm sincerely disappointed in Pansy here, not just because she happily fucked Draco, but because she was stupid enough not to realize he was playing her from the start. And I'm sad for Harry; he had not only had to endure being raped, he then turned right around and was cuckolded in just about the worst way. Pansy was totally into it, and he had to watch.

While I'm not exactly calling for Pansy's blood just yet, I'm not sure I care about seeing her end up with Harry as much as I once did. I really hope HE doesn't prove to be every inch the idiot she was, and simply welcome her back with open arms when she tries to claim it was all a ploy so they could get back out alive. She threw herself into that bed, enjoyed her time there, and she should be forced to lie in it until she has made it up properly; that's a task that shouldn't even be within a thousand miles of easy.

Pansy already knows about being easy, it's high time she learned what difficult means. Any love she had for Harry is seriously in doubt after that shameless encounter.
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From ANON - ares88 on June 23, 2011
i cannot say much about this. It was well written, and really dark (as expected) i just hope you know what you're doing. I'm afraid you just do some 'disney miracle' rescue. Well, looking forward for the next chapter.
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From ANON - Hamma Time on May 16, 2011
zomg I hope you don't abandon this fic! It's amazballs!!!
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From ANON - HeyDude on March 28, 2011
I just wanna say, I hope you keep on with this because it's really awesome and I'm enjoying it.
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From alina290 on March 23, 2011
Thank you so much for updating. Lets hope that the plan works so they can save Hermione from the wolfs lair.

Liz
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