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Reviews for The Riddle Heiress

By : Scorpio87
  • From becka8199 on March 06, 2010
    Ok, I think you should continue this story. But can I make a few suggestions? Some of the words are missing. I think you probably do what I have done and your fingers didn't keep up with your brain. Just re-read a few times to catch any mistakes, and maybe make the chapters a little longer. It will hold the readers atttention. And always end a chapter with a kind of cliffy ending. It will leave them begging to read the next chapter.

    I'm sorry if I offended you, but I'm only trying to help. I think this has the start of a really great story. Please continue.

    I can't wait to see how Hermione acts when she gets to Hogwarts.
    :-)
    B.
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  • From BabyMomma2fo on March 05, 2010
    I realy like what you got so far i hope u contiune to update regularly it interesting keep up pleaze

    ~much luv
    Babymomma
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  • From jessirose85 on March 05, 2010
    Read ch 2 and 3 and I am loving this story xxx
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  • From becka8199 on March 04, 2010
    It sounds like this is going to be a very interesting story. I already have questions brewing in my head about what could possibly happen. So good work.

    On a more constructive note. You might want to space in between paragraphs. With it all bunched together like that, it makes it a little difficult to read. You also may want to read and re-read for any punctuation mistakes or grammer errors. That is what I do. (It's ok, if you don't catch everything. Its fanfic for a reason.) A lot of your sentences are run-ons and it will cause readers to have to go back and re-read to make sense of things.

    Please don't take this as I'm harping on your story. I think you have the start of a great story. It's just little things that will cause a lot of readers to comment on during their reveiws. I just want to help. Trust me I have gotten my fair share of flames, and still do sometimes. I just try to read over everything 2 or 3 times before I post a chapter. Maybe look into a beta-reader as well.

    But other then that, I can't wait for your next chapter. I do hope you continue to write this story. So many other great stories get forgotten. I will be looking for your update. :)
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  • From jessirose85 on March 04, 2010
    This was a great beginning xxx

    I hope you will continue soon...Can you possibly send me an email at my email address when you add to this fic with the story's title in the subject box??

    More soon please xx
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  • From chris7100 on March 03, 2010
    Constructive criticism - If you want to capture readers' attention, you need to focus on making chapters of a length that's worth reading. The temptation to publish as soon as you hve even a small bit of story is great, but the rewards in terms of continued reader attention are greater. Looking forward to your next chapter!
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