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From SoftObsidian74 on June 19, 2010
Whoah, a lot of that was unexpected. I'm still a bit in shock at how quickly it turned from a sex scene to a battle for Harry's soul. The thing with Hermione was just heartbreaking...she's going to kick his ass if she gets down. lol. I thought for a moment you were going to kill either Harry or Ginny. So I'm glad you didn't. Very interesting turn of events. Sorta painful to read, but only because it seemed so close to the characters and the struggles they're grappling with. I really can't wait to read the epilogue. Thanks for sharing such a different and intriguing and HOT story :)
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From SoftObsidian74 on June 19, 2010
OMFG! Julian!!! You have to write many many many more stories. Your BDSM presses ALL of my buttons. I had to stop several times while reading this to collect myself. So fucking hot. Everything from the time Harry stood up and told Ginny he wanted her on her knees in pain to him making her crawl, to his verbal humiliation. Gawd! This is so damned hot! And I can't believe how you've incorporated Hermione into this story...it's freakin' crazy but very believable. I totally gasped when Hermione directed Ginny to the kitchen and told her Harry wouldn't agree to a safe word. lol. She is way too involved but at the same time I'm glad she is. And I was LOL@her getting flustered about Harry and Ginny being naked. I wonder if she's going to get off to it, and if that will change anything. I hope you're working on more chapters or a sequel! I LOVE this!
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From SoftObsidian74 on June 19, 2010
Oh, I loved the tension and it was running throughout the entire chapter. First Ginny's refusal to tell Harry about the Boggart and then after he got rid of it, I can only imagine the awkwardness. I loved the way how you showed Harry examining her clinically. Why was that sexy to me? Perhaps because he was taking note of everything, maybe he'll even store it away for the future? :D I'm such a perv. I loved how Hermione picked up that things weren't quite right and I'm glad that he's close enough to her to confess what happened. His anger is definitely justified, but I understand what's going on with Ginny too. How terribly confusing for both of them. I'm scared and excited about this conversation that he has to have with Ginny. Off to read the next!
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From SoftObsidian74 on June 19, 2010
I'm fucking speechless here...that was just...I have no words. I don't know how you made this very very dark chapter sexy but you did. I mean parts of it were just cringe worthy (not the writing, the acts depicted), but at the same time, there was this dark underlying sensuality to it, and I think it was all coming from Ginny and her desire for this, even as she fought against it. Just wow. And that she knew that it might kill her and had accepted it and submission to it is just beyond words. I hope she gets a hold of this or get a really good dom who will know how to give her what she needs in a more healthy way. God let it be Harry! And yay to Harry...I'm still a little confused about how he resisted the Imperius but that was an awesome scene. I hope he puts that jerk out of business and in prison for allowing that to happen. I can only imagine how traumatized Harry will be though after walking in on seeing "Tom" and Ginny like that. This is just fascinating!
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From SoftObsidian74 on June 19, 2010
Oh good Lord, where are you taking this. Ginny is doing very dark dark things. I can't believe she went to Knockturn to make this happen, but you describe her longing and need very well, so I guess I do get it afterall. The first part of this chapter had me in stitches. Very amusing, the interactions between Ron, Harry and Hermione. LOL@Hermione talking to Harry about dominating a woman and Ron spilling the beans about their sex life. It all seems so "them", very natural, and that's one of the best things about this story. You're exploring some really dark and provocative stuff but the characters and interactions feel so Harry Potter. Just brilliant. I hope Skeeter gets what's coming to her, and that Ginny doesn't get hurt too badly by her own design. Can't wait to see what's next...
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From SoftObsidian74 on June 17, 2010
Oh my goodness! This story is so....I've never read anything like it. The way you characterize everyone is spot on, and I think that's what makes it so gripping. This seems like it could very well be an extension of the books. I love the way you describe the Ministry and it's efforts to rebuild and the politics and reactions to the aftermath. It all seems so messy and awkward like it's supposed to be. Harry's thoughts on why they needed to continue with the puppet show were so insightful. I loved how Skeeter is still the bitch and how Harry and Ginny snapped on her. Although, I'm worried about how this may come out for Ginny. And Ginny...man oh man. First, I love how Hermione gave good advice but it wasn't the right advice for Ginny. lol. And the chemistry between her and Harry is there, but his cluelessness and sense of being noble, as usual, is getting in the way of seeing what's really going on. Very good depiction of Harry there. The anger Ginny showed towards him was thus very understandable, and you actually had me siding with her more. I loved her lines in that scene. The "maybe if I had just given him a blow job" part made me cringe and then smile. She's so fiery and smart. I hope that Harry calls her bluff and bends her over a table soon :) This is so enthralling, I'm really enjoying myself.
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From SoftObsidian74 on June 16, 2010
Oh man, this story was recommended to me by Salon_Kitty, and I'm so glad I checked it out. If the first chapter is any indication, this is going to be quite a ride. I can't wait to see where you're going with this. I think I'm going to make this my new bedtime story, so I can have something to look to every night. So far, really well done. I love the battle scene, very intense, yet simple. You have a real knack for using few words to get to the heart the matter. It's a trait in writing I really envy. And I love this tortured Ginny. You're definitely showing another side to her that I find very believable. And the glimpses into her and Harry's sex life were HOT. I hope there's more of that :) See you tomorrow night....
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From SalonKitty on June 12, 2010
What. An. Opening. Lol.

Well, once again, I'm a bit breathless by the severity of Ginny's punishment and the depths Harry has sunk in his depravity. While you've done a fantastic job of showing us how Ginny's mind has folded in on herself, what you've shown us with Harry's psyche is fascinating. I love Harry's dark side, and hell, you brought it out in full force here. He's so abusive to his girlfriend, it's kind of heartbreaking to know that he's been locking this side of himself under wraps for as long as he's been connected to Voldemort.

First, a beta note--One of his hands threaded through his hair. I think that was meant to be 'his hands threaded through her hair. Also, sometimes you say, 'was stood', instead of, 'standing'.

This line:
'Oh, but I love you as a whore,' he said. 'You give me so much more satisfaction.' Made me giggle. Harry getting into his dirty side, full throttle, is hot. But I can definitely see how having the freedom to debase her gives him the opportunity to revel in being 'bad', finally.

I will say, as my only word of criticism, the fact that you have placed this story not that long after the war ends with Harry vanquishing the Dark Lord, makes me think that these three are still essentially teenagers, even through all that they've endured, and they tend to speak like adults in their thirties. But, it's a fantasy, and I'm fine going with it.

Harry losing his shit while caning Ginny is familiar territory for me, so I ardently approve. *thumbs up gesture here* But when he thinks this: She'd brought this on herself. She'd betrayed him; she'd made him see what he was inside. She hadn't brought Riddle out of a Boggart... she'd brought Riddle out in him. Wow, that so articulated his struggle and why he's so upset with her. With that one line, the reader is suddenly fearful that Harry can't come back from this.

And crap, should I have not told you that I loved how close Hermione and Harry are in this? 'Cause that friendship is over. Or, at least, in tatters. I would think it's going to take a while for her to ever forgive Harry for what he did, both to Ginny and to Hermione. I wasn't expecting a full-on duel! Although, lol, I loved his innocently played compliment to her about her thighs. And I loved Harry thinking that this was all like being someone else for a change.

By the time we get to this:
He leant over Ginny moving one hand over her back, while the other stroked her hair. His mouth came forward to whisper in her ear. 'Because I want her to watch.' I'm totally Harry's bitch. Fuckin' 'ell, that was hot. Then when he starts demanding she call him 'Lord', that's when my mouth dropped. Whoa. Seriously in touch with his dark side, now. Going to town on her at that point made total sense, but I'm glad she was able to get through to him. The last gesture he gives her made me hopeful. Now they just have to get through the wrath of Hermione, lol.

Yay, I get one more chapter to look forward to!!

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From Daye on June 12, 2010
Oh wow. That's not so much mood swings as 'completely jumped off the deep end' Really makes sense though. I gathered BDSM is some thing you really should do if you genuinely trust each other. Hermione should really have put a stop to this before it started but of course no one could really comprehend Harry going as far as he did because he's such a nice guy really.
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From TheMath on June 11, 2010
Sorry for the late review. >_
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From SalonKitty on June 05, 2010
Ho-ly crap.

Your Harry is just about the sexiest Bastard!Harry I've ever read. I kept highlighting lines he uttered so I could comment on them, but there were too many! This thought that Ginny had stood out, though: There was a monster lurking behind Harry
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From Daye on June 05, 2010
Oh my. Harry's bad. Baaaaad to the bone. And for some reason, spying on people for their own good, seems perfectly in character for Hermione.
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From TheMath on June 01, 2010
Another great chapter! I can't wait for the next!

Although I agree that it was kind of short. That's understandable though, since you re-wrote the chapter.

I can see how things had the opportunity to turn cruel. Though, I have a natural curiosity about what you had written, I am personally glad it did not go that route; 'sexy' is good heheh and this chapter tugged hard enough on my heart strings. I feel really bad for both Ginny and Harry and I can't wait for the story to come to climax, hopefully with sexy results ;). The story has continued to be great to read either way though; you have a talent at writing! Do what YOU feel is best and I'll keep on reading it!

The only other thing I wanted to mention was a slight grammar error that caught my attention; no worries they get past the best of us: "He knew, he must do, that she
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From SalonKitty on May 28, 2010
Well, you know, Julian, now that you say that, I TOTALLY want to read that chapter you tossed! I'm so curious where you were heading with it before you decided you'd gone too far.

My biggest criticism of this chapter is that it was too short! That went by way too fast. However, I found Harry's reaction completely in keeping with his character (I LOVED the details in his room!), and I'm really glad that he spoke to Hermione about it. Poor Ginny is at such a low end, and I can understand Harry's feelings of betrayal, but at least he has Hermione's insight to keep him grounded in what his messed up girlfriend is going through.

For another person, there might have been hesitation, but Harry faced his demons. He knew no other way.

I loved this line. So true, and it makes me love Harry so much. Very excited about your next chapter. (Oh, and feel free to email me if you decide to let me see that other draft). By the way, what do you think of H/Hr? Not in this story, obviously, but I am working on something.
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From Daye on May 28, 2010
Just caught up with this. Good, very dark, obviously, but good. I liked Harry's defeat of Boggart-Voldemort. As well as the description of his room, which was a nice touch.

The Author's note only made me curious though: what was the original version of the chapter like?
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