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Reviews for The Tale of the Halfblood Prince

By : bysoojeekim
  • From kittyperry on May 11, 2010
    Hello my dear,
    This is a nice opening. But, it was Fred Weasley who died. Not George.
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  • From voraciousreader on May 04, 2010
    I know this was your first story, but it seemed that you rushed through it a little too fast. The premise of the house creating the bond had so many possibilities. You should keep this one in mind for another try someday, maybe?
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  • From serinblackmoon on May 04, 2010
    First off, you started off great. But you seemed to rush through the story. Take your time, let the suspense build. Show how they could grow to love and accept each other, maybe show how Ron rebels against the idea. You know, let the story evolve and grow.

    Ok first try though.

    Lady Serin
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  • From voraciousreader on April 29, 2010
    The house as a matchmaker? This is a very original idea. I'm a little confused, though: I thought Severus lived in his father's house and his father had been a muggle. Also, just one thing you may want to go back and change is that Fred died during the last battle, George was the one that survived. I will be interested in seeing where you go with this.
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  • From pittwitch on April 29, 2010
    Payap:

    This would be so much more easy to read if you would put in some sentence and paragraph breaks. Also, while cleaning up the format, you have stray code through the first chapter.
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