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Reviews for Inner Demon

By : JakeFalcon
  • From SirZic000 on July 12, 2010
    Outch.. poor fleur :)
    Continue, it's a great chapter!
    Z.
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  • From dragongirl on July 11, 2010
    Thank you for the information.......... This is going to be so much fun...............
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  • From pfeil on July 11, 2010
    I'd vote for keeping only one girl as Harry's primary. Otherwise the mechanics all get too complicated.

    Perhaps Hermione could become something like his vicerine? She'd enjoy the power, I think.
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  • From KaelHyun on July 11, 2010
    I disagree with the fact that Hermione wouldnt be equil to Harry as Ginny is. She might not be quite as strong as Ginny but she would be able to out think her. Infact now that I think about it if she dose transform it would be in the form of a sphinx (She already kinda has Cat Genes in her from the Polyjuice Incedent) and if Hermione is an Author Avatar for JKR after she transforms she would probably find the punishments of Pansy and the three stooges fitting
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  • From newtothis on July 11, 2010
    i have to disagree ron was in just as much danger as harry becouse he was with harry for every thing, he risk his life to save harry.

    as for ron getting mad at harry for dating his sister that is normal, and would be expected. plus harry did not tell him i would be angry and hurt

    you could very easly have hermoine with harry and with ron would not be very hard, i like ron becouse he is the only one that stand up to harry, and with harry new power he need some one to stand up to him or he will be worse then valdormore
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  • From Uvigunz92 on June 29, 2010
    I'm hoping that you will add Hermione to the harem. you already stated that the bonds have some benefits, with her being Harry's friend i thing he would want to help protect Hermione any way he could and i don't see the reason why harry can't bond Hermione and then let her live her live normally (with some sex on the side). if you don't think that Hermione would agree then you could make it necessary( like Hermione being hurt and Harry trying to help her).

    if you don't want to go that way then you could spin it other ways. i would think if Hermione knew about the bonds she would like to to at-least research it, you could spin it any number if ways from there.

    the point i was trying to make was that there are number of ways to get Hermione into the harem without making it OOC( and i don't think thats the problem, you already made harry and Ginny pretty OOC). i don't see any reason not to add Hermione expect your own wishes as an author and maybe readers wishes.

    it pretty much become "why Hermione should be in harem" post so something about the story: the story isn't my thing ( i don't think you should ever mix smut with plot, but its just my opinion), but its still good enough to get me to read it. there is a flow (witch is missing in most fanfics), i didn't notice any glaring grammar errors and plot isn't any worse then other "smut with plot" fanfics, it actually may be better then most( admittedly i didn't read many of them so i can't really judge well).

    i have a problem with then you started this fics time-line vise. i don't think theres anything for harry to do but prepare for tri-wizard tasks( or waterer its called) for now. I'm afraid that you will try to fill up time with lots of smut witch will get repetitive, and then boring fast( the trap that most "smut with plot" stories falls into), or have harry do nothing for long periods of time without any reason other then author don't having anything to write about ( another option that i see often, and often seen in fics without smut too).

    i think this review is getting a bit long so i will leave it with good fic so far, and hoping it won't go downhill from there but it will continue to soar.

    PS. i just realized that with harry and Ginny turning heads by merely being in others presents makes it ever easier to get Hermione in.
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  • From newtothis on June 28, 2010
    why did you have to make ron a jerk, in cannon he almost died for his friends a few times, to me that make up for a a kid of 14 say a few bad things.
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  • From dragongirl on June 28, 2010
    Are you planning to include Hermione on this fic? Or any danger or rescue?
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  • From firelordeg on June 28, 2010
    well its a fantastic start so far i hop you have harry bond Hermione with a bound of equals or close to that thank you for sharing
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  • From SirZic000 on June 27, 2010
    Awesome!
    Continue,
    Z.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 20, 2010
    "...through her cervix..."

    This does not happen - ever. Learn some anatomy, dude.
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  • From Hermyone on June 20, 2010
    Loving it, really good story, long may it continue
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  • From KaelHyun on June 16, 2010
    Personally I hope you include Hermione in Harry's little Harem seeing as how there is the theory that some muggleborns are descendants of Squibs and theres also the fact that she Has a name that's related to a famous pureblood family
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  • From dragyn42 on June 14, 2010
    Not my favorite site to review on, but I have to say THANK YOU! Its so rare to get a good H/G monster smut where Ginny isnt abusive or abused (or otherwise completely vapid.) I really hope you continue this, something that doesnt seem to happen much with the promising stories on this site, and I look forward to more. *crosses fingers*
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  • From kogaluver on June 13, 2010
    Thanks for the heads up on no male on male action. In your summary of warnings you have M/M which would lead me to believe that there would be male sex. I would have been very disappointed having gotten into a fic only to find out that you're only going to mention the gay sex. So, once again thanks for the heads up, although you probably should remove the M/M warning from your summary and replace it with "mentions of gay sex". Just a suggestion. Moving on to find pretty bois having sex with each other. Good luck with your story ^_^
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