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Reviews for The Prophecy Of The Forbidden

By : redrain520
  • From tinkerbell1989 on January 20, 2011
    OMG! I LOVE this story!! Please update sooon! =)
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  • From tinkerbell1989 on January 19, 2011
    I know I haven't written any reviews, but I was so caught up in the story. I love this story BTW. It's now one of my favorites =) LOVED the sexy scene!
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  • From HeartStar on September 29, 2010
    I love this poor girl! I hope to see more soon.
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  • From Extacy925 on September 18, 2010
    that wazz not the real Draco i hope she can tell the differents when he comes bakk update soon!!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 16, 2010
    You're welcome. :) As I said, I'm learning too. :)

    Now I had to read that twice because I was thinking 'holy crap, what's going on?' I though Blaise had turned around and done the right thing in apologising but no. Then I had a little thought about what your story's twist might be and I have a theory on exactly what happened. Now I have to wait and see if I guessed right. :) I liked that Harry was more or less accepting of her 'friendship' with Draco but damned if I would let Ron hold my hand after what I witnessed. Hermione's a better actress than I am. LOL
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 13, 2010
    I'm glad Blaise apologised even though I'm not sure if he was forced to do it or he decided to do it on his own. Wondering why all the sudden interest in Hermione too, (what's the twist? LOL) well except for Ron. These boys that think with the wrong head. LOL I can imagine the indescretion might almost be forgiveable if he hadn't called her a mudblood as well. AlLo intrigued as to who that other boy may have been - Damon perhaps? LOL And what's with those two necklaces, even more interesting. :)

    I'd agree with your thinking that a full on sex scene there would have been a little early though there was nothing wrong with them pleasuring each other and seeking a certain level of comfort. However, I feel that telling each other they loved one another may have been a little rushed. It is your story though, and if it felt right to put it in there, then that is what matters. I'm far from an expert on writing either, but I appreciate advice that helps me to improve, so I hope you understand that I am offering an opinion, which you are entitled to ignore if you choose to do so, in hopes that you feel more comfortable with what you post.
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  • From ProfSnape101 on September 07, 2010
    hello-

    this is extremely funny because i just finished reading your wonderful story and went to check my reviews to find that you had reviewed. your story is wonderful as i said before. i can not wait till you update. your story is bookmarked so that i can always find it to check for updates. i will post my story on fanfiction.net i think and look for a beta over there too. i have an add up on the forum here but no one has responded. you like the pairing that i do so i hope to see you post more stories!
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 03, 2010
    If you go into the INFO & SUPPORT section, then into the F.A.Q. tab and go into the archived section of that tab, there was a heading there along the lines of "Allowed HTML tags for formatting your stories and texts" and that gives you the guidelines of how to set out your page. For example, to get italics, at the beginning of the paragraph you do this < i > and to finish it, you do this < /i > Bold is < b > and < /b > to close. (Take out the spaces) Please forgive me, when I suggested italics, I should have asked if you knew how to do that instead of just assuming that you knew. :( Anyway, on to the review. :)

    Thanks for spacing it out, much easier to follow (for silly old me anyway) LOL Aww I don't like when Blaise is the bad guy, but I have to suck it up for the sake of the story. :) And he definitely was the bad guy but I have to say, I hate Pansy even more right now. As a woman, you'd think she'd understand what Blaise had in mind and react accordingly, blood should have nothing to do with it in a case like that. Whatever happened to women sticking together in this situation? Yep, definitely more pissed off with her. Of course, I'm all for Draco taking out his disgust on Blaise, too. Poor Hermione, if she wasn't confused before, she'll be totally beside herself now, trying to work out what the hell is going on with Draco and why he might have saved her. Also think the kiss with Ron was the perfect after effect of what just happened. Of course, she would turn to someone she was familiar with to seek some comfort, and Ron, as naive as ever, took it to mean something more and then acted like a right bloody git when what she really needed was just to feel safe. Well done! :)


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  • From ProfSnape101 on September 03, 2010
    Please post more soon! really good plot so far! i want to see what happens next. will hermione eventually forgive ron? if not whose side does harry end up taking? so many questions left hanging.
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 02, 2010
    You have a good story here, and I love that there's going to be an original character adding to the mix. Very interested in seeing how he fits into the tale.

    I found it hard to distinguish between Hermione's thoughts, and Draco's point of view at first. Would you consider italics for the interior monologues or perhaps a little more spacing between them? :) Thanks and look forward to the next chapter. :)
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  • From Ravengirl7 on September 02, 2010
    Good start! Your ideas are great; just keep working on your writing style and grammar!
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  • From HeartStar on September 02, 2010
    I look forward to see where you take this.
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  • From AlexavieraRaven on September 01, 2010
    Your very welcome no worries or problems ^__^

    Anyways it's a good story and you know I read it before and liked it then and I am honored to help and be your Beta so again thank you.

    Besides it's good to be able to read what happens next before anyone else does :P But i know grom what you had posted at FF.net was really good and I'm glad you brought the story or are bringing the story here to Adult Fanfiction.

    Anyways Blessed Be!

    Luv ya and be good!! hehe Don't do nothing i wouldn't and that's very broad as there is almost nothing i wouldn't do!!

    Alexa
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 01, 2010
    Hey,

    Just read your first chapter. Pretty damn good m'lady! :D I like cruel draco, i just can't help it. But at the end you see he's not mean coz he wants her to be happy. There were a couple of mistakes that were a bit distracting but mine was the same and I ended up with two Betas. As for your blogspot- this is the link http://prophecyoftheforbidden.blogspot.com/
    It's called a URL and it's in the search bar at the top of any webpage, like an address almost. If you copy and paste it ppl can copy and paste it straight into the search bar :) Hope this helps. I look forward to chapter two!

    BTW thanks for suggesting my fic hun! :D
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  • From straightlyconfused on September 01, 2010
    Good beginning. I think this story has a lot of potential.
    Post soon plz.
    Straight
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