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Reviews for Harem of the Ancient House of Potter

By : SSJ04Mewtwo
  • From StillHorny on November 11, 2010
    Thank you, thank you, thank you!!! I did go back and re-read all of the beginning chapters and am glad to see Hermoine taking her Alpha duties so strong and personal. *smirk, wink*

    So now we are up to six and noone seems to be doing without sex at any time. Oh, I do love the smut, it makes me all warm and wet inside. I can't wait until the two Slytherians join in the mix. Then Harry will have girls from EVERY house.

    I also love the situation going on with Neville, Ginny, and now Lavendar. I would love to hear more about that. It seems that Neville is QUITE the Dominant, and he loves to spank his girls. Hot, hot, hot.

    Even Arthur is now more relaxed with Molly doing her, wifely duties...seemingly non-stop.

    More, please!
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  • From azphxbrd on November 10, 2010
    Good chapter,
    You know I am not surprised that more than Mclaggen wasn't the only horny toad that was trying to get Susan along with the Bones fortune.I like that Susan is a member of the family.I hope Cho's mother take Lord Potter-Black up on his offer of protection,cant wait to see old Lord Chang's face if both ladies leave him in his bind.I was wonder what old Voldy was doing in the Potter catacombs,he sure wasn't for the pleasure of sight seeing tour of the Potter ancestry? I see the race for ownership of hollows is a foot.Keep up the good work.
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  • From dominique1 on November 10, 2010
    i fine that i like it harry with cissa but hate that he treats her like a pet andd i would hope poor draco comes tothe black to as well as severus
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  • From ANON - Stephanie on November 03, 2010
    I love this story please update really soon. i love the story line. what is ur plan for the whole ginny story line?
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  • From ANON - Lord Lee on October 24, 2010
    very good over all ...I love the harem aspectin the story.I can't wate to read more keep up the good work...
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  • From angelnomiko on October 20, 2010
    wow that was awsome i love it .. please please update soon iwould love to read more ..later for now

    angel
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  • From ANON - shawn on October 20, 2010
    great story man, keep goinin
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  • From bsmith2114 on October 14, 2010
    Like the story. like the concept. Harems are good stuff. Please don't take this crit badly, but you need to learn to write the smut parts better. The devel is in the detail as they say. For now anyway this is a great story with poor smut. The advice that I give male writers, and you are male, is to try to think of sex from a female perseptive. Last longer and more detail. I'm sorry if I have offended you, that was not intentions. Hope it helps.
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  • From ANON - April on October 13, 2010
    know not no. and pensive not pencive. loved the chapter and the threesome at the end.
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  • From Rainbow12004 on October 13, 2010
    poor harry I love it
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  • From azphxbrd on October 13, 2010
    Good chapter,
    I see Tonks the double agent is working out fine.
    Tom has finally realized he has lost 150% of his former funding (Malfoy and Lestrange money),and he is worried about family contractual obligations.
    I think Lord Chang better watch out because Voldy,Dumbledore heard the marriage plot through the grapevine while the MLE knows for sure.
    Finally,I hope that Snape or anyone finds out about Harry's family hereditary backround.
    Question: Whats McLaggan doing to get under his skin considering he not playing on the team.

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  • From AnonymousAndrogyny on October 13, 2010
    I like this story, I really do. But many of the inconsistencies are very off-putting. Firstly the story is a bit fast paced. You progress it so quickly that there isn't a chance for a particular plot point to develop fully. Harry seems a lot like a watered down Voldemort, as well. And another thing, you aren't explaining how Harry knows certain things, like how he somehow guesses out of nowhere that Dumbledore asked Snape to kill him tond spare Draco's soul, even though this wasn't found out until the next year. He has demonic blood, of course, but that doesn't really explain how Harry's thought processes led him to that conclusion The story doesn't flow very well, is what I'm trying to say. And of course, spelling errors (you keep typing 'Aura' when I know you mean 'Auror'). I'm pretty sure that these things will be fixed or revised once you get a beta. If you'd like, I would volunteer for the job.
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  • From StillHorny on October 13, 2010
    Way to go Alpha (Hermoine)!!! Teach Tonk a lesson.

    Poor Harry, so many wiches and so little time. But if he is going to die...what a way to go!!

    Thank you for answering my questions!
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  • From azphxbrd on October 12, 2010
    Good chapter,
    First: I hope see that he is batting for wrong side,I dont think he knew all details of his mother's fate.
    Second: Harry sure laid the law down on Lord Chang,I wonder if he will change his mind on the deal and retailiate against Harry?
    Lastly: I beleive that Harry has turned Dumbledore's agent,Is Harry going to use her as a double agent to keep tabs on Dumbledore and the Order?
    Thats all for now.

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  • From Takai153 on October 12, 2010
    Nice story. I like the plot and who is in the harem. Your sex scenes are kinda short though. I'd really like it if you tried lengthening them by at least 2 times. More anal sex would be great too.

    I got a good idea for what Hermione should do to Tonks. Use a spell to give herself, Bella, and Narcissa dicks and gang rape her. I think that would be really hot. I'd also like to see that spell used beyond punishment; it'd make the threesome/moresomes hotter.

    Keep up the awesome work and please update as soon as you can!
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