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Reviews for Reden

By : Pheobi
  • From AbbyRose on February 28, 2013
    Hey, so I have been reading all your other stuff today, and I finally decided to review. I really want to see more of the academy, and see how Draco and harry will interact and such. I don't really have much more to say, except I hope you continue with this story, the german night one, the cheli-creature one (I really want to see harry and snape kissing in the great hall. I can totally see them kissing and harry holding on to him, and it going on for a while.) and coming home. I really liked all of those, and I apologize for not just reviewing on the story. Have a good day.

    --Abby
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  • From ANON - ccme213@aol.com on April 04, 2012

    OMG luv it! Luv ur writin


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  • From kdarkbutterfly on December 03, 2010
    I love it!!!!!!! Seriously, this is really good and I would like to read more :) I hope you post soon, it is very intriguing and to me seems very original.
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  • From Faletta on November 19, 2010
    I think you should continue the story. I like it. Please update soon.
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  • From ANON - eiajhn on November 18, 2010
    this story sound kind of interesting! please send me an email when you update! eiajhn@hotmail.com
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  • From ANON - Angelica Faerie on November 18, 2010
    Dude, so cool. Please continue. I want to read more.
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  • From HeartStar on November 17, 2010
    continue please.
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  • From XxAntiSocial1xX on November 17, 2010
    It's good please continue!!! Don't press that big red button!!!
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  • From worriorbookwyrm on November 17, 2010
    I would really love for you to continue, and could you please write longer chapters?!
    Thanks
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  • From LadySesshoumaru on November 17, 2010
    wow i am lovin it so far but one suggestion i would fix this before the admin hides your story and i would hate for that to happen.."Disclaimer: I do not own anything from the tv show Friends. I make no money from this."
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  • From ANON - Celestialuna on November 16, 2010
    Yay, we finally meet Draco, can't wait to meet the others.
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 16, 2010
    For some reason this story is intriguing me, but there are a few things I wanted to point out that make your writing a little... immature. I'm only saying this because I think you can do better, I know criticism sucks so I hope you take it as I mean it: constructively.

    The biggest problem i have is your character descriptions. I swear if I see one more person use angelic, perfect, or elven in their physical descriptions then I'll explode. There are other, better, ways to describe someone. And no one is perfect, so describing a character as perfect makes them unrelatable. If you want your audience to connect to the characters, you need to dig deep and think harder about what you want them to look like. A good practice I use is to find random photos and then describe that peraon in as interesting a way as possible. Beyond "blue eyes, high cheek bones, pale skin..." you can delve into what the person's physical looks tell about their personality. Like smile lines or shifty eyes.

    And just on a curious note: pale purple streaks would be freakin hard to achieve in black hair (believe me, I've tried), does Abyss have extensions? Or is this a sign that not everyone at this school is normal?
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  • From LadySesshoumaru on November 15, 2010
    i am liking this so please send me a email update for this story to at latriceguillory@hotmail.com...thanxz
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  • From ANON - Celestialuna on November 15, 2010
    Aww, poor Harry, goodbyes are so sad!!
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