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Reviews for She Will Be Mine

By : WannabeTomStalker
  • From ANON - Erika on December 13, 2010
    that is totally ridiculous. can't someone just assume that the carver invented a spell that removes prints? love your story great chapter looking forward to more!
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  • From thelovelylela on December 13, 2010
    Blerg. I have had stupid comments from mods. like that on stories of my own. Nothing makes writing less fun! But the story is great, can't wait to read more and I will continue to look for it here muggle tape or not! With love, ~Tem
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  • From brifelton09 on December 12, 2010
    Damn girl your evil to end it there.....please update soon I must know what happends next....
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  • From dracoschick007 on December 12, 2010
    Hey, don't worry about the administration over at GE. This a really good story and you should finsh it for yourself not for anyone else.
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  • From ANON - Jacqui on December 12, 2010
    Oh please oh please continue this story! It's my favorite!!! Ignore the haters who are clearly confusing the alternate universe of Harry Potter with reality. There are no more House elves in the real world then there are CSI agents in the Harry Potter world! What a lame reason to pull a chapter. But don't let them get you down. I love this story and hope you finish it. The writing is excellent as is the plot. I haven't read this concept before about the magic draining curse. I love it!!
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  • From ANON - Me on November 23, 2010
    Hurry up and update already!!! D:
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  • From ANON - Bellaedwards on November 22, 2010
    Oooo I like this! I love stories where Draco is still an ass and slowly warms up because he starts to fall in love with Hermione. In this story I feel like you've made him especially cruel to poor Hermione but I feel like there's part of him that is just feeling insecure because he's not the type of guy to be the bigger person, so as long as he thinks she doesn't like him he's going to be mean to her. I hope you can keep updating fast and not abandon this story like so many authors do. It's also nice to see that alexisrose is your beta can you please bug her to update?
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  • From katiekrm on November 22, 2010
    This chapter upset me. I think Draco is despicable now. If he had come back to Hermione to apologize instead of making her have to find him, when she's in no shape to do so, while being insulted by his ancestor after she's just been brutally attacked, then he could have redeemed himself after the end of last chapter. Instead, he makes her practically beg him to heal her. She is not a bigot. Her feelings about him are based on 7 years of him being absolutely wretched to her, most of which happened before Voldemort returned. When someone has been that awful for that long, they have to prove they've changed and it takes time. He obviously has not b/c he left a tortured woman, whose wounds were continuing to hurt her, to rot. I liked the premise of this story and I was really enjoying it up until the end of the third chapter, but I don't think Draco can redeem himself in my eyes after they way he just acted. And I don't like that Hermione considered herself a bigot. I wish you luck with this and I know others are enjoying it as is. I don't know if anyone else had a problem, but I wasn't able to review this until today b/c the "recaptcha" words were missing.
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  • From ANON - Tish on November 20, 2010
    for the love of god!! please write more!
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  • From ANON - paigeey07 on November 20, 2010
    Oh Id like see more please! :)
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  • From ANON - forever his on November 17, 2010
    I'm intrigued, can't wait to read more.
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  • From ANON - HarryisHawt on November 17, 2010
    Hmm, so I read the chapters and I read your reviews and I don't think u should change anything I think it's good that Draco has changed but he's still the same too from the books I mean. You said it was a dark story so why does everyone want to like drAco? I'm sure we will like him later on but now I think it's good he's still an ass thAt way he can change and your story can have a character arc. If he was already perfect the story wouldn't be as interesting. So do whAt u want because it's your story I just thought I'd tell u that I like the way it is and inever review so u know I must really like it sofar!
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  • From margotlefaye on November 17, 2010
    I hope you will take the critiques of the ending of the third chapter as what they are intended to be: constructive criticism pointing out where you've made a false step, not an attack on your work or your worth as a writer. You do have a story with a great deal of potential and you have handled a lot of the (admittedly dark) material you're working with quite well. But I completely agree with those who found Draco's insensitivity to Hermione's pain in that final scene to be too much of an overreaction, one that made him an unlikeable and unsympathetic character. I would recommend revising that part of the chapter. I totally get that you want your audience to realize that Draco has also suffered in the war, and bears his own scars. It's fine if, in a later part of the story, they have a misunderstanding that drives him away. But in this scene, Draco storming out on Hermione when she's just been so horrifically brutalized is not the right way to get those other points across. He comes off as a monumentally selfish little shit not to mention a drama queen, who can dismiss the physical anguish of a torture victim because his feelings were hurt, and it's all about "me, me, me." I hope you will rework this so that our sympathies can be engaged with Draco, again, and we can continue to enjoy the story.
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  • From katiekrm on November 16, 2010
    Draco was pretty great up until the end of this chapter. It was his fault Hermione moved since he didn't warn her he was starting again and then he complains about it. I don't think Hermione meant anything by the torture comment except that it was very painful and Draco made her awful experience all about him. That's pretty darn selfish. I feel sorry for what he's been through, but Hermione is the one going through hell in the present and he was out of line. I feel more sorry for her b/c people she knows may be viewing those photos of her and that's just a further violation. Poor Hermione. I'm looking forward to more!
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  • From Bluedragon5544 on November 16, 2010
    I just got done reading all 3 chapters so far and I love this story and I am looking forward to reading more of it and I can't wait to find out who is the Carver and why he killed all of them girls. great job so far. update when you can.
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