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By : griffonsperch
  • From wolfcathope on January 21, 2011
    Not bad it should be interesting but need more.
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  • From MariaTeresaQuintanar on January 20, 2011
    Hi! I just wanted to let you know that you're doing a good job with this story. As far as cheating (due to looking up the contract) honestly, I think of that as research and not cheating in the least. Those contracts exist for a reason between the two parties to let everyone know where they stand. You did a great job of it. One thing though, and this is silly when I think of it, but when referring to Dominate/submissive the latter (the submissive) is always in lower case form. A Dominate shows their position even in wording and by having both with capital beginning letters (i.e. D/S or Dominate/Submissive, etc...) you are giving the submissive equal footing as the Dom. Language, as they say, is power and your Dominates are giving it away (something I can't see them doing) if you don't use the correct forms or titles. A good book to read about the lifestyle is "The Loving Dominate". I can't recall who wrote it, but it can be found in any bookstore in the Sexuality section. I hope this helps. Thanks for sharing and I hope you update soon.
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  • From ANON - Draconian Starlight on January 20, 2011
    Ah, how pretty! I love it still. The contract is correct in my eyes for such a story. However, i was wondering...Harry doesnt really act the part of a complete submissive for this level of relationship. Perhaps you would consider toning his rebellious independence down a bit?
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  • From shelly56787 on January 20, 2011
    I originally wasn't sure how I was gonna feel about this... LoL, thats not a bad thing. I really liked the first story, I love lemons. I'm happy that you are continuing the story like this. I like the how well you write first person from Harry's POV. Aside from some spelling errors, and some punctuation thingies that stuck out and poked me in the face, its fabulous.

    Oh, some of the paragraphs kinda run together a little bit. They need like the space between them to be easier to read. *nods* ^_^ You did it most of the time it's just occasionally like you were all excited by what you were typing and didn't press the enter key enough. *nods* I totally do that allllll the time! ^_~ Um. Yeah, but I really like this and I'll be watching for an update!!

    Love,

    Rose @~*~

    PS. If you ever need someone to throw ideas at, you should totally email me! rscreighton@gmail.com! ^_~ I know sometimes I need someone to bounce things off of. Keep up the great work!!
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  • From bloodshound on January 20, 2011
    it's not cheating, its research and a perfectly valid thing to do when writing on a subject you aren't sure of. Kudos.
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  • From kitmistress on January 19, 2011
    oooooh I liked it, and I must say job well done on switching from first to third. its was well done and not choppy which it seems to do most times but it was smooth so thank you, also thank you for the quick updates its amazing oh and please stick with the third unless the chapter need first you do both well but this story is nice in third. please continue to update quickly or at least give us a warning! (sorry i hate when authours just peace out)
    Again job well done
    thank you
    Kit
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  • From tsukinotora on January 19, 2011
    Thanka for the "beautiful muse" part (blushes) I think the contract should have not only punishes, but also rewards. Maybe not too materialistic since Harry is not interested in money, but something to show that his Doms really care about him....
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  • From magentah on January 19, 2011
    Glad to see this updated so quickly! One thought--to me, the punishments Severus listed seem a little backwards. Ten spanks with an open hand wouldn't be the most comfortable, but I have no doubt that Severus or Draco would take care of Harry afterward. Spending a night alone without either of his Doms to cuddle or play with seems as though it would affect Harry very much, after his years of neglect. :) I know at least in my experience, I'll get spanked for talking back but have to have done something particularly bad to not be allowed to sleep in the same bed for a night.

    I'd love to see Harry respond positively towards some bondage! But I'm so happy they're setting up a contract first before getting into the fun parts. :)
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  • From Tesgura on January 19, 2011
    Aw, no contract! Oh well, that chap was cute, can't wait to read more!
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  • From wolfcathope on January 19, 2011
    I hate cliff hangers :( but I understand.
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  • From bloodshound on January 19, 2011
    yes you're a tease dammit. But i'm still very much hanging for the next chappie. so when ever you're ready sweety...
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  • From on January 18, 2011
    I really like your story!!! hope you will update soon.. thank you clanz
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  • From Raholea on January 17, 2011
    *pounces*
    So, yes, Lucius was a prick and i kinda like Severus in general, i have a soft spot for the non- bastard version of him. I really like being able to go back and see Harry's perspective of this, it helps so it's less non-con feeling and more.. well, balanced. Not that i don't like my share of non-con dominance, but.. i rather like this better. and nice sweet lovin is a part of what your Harry needs, so i'm glad to see it. More, when you can!!
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  • From ANON - nymphealotus on January 17, 2011
    Hi.
    3 Chapters in one go, that's great.

    I've a few questions.
    How can Ron walk on H/D/S having sex? Aren't they in Malfoy Manor? Or is it in the future?
    Sure, Harry is writing. But to whom? (The Prophet, a letter, a diary...)
    Who did obliviate the adults when Harry was young?
    What potion did Severus use in the 3rd chapter?

    I know, there is a lot of questions, but I enjoy a lot your fiction.
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  • From draechaeli on January 17, 2011
    Of course that deserve reviews. Very nice I like it, and I'm not a fan of first person, keep it up!
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