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Reviews for A Traitors Heart

By : inuren
  • From ANON - gyuchin on March 25, 2011
    Excelent story so far!
    Love it!
    Dumbledore is the worst! He will want to jkill Harrys triplets once he learns of them!!
    And what the hell will do Snape once he realise that the child he tortured give everything up to save the childrens of his beloved godson?
    Will he ever be redeem? i mean, he is a jerk, but he loves deeply and forever... even if in a bit of a twisted way!
    Draco will want to kill himself again once he learns he didnt only abandoned his lover but his children!
    Wonder how will Harrys great grandparent react to all of that!
    Hope to read more soon!
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  • From Cinder1013 on March 24, 2011
    I am really enjoying this, but sometimes I lose track of who is speaking. I like all the dialogue, but I need a 'Harry said' or something.
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  • From JtheChosen1 on March 23, 2011
    Interesting twist - I expected Harry to sort of become a war chirf like Dumbledore and Voldemort and make a third side in the war, yet he is legally going after those in the Light side that wronged him. I expect he'll play dirty though when it comes to the Dark Lord haha.

    Keep up the great work!
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  • From bloodshound on March 23, 2011
    go Harry go. Those prick bastards deserve nothing less.
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  • From freemaka on March 23, 2011
    Great chapter. I like where you are taking this story, though I am waiting for the denouncement scene where everyone finds out about the babies.
    A correction you might wish to make is
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  • From dominique1 on March 23, 2011
    i spent the last two day celebrating my birthday it was nice i did hope there would be at least two chapter update but at last not i loved it harry taking action i do hope severus tells everyone what happen to harry and the guard she be in prison themselves harry needs his babies looking forward to draco finding out about his children i do hope that harry gets full right to his children and the malfoy are entitle to none can someone kill severus want more please love it
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  • From AngelKellar on March 22, 2011
    Oh... My... Gosh... i cried and cried when those babies were taken from Harry. i cried from when they were taken all the way to chapter 10 probably. It was sooooooo sad!!! :'( Please tell me Harry gets his precious children back? After everything, in the end, he should be able to have his babies back. If nothing else, Harry should have his life back... Right? And as much as i'm trying not to, and i hate to say it... i feel bad for Draco and kind of... sort of... maybe want him to find a way to win himself back into Harry's good graces...? :/ The rest of them, Harry can have vengeance on. :) Just as long as he doesn't kill them... or torture them... or maim them... Screwing up their lives is good! Like framing them for crimes-ok, that's horrible, but i'm trying to throw out ideas here. Um... they could always really be doing something that could get them fired from their job, or sent to prison and Harry could just out them? Ideas... ideas... Well, i'm excited to read whatever you come up with-even if it is torture... :/ :) Please write more soon! i really enjoy your story! :D
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  • From Jan on March 22, 2011
    I find it good that you decided to mention some of Dumblefuck's planning through out the years.... but don't you think that an entire chapter of his boring mussing to be a bit much?

    Anyways please update chapter 16 soon, can't wait to see what Harry is going to do next.

    Jan
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  • From hawkswench on March 21, 2011
    This chapter was a lot better, it had more detail and what seemed to be a more conscience thought process.
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  • From dominique1 on March 21, 2011
    still go but their so many thing i want albus dead and harry with his babies
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  • From JtheChosen1 on March 21, 2011
    Glad to see some of the unknown manipulations coming to light now! Great work here, loved it!
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  • From hawkswench on March 19, 2011
    You were doing really well until your brought in the so called great-grandfather. After all if being an Elemental is so powerful why didn't they find him right after Harry came into his inheritance? I do agree with one reviewer that you are leaving a few too many holes in your story. Maybe a few side paragraphs of Hermione or Rons POV on how they plan on getting Harry to trust in them again? Hopefully you won't make Harry some super power person. I can see how an air elemental might suit him as he was an excellent flyer.
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  • From bloodshound on March 19, 2011
    wow, not that i blame him but theres got to be someone who can help Harry with his bitter, i hate everyone attitude. btw, is he going to go find his kids? Now that he knows the Malfoys can find out, they're going to need better protection.
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  • From ANON - dominique 1 on March 19, 2011
    Question albus has his medical records that will cover the birth of his children and rape's
    if the order is at g12 than the black family tree should show them on there.is sirius and remus apart of the order accusing harry if not where are they will the guards pay for what they did to harry. i know this must be small but its like your leaving lose ends and than you bring a grandfather into the mix he would be able to help harry with hiding his children and even getting them back. harry s snapping at everyone but theres no real power behind it. other than him calling herimone a mudblood and telling snape he kill him.its like your chasing your tail adding brilliant plots but not tying them together.
    harry in prison
    harrys rape
    harry has babies
    harrys free
    harry at hogwarts
    harrys at gringotts
    harry meet a gggrandfather
    and why hasn't any one ask about his health poppy has check him for diease she should at less see him and know his file, understand all the weasley turn their back on harry as well as the order but where remus and sirius want more soon
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  • From ANON - dominique 1 on March 19, 2011
    so harry has a great grandfather i like what harry said maybe harry could get his kids and have them stay with his grandfather and i can't wait until the malfoys find out about the grand children that going to be good
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