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From TheLadyMiya on February 22, 2011
Okej, just reposting that long nooo review again. My webreader also got all stretched out. Not nice.
*Bawling* I had written a lengthy analyse of chapter three which had taken half an hour and then the fucking page decided that backspace meant going back a page and it all disappeared *crying* I hate when internet does that. Not only does I have to copy everything before I try to post it, apparently I have to copy everything before I have to delete a word. Which is hard because I do that without really thinking since I write so quickly and if I write a mistake I just delete without thinking. Like now... BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH. And now I have to go as well... okay, when I come back I'll try to summarise what I wrote.
Or well, I can begin with the first thing I noticed. The whole "it was so wrong, yet it felt so right" -monologue Hermione have at the beginning of the chapter... that feels so overused by so many authors. I can understand why you use it because many understand what it means and it doesn't take up a lot of space to write it. However, it would also make sense if Hermione completely denied why she was acting like she was. That she lied to herself and said that "I wear my battle scar proudly" and that she only wore a scar because Ron would be so annoyingly worried if he saw it. And then she could after some time realise why he had such an effect on her. In fact, later in the chapter when you have the whole analyse on how charismatic Voldemort is from Hermione's POV, it totally makes sense to why she is so submissive. So if you are to write something similar again, you could ask yourself if you really need the whole "so wrong yet so right" because you can say it without having to spell it out so well anyway. However, I know that some readers just never get it but... well, that is just something you have to weight off sometimes... anyway, it's completely up to you of course. Just pointing out my observation ^^
Oh, and I absolutely loved the whole scene where you applied the: "the way to a man's heart is through his stomach"! LOVED IT! Voldemort is in looooooove ;) Okay, not in love like normal people, but his kind of love. He has decided that he rather have Hermione alive and won't kill her as a first resort. She is worthy of his time and attention. Which we looooooooove. So YAY!
Okej, so there was something else I wroth rather lengthy about... right, the fact that Hermione have a trouble getting pregnant. A lot of author have her having problem with it (myself included ^^) and also states that her parents had problems with it. I wonder who spread that seed over the fanfiction world, because I can't recall JK mentioning it... or has she? I mean, it isn't at all impossible that it is the fact. However, it could as well be that Hermione's parents didn't want more than one child because they are busy with work as well. Ah, well, it doesn't matter really. For this story it is completely valid that Hermione should have trouble conceiving with Ron... mehe... I wonder if the problem is with Ron, thought, or with Hermione. I'm sure Voldemort will be able to fix it... or maybe his sperm is just as stubborn and determined as he is so they can stick to everything? ;) Hihi... Okay, not I can read the rest of the chapter. I think I've managed to rewrite all I lost... a bit differently, though. Now I copy and save...
Oh, right, I also love the fact that Voldemort likes that Hermione isn't fooled by him :) That is such a nice little add. I understand him, though, it's boring never to be challenged ;)

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From TheLadyMiya on February 22, 2011
Okay, so that's how long it took for me before I got stuck :P Half an hour... Oh, well, now I've logged out from msn as well so I can read without getting interrupted! Finding a nice way to lay... check! A bit bad writing though... oh, well.
Ha! Hermione is right about one thing at least, if there is anyone in the need of a good spanking, it's him, that's for sure. Oh... I can see it before me, Voldemort's lily white arse turning all red as Hermione's hand slaps down on it... hm, I think I heard something? Is there someone at the window? Oh. no.
Several days later a body was discovered in the lake...
Tihi.
Oh, heavens... the conversations you can have with clever people. The sex you can have while having a clever conversation... ah... Personally, I've never got the whole "she felt so much pleasure her brain stopped working". My brain is active through the whole thing. Reflecting on what my partner does wrong, mostly and how I shall change it. Although, somehow I don't think you will make Hermione experience that with Mr Riddle. Tihi. Oh, well. And Hermione as an addict. Hehe... I wonder what Voldemort will do to make her stop that.
"how genteel the expression was" Genteel? Is that some form of the word gentle I have neglected to learn or an error? For some reason, I think the first one... darn.
Haha, with they starting to talk about Slughorn, it just makes me think... if you can discuss a teacher you have both had, then the age difference isn't that big of a deal. :)
"Me and my big mouth, I
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From ANON - lynn on February 22, 2011
So, so, so hot and without lemons. How do you do that? Please, please, please update soon. Can't wait to read more.
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From TheLadyMiya on February 22, 2011
Baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah. I couldn't hold myself away from this any longer. There just aren't any good fics out there anymore. Especially since I just can't handle Hermione going around calling Harry and Ron "Guys" anymore. It's very annoying.
Oh, well. Now I've read two chapters. I started last night at around one o'clock, then at half past two I really needed to sleep so... well, I slept. Then I woke up and watched two Stargate episodes and then I went back to read. So now I've read the first two chapters.
I LOVE how you are portraying Voldemort. I especially liked the part in chapter one where he managed to get the healers commit suicide. It's so very telling about what a manipulative genius he is. And sooooo scary. It was also very interesting that Hermione had tried to kill Voldemort. I'm really looking forward to learn more about that. And why is Voldemort so interested in Hermione? I really like the UST you have going on around them. Just wanted to say that and now I'll go and hang some laundry before I continue with chapter three! Excellent work so far!
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From iheartskittles on February 20, 2011
Thanks for the update! I love this story! Drunk Hermione is a trip. I love her new nickname: Lord Softy Weiner. She should totally try that one on him and see how he reacts. He really is such a tease!
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From StillHorny on February 20, 2011
Oh!!! You and Tom...are such a tease!!!!

Hermoine needs Tom to be dominate, she is too much in control of everything else in her life. I understand her need to just release all that control to someone else for just a little while. Plus Tom is a very ABLE dominate that can control her with such little effort on his part...the perfect dominate!

I wonder how Harry will handle Ron and when will he discover that so much of Hermoine's ramblings were about, none other than the Dark Lord, himself? That should prove a very interesting conversation.
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From ahndja92 on February 20, 2011
Hiya there!
First of all: This is the very same Zarina from ff.net, meaning the very same annoying German who built you an altar and doesn't review your stories half as often as she'd like to.
Yup, I've decided to read your stories here as well. I've discovered that very often, the lemons in your story are rather plot-relevant, and since I've been a legal/adult member of society for some time now, I don't see any reason to NOT read them as well.
Since I don't have toooo much time now (we talked about finals, didn't we? Well, here in Germany, it's not just one week, but three to four weeks of plain torture, PLUS the final finals - the Abitur - coming end of March >.
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From ANON - shinobinaraku on February 20, 2011
LOLOLOL

ahhhh poor Hermione. XD No shagging for you, naughty girl! -wags finger- SIIIIGH Riddle's not going to be very happy when he finds out that darling Hermione hid underwear in her pockets. I'm debating though - would punishment be getting shagged or not? I'm leaning towards not right now. >< just because Riddle would probably get off on Hermione's frustration. :DDD Although I'm not surprised that Hermione would disobey Voldemort. Probably hoping the punishment would be rather...extreme. Plus, she always had book smarts, but Harry solved a lot of the common sense stuffs.

I think....you should kill Ron in this fic. :) And Riddle should have the honor of killing him. PSSH It's not like Ron's a very helpful person anyways. I doubt Hermione would care. :P

I think I'm brain dead at this time...So this is a short review. Update soon!

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From Sommerlee on February 18, 2011
Yayyy, you're writing again!!
I'm REALLY enjoying The Prisoner, and can't wait for some smut!! Are you planning on updating The Apprentice any time soon?
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From ANON - Fleur K. on February 16, 2011
Another lovely chapter! It was deliciously sexy too.....so that was an added bonus. I am eager to see what happens in the following chapter :) I totally read this at 1am on my phone when I couldn't sleep. It was a happy surprise that it was updated! Did I mention Tom is sexy? I did? Just checking.
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From janasi83 on February 12, 2011
Sweet! :) Really like this chapter.
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From StillHorny on February 12, 2011
Such sweet torture you inflict on your poor hapless readers!!! Bringing us to the brink and then moving back. All this and not even any smut yet. But I can't keep myself away; I am drawn to this story; just like Hermoine is drawn to Tom. Knowing that I shouldn't, but not having the willpower to stay away.

Please, torture me some more!!! I am such a Dominant/submissive slut *deep sigh*.
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From ANON - shinobinaraku on February 12, 2011
Lol, I think I'll stick to reading the AFF ones. XD They're infinitely better. :DDD

Haha, I love it when people are easily embarrassed. Tom's such a lovable douchebag. XD And Hermione is quite pretty...or at least she's of average appearance in the books. I always laugh when Hermione's made fun of though. TRIM THAT FOREST NOW! But it would suck to walk around in only skirts with no underwear, sigh. Though I actually think that tight skirts would be more comfortable than loose ones, since they're less like to fly up. (Tom didn't say that Hermione couldn't wear spandex! -winks- although I guess spandex counts as underwear)

AGHAGHAGHAGH THE SEXUAL TENSION IS KILLING ME! You are one evil person. SIIIIIGH but your awesome writing makes up for it. Now if only Tom shagged Hermione. :D

I just realized that I typed Rufus Grint instead of Rupert Grint. I fail. D:

Update soon! Oh, and will AFF updates coincide with FF updates? Because I'm kinda too lazy to make an account here...so I'm sticking with the subscription to The Prisoner of FF. XDDD But if they don't, I could make an account. Anything for you. :)
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From ANON - Tori on February 08, 2011
LOVE IT!!! Now please update again soon! And I would love to see ore from Riddle's point of view. :)
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From scarletwitchextreme on February 08, 2011
OMG love the note at the bottom of chapter 3, and Oh lord thank you for making ron sterile, now let big bad dom riddle knock her up hehehehehe muahahahahahahahahaha I love it
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