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By : melinda1293

From Ladylala04 on March 27, 2011
Speechless... Just speechless. That was an amazing update. The pain, betrayal, and horror was so real. The scene between Harry and Hermione and all the thoughts he had about her before he was forced to hurt her was absolutely heartbreaking. I also love the depth of emotions Harry has for his best mates. I always felt that in cannon, they were the center of his universe. That the main reason he fought so hard to save the world was to make sure they would survive. You have painted that beautifully in this fic. He focuses all of his actions on making sure they live.

I hope that Ron and Hermione forgive him after all of the sacrifices he made for them. I hope this terrible occurrence makes them stronger and heal their wonderfully devoted friendship. *fingers crossed ;-)*

(I really hope Ron will forgive him. They need each other!!!!!)
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From SalonKitty on March 26, 2011
And can I just point out these lines:

And she was so tight around him as he inched slowly into her that it was actually painful. It felt like he was peeling open insider her

That is just so visceral and horrific, but then you upped it with stuff like, blood pouring from his nose; Ron screamed, Hermione screamed, Harry screamed The hysteria building up is off the charts.

Excellent work. I still think your dialogue works very well. Everything out of each character's mouth is so what I expect them to say.
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From SalonKitty on March 26, 2011
Fuckin' 'ell!!

What the beejesus did I just read?!! I'm stunned, STUNNED, by the turn of events. OMG, I've envisioned that Harry/Hermione forced scenario myself, and you just tore my heart out with that scene. And then what followed! I kept thinking of that bit out of Akira where Tetsuo blows up all of the scientists in the room with his mental powers. Truly spectacular escape.

I have to tell you, though---I do find it a bit hard to believe that they'd be able to Apparate right out of the dungeons of Malfoy Manor. They couldn't do it in canon, that was reserved only for the house elves. Seemed kind of sloppy on the DE's/Lucius' behalf. And then for them to go to Ron's room at the Burrow....so surreal. But then you had Harry hightail it out of there, which is so in character after what he's just been forced to commit. OMG, I can only hope that Hermione (and I don't know if Ron will ever forgive Harry after this) can find Harry before he does something horrible to himself or to someone else. His vengeance is going to be running pretty high.

Well, this was well worth the wait (which really twasn't any time at all, but as I said, we've been spoiled), but now I'm going to be going crazy for the next update! What is going to happen to my beloved trio? *bites nails* Oh, God, the tragedy. Please don't let them be splintered into irreparable pieces. Harry is going to need Hermione's help for them both to heal.

Oh my god. Epic.
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From SalonKitty on March 24, 2011
Seriously, I'm going into withdrawal here. You've spoiled me with your previous quickie updates. Hope you'll be posting soon.
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From bloodshound on March 19, 2011
Harry You idiot. Your as good as dead.
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From Remarkable on March 19, 2011
Holy shite and shinola! I was NOT expecting that ending! What in hell are you playing at? So now Hermione Ron and Harry are still stuck there with Snape's cover blown? I am going to be very very interested to see how you get them out of this one (at least, you'd better get them out of it, but at what further cost? ) OH man!!!! Oh man!!! UGH I hate waiting to see what will happen!
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From SalonKitty on March 19, 2011
Holy Shit! That was incredible!

After enduring the humiliation of sucking Snape's cock (nyyyggggg!), I wasn't expecting Snape to turn around and offer Harry escape, especially not with a Portkey. Of course he would never leave without Hermione and Ron, Snape should have known that, but I was stunned by the attack. And then to have Harry use the Portkey for an unconscious greasy git? Wow, I knew there was a reason I loved him so much. Your Harry is absolutely perfect here.

I love the bits where Harry's sanity starts to crumble. His musings on Rita Skeeter while he's in the midst of a blowjob had a warped, black humor to it. But you kind of ruined your joke with a typo----
In bold black lettering:
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From bloodshound on March 17, 2011
woah... snape snapped. He's going to hate himself for this later...
um, is Harry going to survive this? cause it sure ain't looking like it right now.
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From Remarkable on March 17, 2011
Jesus Christ Superstar and Pope on a Rope. What an angsty, awful, wonderful, fucked up and sooooooo possibly true to life chapter. THIS is what happens to people that get captured by death eaters!!! And Snape has been one of them for so long Harry has enraged him past the point of no return. Gods, more! *hiding my eyes but peeking*
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From SalonKitty on March 16, 2011
Well hurry up and write that chapter! Man, oh man, that was intense. You're crazy if you don't think you do a good job with dialogue. You've got Snape's voice down perfectly and his is the hardest of the lot. His thoughts were right on target. You really got to the crux of who Snape was and how his dilemma defined him. I love the image of him stuck between his two masters, Voldemort and Dumbledore. And of course, Harry being the physical embodiment of that which he loved and hated the most. Damn, and this scene is why having the trio captured together is so damn effective. All the Death Eaters have to do is threaten to hurt Hermione and Harry will fold, no matter what he's asked to do.

Gah, indeed! Heartbreaking. But I loved how fierce Harry fought and it's exciting to see his bursts of magic that keep popping through when he's most angry. I think this bodes well for their future. I can hardly wait for the next chapter, really.
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From PoppyMLW on March 16, 2011
My fave so far! Thanks for sharing it.
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From SalonKitty on March 15, 2011
Bellatrix is so EVIL!!!!!! I had a bad feeling about that Ginny dream as soon as it started getting hot and heavy! Poor, poor Harry. But that's what I love about these two---he hates her sooooooo much and having her taunt him in such a way just makes the angst go off the bloody charts. When is this child going to get a reprieve? And still....Voldemort hasn't even made it to the building. Dark times lay ahead, for sure.

I wish this had been a bit longer, but I appreciate the speedy updates. I think Harry definitely needs some down time with his friends or else he's going to be comatose soon. There has to be a glimmer of hope on the horizon.

Oh, and thanks for the notice and allaying my fears to rest. I'm not a fan of Stockholm Syndrome rapefics, either, so it's good to know you're keeping things realistic. I'm curious about Draco's actions, now, wondering if he'll come through for them or not. In my pre-conceived plot bunny, he's a bit horrified by the Dark Lord's reign.

Just for you, Greycie, I am going to post my Harry/Bella/Rodolphus non-con story on this site. Eagerly looking forward to your next chapter.
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From SalonKitty on March 12, 2011
OMG, thank goodness Draco took down the silencing spells!! I almost feel bad for the ferret. And just like Hermione, I'm so worried for Harry!

You managed to get Ron's 'voice' and musings SPOT ON. Even the easy joke about him dreaming of food takes on such tragic connotations in a setting like this. And I could easily imagine him feeling so much dread for Hermione after seeing what they've done to his best friend, and that a part of him would feel relief over the attention being diverted from her to Harry, even while hating himself for it. It's just human nature, after all. We all know that Harry would rather take the abuse than see his friends suffer, anyway, since he always takes on all blame for everything that goes wrong for them. Arghh! They're so heartbreaking!!

At least smarty-pants Hermione can work on an escape plan while she's got the opportunity to discuss their situation with Ron. I do hope that they can talk to Harry soon, as well. He's going to need some of their strength to get through his ordeal. So. Much. Angst. Damn, this is good stuff.

Oh, and in the last chapter---Harry's smell 'reeks', not wreaks.

Keep it up with the quickie updates!
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From Ladylala04 on March 11, 2011
Wow, this story is great. I absolutely love Harry's chacterazation. I've read too many fics that make him into a weak guy. This Harry reminds me of the defiant cannon Harry. That headbutt was amazing!! I'm wondering what the pairing will be if any. ( I'm hoping that its not H/D, but if so it won't stop me from reading this amazing fic!!!!)

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From SalonKitty on March 11, 2011
Hmm, I'm wondering what the DE's are planning. Are they really going to take their sweet time informing Voldemort?

I do hope that Harry, Hermione, and Ron get to communicate with each other very soon. It's hard having them so close and not able to comfort each other. I'm a bit worried about what's in store for Hermione.

I can buy Draco showing up and his complicated feelings around Potter. There's obviously no true malice there and the kid is in over his head. But his appearance makes me somewhat hesitant---if you are planning on having Harry and Draco fall in love, or fool around, or whatever, please let me know now so I can stop reading, thanks. Like your premise for the story...but can't stand H/D.
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