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By : MirkyTwilight
  • From Hydradragun on November 20, 2011
    Finish the story please...
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  • From ShadowOniShinobi on July 15, 2011
    This story so far is just amazing. Seriously beyond amazing. I can' pick anything out that I love because I love it all. Haha! I can't wait for the next chapter, I am really looking forward to it.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 26, 2011
    loved it! More please.
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  • From hellangelhellina on June 07, 2011
    this is not harry's day.
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  • From vanessaclarke on May 30, 2011
    Well, I'm going to be honest. The idea is decent and the writing isn't bad. The only real problem I have with this is that Harry isn't Harry in any way, shape or form.

    His background, his significance, his personality and even his appearance have all been stripped away, leaving nothing at all to justify using the name. You've created an OC and just called him Harry Potter. I would have enjoyed the character well enough you'd simply made him a random wizarding kid who was born around the same time as Teddy.

    His mother, likewise could have been 'any' charms master. There's nothing at all that makes her Lily and there was no reason to call her that. If they had been OC's I would have thought, "Oh, how clever". As it stands, a beloved character has been rendered completely unrecognizable and I found myself disappointed, if only because I was expecting Harry and this isn't him.


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  • From dominique1 on May 30, 2011
    love it so edward showed up cool any way want more
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  • From dominique1 on May 29, 2011
    this is really good story but i found im going to wait until there more to review love it
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  • From ANON - Audrey on May 29, 2011
    I never did like Bella so this story was like a Siren call to me. So far I am pretty addicted to the story and always I eagerly await the next chapter.
    By the way love your summery I think its awesome.
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  • From Vex on May 28, 2011
    Oooooh~! This is amazing!! I'm all giggly and excite to see what will happen next.
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  • From ANON - SilverLion on May 28, 2011
    Damnitalltohell! Bella could screw up a wet dream and not even be in it. She needs to go and play with her leech and leave Harry and Jacob alone. Although a Harry/Jacob/Teddy scene would be verrrryyyyy interesting. Nez pas?
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 26, 2011
    I don't know what to think about this. This was the second story written by you that I've read. I didn't even finish the first chapter, then I found your drabbles and liked them so much that I thought I'll give this one more shot. Maybe there was something I've missed. I'm sorry to say, there isn't.
    While your writing is good and the plot is a bit derivative, but good nonetheless, I don't like the characters. It is Bella bashing, but without name-calling. We know, that Harry will steal Jacob from Bella, but it seems that you do everything you can to excuse his actions. I have a feeling that that is the reason why you portray Bella as a mean person, who doesn't know what she is doing. And at the same time, Harry is this loveable adult, who is perfect. So no wonder Jacob is going to leave Bella. Don't get me wrong, I don't really like Bella's character in general, but in this fic you make me like Harry even less than I like her.

    You go into details about Harry's weight problems, but when he comes home he is suddenly skinny. You make it seem that weight was the only issue in his life, so that as soon as you lose the weight, you get rid of all your problems. It doesn't work that wat. As a person, who struggled with weight for most of my life and having known a lot of people with similar issues, I know that there are usually some deep psychological issues involved. If you are fat and lonely and don't have any friends, it won't change dramatically as soon as you lose your weight. And why can't Harry be a bit overweight anyway. If he is not "hot" enough, Jacob won't look at him?
    I find Harry annoying, an irritating know-it-all. If someone has a problem with me and my choices, I want them to talk to me and not talk behind my back.
    And Bella is suposed to be his half-sister, but he is not concerned for her safety at all. How does Harry even know that she knew Edward is a vampire? If Harry thinks that she's so ignorant, why doesn't he chek up on her or confront her. Instead, he is doing everything he can to have Charlie and Billy against her.

    One other thing is that you have Bella judge Harry by apperances only. But when he is doing the same in regards to her, it's okay. If he thinks that she doesn't know what she is doing, it's better to go around saying that she is stupid instead of just talking to her and finding out what is going on and let her explain herself.

    And there is Harry's obsession with cooking. I like to cook, know many people who like to cook but the amounts of food you have him preparing are ridiculous. No wonder he had weight problems if the only way he knows how to show his feelings is by cooking and stuffing people with food. The fact that it is healthy food, doen't matter.

    And then there is Harry's relationship with Charlie. If I were Bella, I would be jelaous too. Imagine, my dad can only say a few words to me, just few sentences a day, but when my step-brother shows up, they start behaving like some mix between fraternity jocks and girly-girls. They start to talk about their feelings, keep hugging each other and they don't try to include me. Not really, just cook me a meal and that's it.

    And what's with Harry calling Charlie 'Daddy'. Charlie strikes me as a person, who believes that you don't tell someone how you feel about them you show them. He is not a 'daddy' kind of guy.

    And there's also Harry not knowing that Jacob is a shifter, it makes no sense. Charlie is best friends with Billy, so I would expect, that he's visited him at the reservation. If Harry is so close to his father, they probably went there together at least once. Billy even mentions that he expected Harry to visit. If Harry didn't know about Quilette shifters, he must have suspected that there is something more to them.

    And there is the issue with Harry's school. You mention that he grew up few towns over, what with the swimming pool incident, but also he's been to magical school, but he finished it and there was some kind of university after that, I got lost.

    And when Charlie was still married, did Harry live with them or not, what with Lilly being a free spirit and all.

    I already said too much. So, while I love your drabbles, this story is not for me as it just doesn't make any sense.
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  • From hellangelhellina on May 25, 2011
    love harry. i can't wait to read what happens.
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  • From ANON - Cathy on May 24, 2011
    Haha. I'm liking this story so far and I will be patiently awaiting for the next update! :D
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  • From ANON - Cathy on May 24, 2011
    Wow. So far this is amazing! On to the next chapter..
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  • From Arieru on May 24, 2011
    I like it ^^ can't wait for more
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