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From Lizzosaur on June 06, 2012
I'll leave a review, now that I actually have an account. XD
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From Nene on June 05, 2012
Hi,
So I wanted to wait until I was up to date with the story before I commented.
I love the story so much the way you've worked everyone together.
I noticed that you said you like the Anita Blake series, it's one of my favorites.
Have you read the Merry Gentry novels, by the same author.
And just to say it again, I love this story you have created.
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From ANON - Tsukkina on June 03, 2012
Hello,

(I apologize in advance for the mistakes I make in this review because I am French, I'm not good at English so I use Google translation.)

I first read the French translation of your fic on FF.net, and as there were only two chapters at that time, so I'm rush for the original version. I saw that your fic was deleted once for offensive content, I did not miss anything, so I went on reading adultff.net.

I read your 44 chapters in one go. I loved it so much, I read it almost every day! Not fully but mostly my favorite chapters. Often in fics where Harry is a creature, he becomes super powerful at once, or it becomes too submissive to his instincts without having the choice to choose his companions, and I don't like this. Whereas your Harry is already impressive level powers and magic, he is modest, logical, loving, endearing ... Perfect!
You say your Harry look like Brent Corrigan, I have a friend who look like him so much that he has been nicknamed Brent, now I can't stop blush when I talk to him and fantasize about him when I read your fic ... it's very embarrassing. lol

Harry's companions are really delicious! I fall in love! They are perfect! Each has its place in the family and each complete Harry. Have you actors who could represent them physically (as you did with Brent Corrigan and Harry).
I very appreciated already Draco, now I love even more. Since his first appearance (when he saved Harry from other drackens) I knew it was him. But it did not disturb Harry as Draco is the subject? They hate each other normally.
Blaise is too cute! I like his meeting with Harry.
I like Nasta and Max! They are really lovable! Harry was right to start dating older! (It's sad for Arsenio).
Harry didn't have family during his chidhood, now he make up with four companions, Remus, Weasleys and 5 in-laws (I don't count Lucius). Marianne's advice to Harry (CH47) are really effective! I can't wait to see Harry reuse his tears against his companions!
I want Max in my home! I read your fic at night before bed, whenever Max kitchen, it makes me drool and makes me hungry! XD In Chapter 36, Max made of chocolate to comfort his friends, can you give me the complete recipe with doses please! it looks really delicious too! I'm useless in the kitchen, the opposite of Max.

Your sex scenes are really hot! It's very well written! I get all red and burning every time! My favorites are: Harry's first time with Nasta, the discovered evening on the anniversary of Draco, Nasta and Max in the kitchen and the chapter "Little Tease" (Harry is truly sadistic when he wants). I can't wait when Harry use his sexs toys!

About Braiden, I feel that his parents spend the day to change and feed him, now that Harry is pregnant with five babies, it's gonna be hell, poor parents ... I feel like I'm a laugh when Pomfrey will announce the new at harry's family. Harry'll go crazy , six babies under 2 years. With any luck he will give birth in December, he'll be least tired. Draco'll be a little disappointed, next time, it is necessary than babies to be his.

Villains now, Dominic was really horrible! Draco and Blaise were right to torture him and kill him like that! Have they sold pieces as ingredients after Dominic? I hope.
Ron, I like fics where he is nice but I prefer those where he is silly, jealous and nasty, I hope Hermione going to leave him!
Amelle, why someone like Caesar chose this plague? I like fighting between Harry and that bitch, but it's a shame that Max and Caesar fought after.
The Dursleys ... I can't wait for the vengeance of Harry's family against them! They need them to be ruined, humiliated, imprisoned! Vernon and Dudley 'll be hungry, Petunia'll get a domestic slave! I hate them! I love fics where Harry's close friends and relatives to retaliate against them. And Harry really should admit what they did to her. The flashbacks (especially the F-B with courgettes) broke my heart. I hope that revenge will happen soon.

In short, I love your fic, one of my favorites since I discovered fanfictions 5 years ago. whenever I see a new chapter I jump for joy! I congratulate you for sharing your imagination and your writing talent with us. I wish you good luck and that the syndrome's block doesn't reach you.

PS: I've seen projects that you write fanfic, I love them already. Did you already started to write? Will you update before or after completing "The Rise of the Drackens". Again I apologize for the mistakes I made.

Tsukkina
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From ANON - Tatyana on June 03, 2012
Yaaahhhh! I love it! Harry will control everyone :-D. So that meant He will have both girls and boys, well let's see how many of each there will be. And as usual I must add: This story is my favorite. I am so expecting the rest of the story!
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From ANON - hotflower901 on June 02, 2012
In my line of work, we call that Irish twins. When the mother gives birth less than a year apart. The would think that the hardest thing for Harry is being submissive does not mean being a rug. Six babies all in diapers. Somebody is going to need to stay home and help with everything. Do Drackens have house elves? Somebody needs to cut Harry a break. Maybe his morning sickness won't be as bad this time.
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From ladilyndi on June 02, 2012
Draco did bring Harry back up to bed, just the two of them, after their little orgy (or physical intimacy as Nasta describes it). Something could have happened then as they were both awake, something quiet, tender and intimate. Perhaps another Scaled Bits chapter? That could put Draco into the baby race. Or, given the hints of this chapter, Harry and Draco could get it on in Marianna's hottub or something as it appears Harry could go into heat even though he's pregnant. I'd love to see all of them have at least one baby. I also like that it turned out to be a mix of boys and girls.

Harry may be in denial about the pregnancy but Nasta is in denial if he thinks that if Harry had waited he would have taken Harry to see his dad like it was no big deal. After all, France is a much easier trip and he tried to stop that. I find it interesting that Harry appears to have better control of his instincts than the dominants. I want to be a fly on the wall when Nasta, Max and Blaise are taken to task by their parents. Lucius, on the other hand, would probably tell Draco he needed to be stricter with Harry. LOL Also, didn't Nasta say that he would know if Harry sent out a distress call? Why, then, is he allowing everyone to get so worked up?

Now for the questions. Wouldn't Harry having 5 babies while in school make it a bit obvious that Harry isn't a normal wizard and must be some type of creature? Also, Harry's frame was too small to carry one baby to term, how will he be able to carry five and still be able to attend classes given all the stairs? Won't he have to leave school after 1st term or was the comment about babies surviving at 4 1/2 months foreshadowing as that would put the possible births towards the end of the winter break? I thought Nasta was going to take an extended leave when Braiden was born? Is he just waiting until school starts to take it?

Another great chapter. I hurt so much for Harry who just wants a bit of control in his continuing out of control life.

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From daan73 on June 02, 2012
super chapter greatly done
i loved the connection from harry with his in-laws
have to say i am sorry to hear Draco cannot be the father
as i am a drarry girl

Cannot wait for the next chapter
Dani Elle
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From ANON - Stray on June 02, 2012
I liked the idea off Harry taking charge as suggested, but I didn't think he followed through well. It seemed a little like an abusive relationship with all the doms and Nasta telling Harry off! Re the hot weather, 26? That's nothing. I'm from outback Australia where in summer it regularly tops 45C. I can remember when I was in he UK everyone would have their shirts off on the common as soon as the sun was out and it was over 20! Crazy!
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From ANON - dandeliongurl on June 02, 2012
If Harry can so easily heal himself, is it possible for him to heal Richard or Ashleigh?
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From ANON - SilverLion on June 02, 2012
C'mon Harry. The Hat wanted you in Slytherin, and I want to think it was for more than just your connection to Moldyshorts. I know you can be cunning when you want to.
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From ANON - slash_adherent on June 02, 2012
This was a wonderful chapter. It was awesome to see Harry's magic lash out the way it did, and I felt so much pity for him for all the protection being lumped upon him. Although, I thought that only the first clutch made the dominants so protective? Though with the possibility that the child is Nasta's and it will, technically, be the first time he could be the father maybe would make him more protective, but what of the other three.

Poor Draco being the omitted partner in the five baby making. I hope he gets some extra lovin' from Harry later to make up for it.

Also, I'm still totally completely pissed at Richard and Myron. And it really annoys me that Harry was so forgiving to them. They should suffer!!! (although not anything too bad I really do love them normally lol.) That being said, while I don't like that Harry forgave them so quickly, he was completely in character to do so. I would expect the Harry of your universe, with the family situation and his mentality on family to be instantly forgiving to people who he is quickly, if not all ready, looking to as the family he never had. So I wish he wouldn't forgive so quickly, its justifiable that he would. I do hope Max is still kinda pissed at them tho lol.

I also really, really, really hope you write the confrontations between Max, Blaise, and Nasta's parents when they react to the news that Harry just shared on his little floo adventure. Even if you don't put it in the main story I hope you add it to the Scaled Bits. I'm dying to see their reactions.

Oh, lookie there! You got me to review in back to back chapters. Kudos!!! You simply become more amazing with each chapter :D
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From SayokoHime on June 01, 2012
Is your temperature in Celsius? You might want to clarify that in the story. America's temperature is done in Fahrenheit, and 40 degrees Fahrenheit would be a cold summer here. Beyond this minor thing, I think the story is going great! Lot's of fighting going on, and I wonder if it's going to end soon?
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From Jan on June 01, 2012
Wow, 5!? I mean really, don't you think that's a bit much, he already has one that is only a week old and now you want him to have 5 more, meaning that he has to raise 6 babies at once?

Please update chapter 48 soon.
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From ANON - Me on June 01, 2012
So good I love this story I cant wait for more
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From ANON - Emma on June 01, 2012
First: AWESOME CHAPTER AS ALWAYS!! I love this story!! And I was gonna mention that it seems like its been awhile since Draco got any good action. Im still waiting for Draco/Max. Now that would be hot! :)
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