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Reviews for The Rise of the Drackens

By : StarLightMassacre

From ANON - Mitsu on August 01, 2011
You cut off right there??? DX =dies= That was an amazingly well written Quidditch scene. I cannot wait to see Blaise & Draco's reactions. I am also sooo ready to see what happens to Draco during this heat. Should be interesting.
Oh, I vote for Nasta!
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From ANON - Anon on August 01, 2011
I vote for Nasta! I love this fix so far and am following updates on fanfiction.net. Can not wait for the next update! ^_^
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From ANON - Anon on August 01, 2011
the one who knows how to cook, i think that is max , the one that was sent away right?
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From ANON - thestralhorse on August 01, 2011
Awesome chapter!!! The interactions between Harry and the dominant Drackens is so cute i love how he is with the older guys and i am totally in love with all three of them! I can't wait to find out the major twist you have coming up for us I am so excited to see what it is!!!
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From EricaxStrange on August 01, 2011
I don't usually read WIP's, but the summery caught my interest and I had to have a look. WOW! I was really happy I did I couldn't stop reading once I started. I'm really glad you adopted this story. The idea for it was great but YOU have made it even better by being such a good writer. I hope you will be able to finish this, Goodluck with RL and keeping this great fic going! Oh and I like Nasta best I think. ;)
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From ANON - Anne on August 01, 2011
Welcome back! Hope your weather's been pleasant. Us N.Americans have been suffering under sweltering heat. But hey, it's summer and it's almost over. Look on the bright side, right?

I just wanted to ask if you've been feeling well lately. It seemed to me that the last two chapters held a different tone to them. They felt a little impatient, a little temperamental, a little "well-if-they-don't-like-it-then-fuck-them". I hope you're not feeling pressured to write even when you don't want to, because I (and I think many would agree with me) would much rather you take your time and enjoy writing this story instead of feeling so pressured to provide updates that you grow resentful.

I don't know, am I imagining this?

Now I know writers don't like to read criticism, but I do have two issues with recent chapters. The first has to do with Harry's interactions with Ginny - they seem very unnecessarily crude to me. Yes, I realize Ginny's little line of questioning was meant to help facilitate Harry and Draco's reconciliation sex, but I don't think it needed to be quite so graphic and intrusive to make its point. All that "we need nice, large strong men to fuck us unconscious" and other assorted dialogues were over the top, they served no purpose plot-wise, and only succeeded in portraying Ginny as a young, vulgar, indiscreet harlot, which I don't think, and can only hope isn't your intention. If you want to imbue Ginny with an innate sensuality and wisdom uncommon for her age, then may I suggest you let her show a little discretion? "Hides practically nothing" has its time and place in every woman, as does the "I'm going to fuck you against the fridge, and you're going to like it". The ability to mix that animalistic sexuality with sensuality and discretion is what separates the women from the vulgar nymphomaniacs. I once read a story where Ginny acted almost exactly like the Ginny you wrote from that conversation, but that story was a PWP, and Ginny was a Knockturn Alley whore. Somehow I don't think that's where you want to go with your story.

The sex scenes before were rather good. Why DID you change the tone so abruptly?

My second issue has more to do with the more recent chapter. It seemed that everyone from Harry to Nasta suddenly decided that maybe secrecy is not so important after all, what with the "Why should such pathetic, human nattering bother him? ... Let the humans say what they wanted, as long as he had his mates and his future chicks, everything in his life was perfect." and the having the wings out in the middle of the Quidditch match where anyone could bump into - even if they can't see what it is they've bumped into - their wings. Why should such "human nattering" bother Harry? Because human wizards make laws that could legally persecute Drackens for being Drackens, and seeing as England doesn't have very lenient laws regarding Drackens and Harry wants to stay in England, the best way he can protect himself, his mates, and his chicks is to keep other wizards ignorant of the fact that he is a Dracken, which is, I assume, why they're going through all that trouble lying about an illness rather than telling people outright that Harry's missing classes because he's in heat. Even if Harry eventually decide to fight the prejudice of England and change the laws as he's probably going to do, that's a serious decision which requires talking to all his mates, making strategies and in case of failure, escape plans. Such a revelation could threaten the lives of all Harry cares for, and I really can't believe he could be so belligerent about such an important decision.

Such actions make no sense plot wise, and I imagine, can only arise as a symptom of your own weariness with the story. Therefore, I send you my best wishes and hope you feel better if you've been feeling down. As for the upcoming plot twist, I only ask that it makes sense, that it's a reasonably natural course of events. Don't pull out a shocker for the sole reason of having one, don't make everyone miserable for the sole reason of making them miserable, and everything will be fine.

Good luck! I look forward to what you come up with next.
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From bloodshound on August 01, 2011
ah damn. Please telll me he snagged the snitch as he crashed and burned. It'd be to embarressing otherwise.
Ginny rocks btw.
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From ANON - Wolfmistress on August 01, 2011
Cruel, Starlight, very, very cruel. You have me cringing with pain at Harry's injuries and the thought of the reactions from not only Blaise and Draco, but also from the other nonmated Drakens - I tremble at the thought. I hope you post chapter 16 soon. Also, could you please explain why Draco was so worried about the book that Harry was looking for in the library?
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From ANON - qwerty on August 01, 2011
Good chapter. I vote for Maximilius and Nasta!
Keep going@
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From ANON - Anon on August 01, 2011
Maaaax!
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From ANON - The Horseman of Death on August 01, 2011
greetings from the far rift a lovely little country where drackens originated in an Aboriginal dream story, that was where i thought you had got the idea from but moving on when can i expect more of this delicious story? but on a serious not i live in australia and here we have a preffered party voting system and for once its going to be useful because as all 3 is an option i say that all the other votes are really votes for all three and all three wins by a prefferential landslide also i would like to vote for all three OMC's a million times... did i mention i'm running for city council in perth western australia? yeah well i still vote for all three

Happy _ hampsters @ hotmail . com
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From ANON - Jazz on July 30, 2011
Is the next one coming out soon? It's been a while.
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From ANON - Starr on July 29, 2011
OMG! Love this fic, my vote is for Maximilius and Nasta!
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From hellangelhellina on July 27, 2011
i don't know if i said so or not but i really like max, i like all three of them and hope that they will at the very lest stay in touch with harry after the mateing is over. also i like that harry forgave draco and that ginny likes to talk about there sex life. i kinda want to make a dranken story because you'll make them seem so cool but i have to meny stories but i might add them to this one story i'm working on. i get how you feel with the writeing. but love how it's going can't wait to read what you come up with next.
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From ANON - to.lazy.to.log.in. on July 26, 2011
I'm totally adicted to your story!! i love how go go and explain everything!! i would go on and on about it, but its currently 3 in the morning and im only running on mtn dew and cheetos. and regarding the sorta but not really vote going on, i am totally and completely aiming for max. Arsenio and Nasta are nice and all, but i think max needs some lovin after that chick dissed him. besides, he openly admitted to being immature! that alone wins my heart! cant wait to see who wins the sort be not really poll. now i'm rambling. xD cant wait for the next chapter!!!!
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