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By : StarLightMassacre

From ANON - Grim1989 on July 21, 2013
I'm sorry for your lost of your cat. Take all the time you need, I know the feeling of losing someone you love, lost my cat back in 08 from Leukemia. She meant the world to me.
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From ANON - eaglexeyes on July 19, 2013
You've made me laugh and cry and cry some more. I've been angry, happy, sad, elated, excited, and scared. This is a terrific story and I have enjoyed reading it from the start yet again.

Keep writing as life allows and try not to let it get you too down. Suki was a wonderful pet and she will be missed for a long time. Honor her memory by continuing doing what you enjoy doing. My Beauty was 17 when she died 7 years ago and I still miss her terribly.

Keep writing as life allows you. I look forward to future updates.....
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From Daughter-of-the-Full-Moon on July 19, 2013
Permission requested to adopt Henley, please?
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From ANON - kit on July 18, 2013
Omg i'm so sorry for ur lose, I had the same thing happen with my dog last Sept. I wish you the best. Take your time to grieve for your love one. But, this chapter made me sad and is Sev really dead? TT_TT
-Kit
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From ANON - Rami on July 17, 2013
Its beautiful your story.

I really cried (still am) about Snape (did with the books too, silly me) but he died a peacefull death in his sleep without the nightmares.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
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From WorldePARALLEL on July 17, 2013
I wished I could make myself short and precise but I just couldn't... please don't be frustrated at me :S From reading the Scaled Bits, I was wondering whether there was a rule to choosing the second (and beyond) dominant mate? Harry chose his by himself, but I think Myron wasn't chosen by Ashleigh herself, but Richard instead? So the first mate has a say in choosing the subsequent dominant mates as well?
And were the sensations Harry experienced during his meeting unique to him? Since he had felt something special and aroused when he was talking to Max during the meeting, and felt affected by Draco, even back when he was in the Slytherin dorm, finding his presence comforting when he was running from Dominic; but Amelle's sounded like a completely logical choice for the fittest and strongest, and the other meetings where submissives chose by age and wings- did they feel sensations like he did too? That reminds me, I was always curious about how Draco dealt with feeling Harry's presence and scent when he was under the Suppression Potion. Blaise had said that he went crazy due to the scent and when the meetings were held, unmated dominants would not be able to resist the submissive calling, that's why Draco turned up anyway. He did admit to feeling the urge to hold Harry and protect him, but how did he manage to look normal in school when he was faced with Harry, practically every day? For Nasta, Harry said that he knew from the first sight that he wanted to choose him, and that he had poked and prodded relentlessly to get Nasta talking at his meeting, was that a special sensation too or simply curiousity?
I see that you have written a part on where a submissive killed herself in desperation to get her dominant's attention, I wonder how would the Counsel react if they have been alerted of a similar situation, that a submissive's dominant mate(s) is not caring for him/her?
Oh and just asking, if you had time and the inspiration later on, could you do a scene on parents' talking about their own mating/dating (since Lucius and Narcissa are humans) experiences - the meetings, jealousy outbursts or expressions, taking care of the first child, etc? I know that you did slip bits and pieces when the parents were giving them advice on caring for children and stuff, but could you do a little scene on that? Or just slip in a bit more information in their conversation so that I can indulge myself in some uncontrolled imagination?
I'm really sorry for what has happened to your cat, I'm sure you need time to grieve for her and settle your emotions. Until then, I will be willingly waiting for your update. Do stay strong!
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From WorldePARALLEL on July 17, 2013
I do hope that you're not tired of my rambling... I wasnt't intending to harass you with comments and questions, but I just felt the urge to make sure I understood everything as I re-read the chapters (now that I can better remember all the names), seeing how much effort you have put into writing the fic.
You are forewarned: I still love Richard a lot, so I read with extra attention wherever Max's family came into play and so most of my questions come from there, Mwahahaha. I can understand Harry's and Amelle's instinctual sense of threat that Ashleigh may claim their children as her own since she is unable to have more herself, but I couldn't really understand what Richard had meant in Chapter 75 when he said that "does Ashleigh still see our babies as hers, or have they been bumped off with the flood of grandchildren too?" I thought Ashleigh saw her grandchildren as her children, so I'm not really sure what that had meant... curse my English comprehension skills for that >.< And I'm really confused with their ages, Chapter 67 said that Myron was 21 when Max was born, but Chapter 30's A/N and Chapter 75 both wrote that he was 23... And did Myron and Richard had dominance battles? Ashleigh said that they fought for 3 weeks after she had chosen them in Chapter 29, but she said that Richard submitted immediately and willingly to Myron later in Chapter 67? Or did I misinterpret it as dominance battles when it was just squabbling to get along since Harry was talking about dominant order back then? Another thing that puzzled me was that why didn't Richard keep a bottle of potion on himself? It seems that Myron was the one holding on to the potion, but wouldn't it have been easier for Richard to keep it since Myron may not always be there?
I vaguely remembered that there was a spell or so to extract the memory from oneself or others so that it could be seen by others, would it have been better for Harry if Richard (and no others) could understand his experience from doing so and helped him in talking his experience, or would that have been more invasive? It just hurts to retell the horrible experience when fully knowing that the listener may empathise, but not knowing how they would treat you after knowing so, I know how that feels and I'm feeling it terribly for Harry. Maybe it would have been better when you were speaking to a person who has full knowledge of your experience? But then again, Harry didn't want anyone to know in the first place...
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From ANON - nashayalar on July 16, 2013
I absolutely adore this story. I'll admit, I've never been a very big Harry/Blaise/Draco fan so I wasn't too sure about the pairing to begin with but the story premise seemed interesting so I decided to read the first few chapters and then stop if I really didn't enjoy it. I can truly say I'm never been happier that I did something in my life.

I'm amazed at the amount of effort you've put into creating the Dracken race and the history behind them and I thoroughly enjoy each tidbit that is revealed as the story develops. Your original characters are charming and amusing and I enjoy the difference in their personalities and preferences, not to mention the realism of it; I've read too many fanfics where the original characters were absolutely perfect and could do no wrong. It's refreshing to find a writer who will admit that their characters aren't perfect. It sounds silly since they aren't actually real but they are in the author's head so... *shrugs*.

You mentioned the original version of this story in chapters 01 and 59, as far as I can remember. While there was only one chapter available from what you've said, I'd be interested to see the differences between them. If you could post a link to the original, I would appreciate it.

Please continue writing and giving me a wonderful story to look forward to.
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From ANON - Anon on July 15, 2013
:(
I am so sorry for the lost of your kitty
13 years, or months he will always be a kitty :(
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From LadyHemlock27 on July 15, 2013
oh no I am so sorry for your pain. Our furbabies come to mean so much, and I am often inconsolable for days when one of mine die. *hugs* it never stops hurting, but thankfully the pain lessens a bit over time.
The story is excellent of course, and I am so happy to see Harry's life going so well, and saddened, of course, by Severus' deep loss.
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From ANON - WorldePARALLEL on July 15, 2013
I realized that my review was too long to fit, so here's the rest:
(Cont'd) But my favorite character, well at least after Harry and his 4 lovers and his 6 cute babies, is definitely Richard! I don't know why either, but I just think he is absolutely adorable! Although he behaves childishly (he's forever young and that's cute~) but he does have a mature side too when he's dealing with serious issues, such as Harry's case. I was thrilled to find that he makes frequent appearance in these more recent chapters, although it hurts to see that it was mainly because of the issue on Ashleigh or the Dursleys' case... I know that Richard's scar probably has his own story that may appear in later chapters, and that he'll be appearing for the Dursleys' case and for resolving the conflict between Harry's family and Ashleigh, but seeing the cuddling/comforting scene in the chapter where Richard talked to Harry for pressing further charges on the Dursleys, I can't help but ask, could you just slip in a few more Myron/Richard lovey dovey/comforting moments (hopefully a short scene?) for the later chapters? *puppy eyes with furiously batting eyelashes* I know they are not the main characters, but just for a Richard fan here...? Not that I don't like Ashleigh, but in her current state, I'd skip her... While I sympathize her tragic experience, I hold the same opinion as Amelle.
Oh and just a note here, when Blaise or someone else starts to rattle off in Italian and French or any other languages, could you add a special note for its translation or the general gist of it? Although I'm fast in learning Chinese-related Eastern languages, English has probably taken up most, if not all, of my brain's limited capacity for Western languages... Darn I envy Blaise and Nasta, and even Harry's Parseltongue...
Oh gosh did I just ramble so much...? Well I enjoyed the read and really hope to see your next chapter soon!
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From ANON - Larimar on July 15, 2013
So sorry for the loss of your beloved companion, Suki. Pets are never just pets, and 13 years is a long time. Take what pause you need to grieve, I am sure all your true fans will understand. Sending you hugs. :-)
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From ANON - WorldePARALLEL on July 15, 2013
This fanfiction absolutely blew me away! I couldn't stop reading although it took me 3 days to finish all the 76 chapters, it felt like the time back then when I was cramming Book 6 of HP in 2 days ;) and I haven't move on to read The Scaled Bits yet, will be doing so after I finish writing the review... I loved the way you included all the intricate details from the original and incorporated it into your plot, it only made the reading more interesting than ever, oh and it also tested my memory on how much I actually remembered from the series ;p I thought that you dealt with the characters' emotions in a splendid way, especially parts where Harry or any other characters has an internal struggle, whether with themselves or their Dracken side: the way they tried to juggle their thoughts and stuff felt downright to heart, like the everyday turmoil we feel from the largest problems to the pettiest of concern. Of course, I'm delighted to find that Harry here has not been those gloaty ego OOCs as some fanfictions depict, nor the stubborn and self-isolating Harry that I was disappointed to find in the later books of the series. In this fic I only saw a teenager in the process of maturation and the fun-loving childlike attributes showing here and there, all that I really enjoyed reading :D
Although Blaise and Draco are really dear, I have to say that I really like Nasta and Max just as much, they fit perfectly into the picture and now I even find it perfectly normal for all 5 of them to be together (oh my that is scary) but personally I like Nasta the most, his personality seems to really shine towards the middle and later parts of the story, because I really thought that he was just an extremely silent man at first... No wonder even Harry's Dracken agrees that he is the perfect father and top dominant (I always thought that the Dracken sides were difficult to please, but then again, this is human perspective *shrugs*). And I do hope that future chapters could show Blaise and Draco's gradual change to be more able to shoulder the responsibilities that has been mostly Nasta's and Max's, not that they haven't been changing, just that it would be great if they could finally get over the quarreling (Since it's end of NEWTs it should be better isn't it?) and I can't help feeling that Harry's a tad bit left out in some of the sex scenes, could I ask for more Nasta/Harry scenes? Pretty please *smiles innocently* of course cwtching with everyone else is cute too
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From ANON - Shinelle Gonzales on July 14, 2013
Hello, I just wanted to say that you are an amazing writer. I just began reading this story and I wasn't able to stop; I love your characters and the plot and the atmosphere. I love how I am able to go into your world when I read your chapter.

I believe this might be one of my favorite chapters due to all the emotions. I felt Max's sadness and I felt Severus's pain. I am saddened that he passed, but I feel at peace that he's able to be with his love again.

Condolences for your cat, Suki. I'm glad that you were able to have 13 years together. I adopted my baby boy, Zander, almost a year ago and I honestly cannot imagine my life without him. Take all the time you need, considering this is purely for your enjoyment as well as ours and it is not a job.

I look forward to reading your next chapter for all of your brilliant stories =) Until we write again
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From dark-huntressmoony on July 14, 2013
Oh Mon Due Star! you broke my heart! i finally get the energy to prop myself up in bed and read a chapter and my heart is broken by the end of it. Poor Severus!! I was hoping that maybe there would have been another submissive Dracken for him but i guess it's better that he goes to rejoin his mate and child. A beautiful chapter as always and I wait patiently for more.
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