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Reviews for The Rise of the Drackens

By : StarLightMassacre

From BlueOrchid on April 23, 2013
First of all, I want you to know that this story is absolutely fantastic! I found it a few days ago, and once I started, I just couldn't stop reading! I absolutely adore your original characters, Nasta and Maxie are really wonderful, as well as Amelle. I really didn't like her at first, but when her history came out, she soon became one of my favourites! Will Harry go and speak to her about what's happening with Remus? I bet he will! And by the way, I can absolutely see Remus doing that kind of thing, it ties in with his character from the books really well. I was absolutely horrified when he went and married Tonks without inviting Harry to the wedding nor telling him anything, I mean he considers him his cub and then in the Deathly Hallows it's actually Tonks who breaks the news to Harry -.-
Anyway, I can't wait to see what happens when everyone is going to finish school! So update soon! :D
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From ANON - Becky on April 19, 2013
Remus really fucked up. What the hell is his problem? Is it some sort of draken/werewolf thing? Maybe Tonks was apprehensive about Harry, since he's a draken? I also want to know if Dumbledore was in on this. I have a very hard time believing he knew nothing about what was going on with Remus and Tonks. I suppose it could be as simple as he didn't realize that Harry didn't know. But pregnancy is something generally considered to be a joyous time, and it would be talked about among people who know the family.
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From ANON - Mary Sue on April 18, 2013
Ah, I'm starting to get annoyed with Harry... he seems to take everything so extremely personally like the world revolves around him... like it's a "betrayal" that Remus didn't tell him... pft... yes, it's weird and OOC for him not to, but how many times did HARRY get in contact with HIM during these past months...? people get wrapped up in their own family life after all and time goes by quickly... I thought the letter was perfectly nice and then Harry goes on a crying hissy-fit... he seems to act like that quite often like "bvaaah I couldn't believe she slipped up and mentioned my childhood when she knows I've been abused, let's all hate her!"... he's also so damn fawned over by everyone, and those he's not fawned over are turned into really bad people... I don't know... something doesn't seem right to me... seems a bit Mary Sue-ish... seems like he doesn't really DO enough to get all that adorning attention... and he overreacts like a drama queen for every little mistake anyone makes, even his mates... forgetting a bottle because you're interrupted by something? Well, don't we all forget what we were doing at some point even though it's important...? Ah, I don't know, maybe I'm just being irritable... I have enjoyed this story a lot, even though it smacked packed full of OC's though I'm starting to feel like it needs an ending eventually... or a aim... feels like it just goes on and on and it's more like... I don't know.. a diary or blog than a STORY now... But I commend your for going on after the baby's were born because many m-pregs end there, after all.. no diapers or feedings, or vomit.. .;) Right now it doesn't seem to have that "goal" though... in the beginning it as the whole mating process, then the first pregnancy, then the second... I think a third pregnancy would be almost boring now, it just needs a wrap-up end... I guess the dursely-thing might be a 'goal' of sorts... idk...
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From slmncpm on April 18, 2013
i love this story, this site is having issues with me leaving notes though. i first found this and read it straight through. i am so glad you are still writing it! thank you so much for sharing this well thought out and written story.
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From ANON - Sarah on April 17, 2013
I'm insanely curious; how do you develop a baby's personality? Does it come to you as you write about them or do you plan their personalities before you introduce them? What about their names, do you just go through a whole bunch, like the way Harry did when he was still finding names for the quintuplets or do you already know what you're going to name them because it was a hit of inspiration? Be as specific as you can where you can please. I really want to learn how you develop these characters.
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From ANON - CJ on April 17, 2013
I love this story first off. My birthday was 4-12 and I noticed u had updated the story - I had been re-reading it for the 50th?(may have been more - love this story). I was sad when it was taken down last year. I had went to read it late April and found it gone. I was so very excited when I found it posted again. Anyway - back on track - I do tent to ramble, sorry - I had a question. The last chapter was titled "betrayal" and it was about Remus. I really understand being upset and mad but didn't Harry sorta do the same when he didn't tell Remus about his mates and pregnancy? Remus was traveling but he found out from Dumbledore when he came back and asked y he wasn't sent a letter to let him know. I know that Harry didn't tell that he was a Dracken because he was afraid but he could have told him about being pregnant and in relationship w/out going into being a Dracken, as male pregnancy is possible. Did I miss something? I've read many stories on ff and on this site but this is my first review. Like I said LOVE this story - u r an amazing story-teller!!!
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From ANON - tkykitty on April 16, 2013
Wow Great Amazing Wonderful Chapter! The ending was such a shock. I'm sure remus didn't mean too much by what he did. He always seems to think of others. And he want's harry to be teddy's Godfather. Harry might be over reacting but I can't wait to find out if he is or if remus is really ignoring him.
I love the beginning of this chapter. It was no nice to see one of the little girls that harry meet last time oh and the dracken from his mating time. (the name of the one that starts with A. I'm so bad at names.)
The quidditch match was awesome too! Go harry! I'm so glad that he got to have that moment with his team. Oh and passing on the info about the kitchens to the next gen was a nice touch. I think his dad and Sirius would approve.
I haven't checked scaldie Bits in a while. I'm wondering if you wrote what happened after the dinner where harry is wearing nothing but his tights and socks. lol. That would be so hot to hear what all his mates were thinking. lol.
The kids are getting so big so fast and learning quickly too! Except little leolin (but that's expected). I think that braiden's party is going to be epic with all the family since it's his first! First's are so important in a baby's life. Even if they can't remember, the parents do.
Only two more weeks till finals! You can do it harry, blaise and draco!!! Then all that stress with be gone (for now.)
Thanks for this great chapter!!!!!
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From ANON - Samantha on April 15, 2013
I am so very glad you decided to continue writing after what fanfiction did. And what's the surprise for Harry? Is it marriage? And when is Draco going to get a child? I feel really bad that he's the only one without one.
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From ANON - Quaff on April 15, 2013
I can't tell you how much I'm enjoying your story and the side story. Thank you so much for writing it.
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From RavenclawEncyclopedia on April 13, 2013
I know its terrible, but I'm really glad the betrayal in this chapter ended up being about Remus. I spent almost the entire chapter being all "oh crap, someone is going to tell about them being Drackens" and then it turned out that Remus DIDN'T tell and that was the betrayal.
This whole story is fucking amazing, I haven't reviewed before, but it is. I love it :).
Mischief managed,
Rachel
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From ANON - jenny on April 12, 2013
thanks for this chapter today 13th is my birthday and it is a good gift i look weekly for new chapter and i am sad when there isnt a chapter but verry happy when there is

continue your good story it is one of the best to follow

sorry if there is error i speak french i am not very good in english
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From ANON - Marie on April 12, 2013
ohhhhh so so so glad you didn't abandon this! its one of my favorites. i think I've read it in its entirety 4 or 5 times. can't wait to see what harry does about remus.
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From Woodlandspirit on April 12, 2013
I totally understand Harry's feelings of betrayal, My dad did the exact same thing to me and my sister. Got married and had a kid without telling us. He was coming for Christmas and he's all I'm bring my Wife, and our 5 month old son with me, that OK? I was only 7 and my parents had only been apart like a year and a half. I was heartbroken just like Harry.
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From ANON - Nancy King on April 12, 2013
This was a very intense chapter with a lot going on in it. I'm glad that Harry and Braiden are all right and that his mates responded to him quickly. Harry has a very big, very forgiving heart (which is what makes him Harry), but I can't help but agree with him later in the chapter--I worry that letting "Mossy" off the hook may encourage her to strike again. I hope not because poor Harry has quite enough stress at the moment, but she appears unstable and that makes her an unknown variable.

Remus, Remus, Remus. :sigh: You know, I wonder sometimes what JKR was thinking when she wrote him. He's obviously a very complex, conflicted character and the werewolf issue is at the center of his life, influencing many of his decisions. Maybe he thought he was protecting Harry? I don't know. I'm probably the wrong person to ask. I get upset if a family member has a simple out-patient surgery procedure without telling me--let alone something life changing like getting married and having children.

Finally, I wish people would just stop whining about Draco fathering children. Harry has six beautiful, special children. Whether they mean to or not, by constantly talking about Draco getting a chance to "be a father" they are implying that he isn't the father of Harry's six children. I know these are fictional characters, but that's insulting and rude. He is just as much Braiden's father as Blaise is (or Max or Nasta). I would hope to the hundred little gods that if, heaven forfend, Calix (just for instance) *died* that Draco would grieve just as much as his biological parents. To say that he wouldn't or that he couldn't belittles his role in their mateship.

Right. Carry on, Star. Excellent work.
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From Jan on April 12, 2013
Poor Harry, what was Remus thinking?

Please update chapter 73 soon :)
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