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By : StarLightMassacre

From ANON - Sarah11 on April 12, 2013
I'm so glad you kept writing this story after that happened to you, it's so amazing! And you update so regularly, too! It's so refreshing to see an author so passionate about their story. It's always depressing seeing a great story die away... so much wasted potential. I just finished rereading it again to make sure I didn't miss any details the first time- I was absolutely devouring it.

*Spoilers! To those folks who are reading the comments before reading the newest chapter~*
I was getting so nervous as I was reaching the end of the chapter and Blaise had lost the game. I was worried he would be the one to betray them somehow. Even though it would be out of character... especially after he left the first time! I should have had faith, because right when you had me all worried you pulled the rug out from under me! How could Remus do that to Harry? Harry is the only thing Remus has left of his past, how could he just write him off like that? He knows he's the closest thing Harry's ever had to a father, right? I fully understand he deserves a chance to have his own family, but Harry has every right to be a part of that! I think I think I'm almost just as shocked and hurt as Harry is. But then I thought about it... didn't Harry kind of do something similar? Remus had to learn about Harry being mated to four strangers (two of which about his age) and had a baby on the way, way after the fact. Even though it was different for him because he was a Draken... Surely Remus must have thought about how this made him feel when it happened to him? Then he just throws it right back at Harry? Truly a plot twist I wasn't expecting...

I had thought for sure it would be Ashleigh that betrays them when you teased this chapter's name. Are we meant to like her character at all? Because honestly I'm right beside Harry on this one. You don't just forget someone is a victim of abuse. Her own longing for children (which seems to come from both her Draken and herself) is manifesting in a seriously disturbed way. I'm surprised she hasn't tried to kidnap Farren already, with the downward spiral she's on. I'm not sure how I feel about Max reaching out to her again. I feel like she's too close to doing something that's utterly unforgivable and irreversible to let her back into their lives now... But as much as I dislike her, it's very hard not to love Richard and Myron (who make an amazing couple on their own) so I can't want her to go away forever without those two going too. Actually, I'm not sure how her mates would respond if she actually tried something. Would they take Harry's side? If she did something terrible? I'm honestly not sure... The whole relationship has me so conflicted!

And I'm bursting with curiously about Nasta's plan... I was rooting for Harry to kill that women, if not only to establish to others that his family was not to be messed with, but also because she seemed like a terrible person, leaving her kids like that and calling her deceased mate weak. Anyone else would have been a better choice to raise her kids properly then her. These last two chapters have had me on an emotional roller coaster... :)

Sorry for the long review. The world you created is so interesting it's hard not to get sucked in. ^_^
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From ANON - unicorn53 on April 12, 2013
I have been reading this story even before you adopted it from the original creator of the drackens. I have followed it on both fansites and look forward to each and every chapter you create for us. It is my most favorite story to follow and if I could ever explain how I feel when I see it up for another chapter. This story is the reason I still read from fanfiction or even this site. I love this world you have brought to us and thank you for doing so. Please keep the new chapters coming for all of us loyal readers of yours. Thank you again for taking up the challenge and creating the world of the drackens for us.
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From ANON - Dc: on April 12, 2013
Thank you for replying. I've read this story many times I should have realized that. I must have been brain dead last time through. I read this on ff and then followed when I found it here. I'm really glad you decided to continue this. This story is awesome. I read it over and over. Thanks again!
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From ANON - dominique1 on April 11, 2013
Rebecca Silvermoss she so needs to die more than anyone else other than the dursley's I have this issue when people hurt harry for some reason i want them dead or to suffer.
Arsenio love him. i hope harry is right and one day he'll find a mate kind of hope he gets with one of harry's kids and he's 46 so buy the time harry's two dracken son's which might be sub, arsenio would be 61 so maybe arsenio might get one of them
I can say since Richard is suffering due to the stress from the issues with his mate i kind of hope that she does go to a mind healer. and get better for herself and family.
so the faeries really want to meet leolin that's cool but i would think they would wait for harry to get done at school and still looking forward to that i hope no trouble will come from them. and i still Aneirin and warren to get together for some reason and to find out if the other guys or related to the two faeries that might be related to them.
I also love how the babies or coming along calix cry now when he's hungry farren eating like a big boy leolin just love him between braiden him their my fav babies tegan, regan what more to say. i have spent all day re reading this chapter and i love it. thats about it thank you for not hurting draco
and remus so wrong just wrong i can't belive that he got married and than had a kid with out inviting harry plus now he wants harry to be a godfather i love teddy i really do but remus should have given harry a choice or chance out of everyone since i want to say remus needs to suffer as well all say it for hurting harry

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From ANON - zx14ninja on April 11, 2013
Is Remus's not telling Harry about his marriage and the baby some kind of messed up revenge for Harry not telling him about his lovers and his pregnancy with Braiden? I remember Remus had to find out about that from Dumbledore and its the only reason I can think of for him not telling Harry about such major changes in his life but it doesn't really seem to fit is personality, unless of course he didn't tell Harry because he didn't want to "bother" Harry, which would also mean that he doesn't truly consider Harry family and the he (Remus) is an idiot. To be honest, I'm not sure which scenario is worse, as hurtful as petty revenge would be I almost think Remus not seeing Harry as family in the first place would be just as bad.
Either way I hope things work out and also that Max works things out with his mother because if Richard were to die (or any of your OC's really, I must commend you on your ability to make such wonderful characters and this is coming from someone who actively avoids Harry paired with OC's) I think I might have a crying fit. Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter!
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From myrkky on April 11, 2013
Oh I was so afraid when you mentioned in the last chap that this one was gonna be named 'betrayal'. I had all these crazy ideas about someone close to them (Ginny? Remus? Hermione?) telling an outsider about them being drackens, or worse yet; selling them to some poacher! So I'm kinda relieved it was "just" Remus keeping secrets. (I know it's still bad, I mean Harry thinks him as family, but at least no one died/almost died)
And Remus' reasons for not telling Harry might have something to do with him being afraid that it's Harry not seeing them as family anymore. (you can't be dissapointed if you don't even try -mentality apllies quite well in this)
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From ANON - Ginger on April 11, 2013
I love this story it is my favorite and i look forward to the next chapter. you are doing amazing job.
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From ANON - Chris on April 11, 2013
You keep saying that is is rare for male pregnancy to have a girl but I don't understand how you came to that conclusion. Genetically speaking, maleXfemale couple have a 50% chance of producing a girl or boy.

For a maleXmale couple, 50% will be XY or male, 25% will be XX, female, and 25% will be YY and not viable. Overall, a 1 in 3 chance of having a girl. I don't see how that could be considered extremely rare.
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From ANON - jspgnh1234 on April 11, 2013
i can't beleive Remus!!!!!
p.s:love your work!happy anniversary!!!
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From ANON - Anon on April 11, 2013
More draco and harry interactions. I feel like he's just kinda a sidebar lover at the moment. Less max and nasta for a bit. Love those two but they've had the lime light lot lately.
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From ANON - Linda on April 11, 2013
Great chapter, I love this story and look forward to all updates.
When Harry first got together with his guys and had Braiden, he didn't tell Remus. It was a surprise and didnt Albus have to tell Remus.

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From ANON - Grim1989 on April 11, 2013
ah yes, those were troubling times, because of that Forum club that didn't like same sex stories, it was fine if it was canon but same sex to them was a no no
Cannot remember their forum name tho
man, I cannot believe it has been a year.
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From djaddict on April 11, 2013
Really, really happy that you decided to repost here, I really love this story.

I can't wait for the school year to end. Poor Harry.
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From Lady_Arachne on April 11, 2013
I don't like the sound of this. Remus is taking things way too fast...makes me think that she's dosing him with a love potion!! I hope that's the case, or Harry might have trouble forgiving him!!! DDDDDDDDDDDD':

And I love the Quidditch and baby scenes~~!!! :DDDDDD
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From ANON - Bonnie on April 11, 2013
"And then Bobby walked out of the shower it had been a dream" Dallas 1980"s
Star your previews with this chapter on fb were killing me. I knew that you were writing your story the way you wanted it but was just so sad at the new angst you were planning. I dreaded reading Betrayal soo much and then...viola a wonderful chapter with all the mates and the family issues and even some Quidditch. Can't wait to see what Nasta is planning. You prob said somewhere earlier but is Harry going to be able to graduate? At my High School they had a program for pregnant and new mothers that accelerated their school year to enable them to stay with their classmates even with taking time out for baby. Thanks again for the mini heartache and the wonderful chapter.
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