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Reviews for The Rise of the Drackens

By : StarLightMassacre

From ANON - Charlie on October 23, 2012
Hi! I absolutely love this story! If you ever get the chance I'd love to see the scene between Alexander, Myron, and Richard at Alexander's party after Harry lost control.
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From Jamesdude on October 23, 2012
I really do love this story. I really like Blaize and he never gets enough love. Normally, I do not like creature fanfics but I approve of this one and I am always interested in the updates. AS a fanfic writer that is working on writing good fanfics, you are doing it really well, especially mixing the plot/drama/ and sex. I really hope you continue the story and update regularly and know that this fanfic writer loves you work!
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From chrissy on October 23, 2012
cool update!!
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From dominique1 on October 22, 2012
Aneirin and Warren kind of hope that aneirin gets a new lover
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From ANON - DarkAngel on October 22, 2012
Hi!

I reviewed on your FF.net page but that was pretty much the day before it got taken down so you probably didn't see anyway I just wanted to tell you just how much I adore this story! I've read it through about three times already!! I check this and The Scaled Bits practically every day for updates and get so excited every time I see one!

I usually dislike mpreg and avoid it like the plague but I found the way you wrote Harry's pregnancies gorgeous and realistic, I love your OMC's they are so beautifully well developed down t their families personalities and everything, it's wonderful! Also the way Draco was so how you'd imagine him being if he had been in this situation. I have loved reading it, I never skipped bits (which is impressive for me I often skip past paragraphs when reading) as it was all just so good to read! You're a really good writer and I adore this story! Thank you for writing it and spending so much time on it. It is appreciated! I was wondering if we could have even a snap shot of later on in the heat or is the whole point that be then it's all completely blurred in their minds and there's nothing really human left? I was just curious by how tired Harry already seemed just from the first few hours and if he just gets drained as it goes on how he has any energy to carry on after that? Let alone for the next 10 days!!

Anyway I hope you're happy and that life is treating you well. Much love and hugs x
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From ANON - bookworm0492 on October 21, 2012
......If the other story has vital information for this story then why isnt that information in THIS fanfiction? I really dislike the idea of having to keep up with another fanfiction just so I can understand whats going on in this one. If the information makes the chapter too long then why not simply cut out some of the fluffy family bits and throw in the character development? I love the family time happiness as much as any other fan on this but honestly? The story is almost starting to feel monotonous at times.

Now hear me out. When this story started out, there was aloot of interesting stuff going on. Harry was changing, he needed mates, there was stress of immense levels as he figured out who he was by species and sexuality. He was alienating his friends and BEING alienated. He had to figure out mates or he was gonna fricken die! Danger! Suspense! The Dracken that wanted to sell his babies to the black market, plots and schemes and all sorts of things! The love scenes were hot and all was well. Then Braiden was born, suspenseful and fascinating to read!

Then things slowed down, which was nice, and we got to see them living together, bonding, meeting more family, figured out crap about the dursleys, things were ok.

But it feels like since then the story hasnt gotten back to the original pace. Now dont get me wrong, the bits with the birth of the quints and finding Regulus' body were a-fricken-mazing. I was SO excited to see some actual action in the story again it made me bounce in my seat. But it felt like as soon as things were picking up again they slowed right back down. Granted, I understand that sick and frail babies are not light-hearted and the stress from school the three are facing is nothing to scoff at but, it just doesnt have the same gravity as the events from the start of the story. It doesnt feel intense anymore.I mean, the worst problem thats in the forseeable future for them is that Nasta's sick and they have an overwhelming homework amount. When once I was eagerly clicking the 'next chapter' button Im now feeling an overwhelimg 'meh'. I DONT like that feeling, especially when I know this story has so much potential and has such, such suuuuuch a good premise.

I mean, this may sound horrible, but theres so much bad stuff I wanna see!! Youve mentioned Dracken Hunters plenty of times and Im sitting here wondering when the words going to be leaked and theyre going to come after Harry. I mean, this is Harry fricken Potter for crying out loud! Trouble, and always the death-defying kind, always finds him! And I seriously want to know what fully went down with him and Voldemort. The big showdown, the event that was climax of the entire 7 book series, the death of the wizard who had terrorized the wizarding world by the hand of the fricken boy who lived!! The fact that it was so brushed aside in this story still has my head spinning.

Granted, I can understand why for the purpose of this particular plot why you would start it after the death of Voldemort, but its still baffling. I mean, what happened? What had harry done this time that gave him so much power that he could kill Voldemort then when he couldnt in 4th year? How did Ron and Hermione help him? Where did it happen? There are just so many questions that dont seem to have answers being said anytime soon.

I mean, hell, I dont want to sound like I enjoy the idea of Harry and his mates being upset and in danger, I mean its awful to think about happening to anyone. But all I can think about is, while its adorable to read about the babies growing up and all of them dealing with everyday challenges and stresses, theres only so much one can read about before it gets monotonous.

But, maybe I should give you more credit than that. Maybe Im getting ahead of myself. Perhaps you have something gritty and exciting planned for future chapters and im just getting impatient. I mean, at this point I have no real idea of where this story is going and there could be an amazing plot twist in the next chapter. I dont know.

Please please pleeeease dont take this as a flame. Its not, its really not. I respect the hell out off the ideas you pulled into the this story, and yourself in general for keeping this story going so long, and thats why I feel I can be so honest with you about it.Im saying it because this is how the story makes me feel at this point and I really, really wanna keep seeing it be something good. If I offended you, Im sorry. Honestly.
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From Jan on October 21, 2012
Poor Nasta, having to be so sick. Hope none of the babies get as sick, especially our little Leolin, don't want anything happening to him or any of the babes ^_^

Please update chapter 61 soon.
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From ANON - Sailor Sol on October 21, 2012
I just finished Chapter 60. I was a good girl, I didn't read the spoilers, and I never will, like I said on Facebook.

I loved it, and I REALLY loved the way the Court got theirs! So, Nasta has a nasty, and everybody gets to baby him for a while. So cute.

I love it, dear, and don't believe anyone that says its bad. I deal with books, both fiction and non-fiction, by trade, and write them, and your work is superb and a joy to read.
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From Sierra_Silver12 on October 21, 2012
I saw on your Facebook where you were complaining about spoilers. Well, boohoo. That is not something you can control. Freedom of speech. Besides, I think you are getting a big head. Your story is not all that. People are not going to be devastated if some spoilers are posted.
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From Property_of_a_DeadGirl4-25 on October 21, 2012
I feel like something bad is going to happen. I was so happy when I got the update email and then I came to aff to read the new chapter. I've been stressing about everything and this made me so happy!!

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From Sera21 on October 21, 2012
Hey! Long time no review. I have been following your story though...I really enjoyed the honeymoon chapter where they went away and had some time between them and teh one where Harry went in heat and when he went feral and had teh babys but I find that as the chapters have gone on since then I have become slightly bored. Where is teh plot?? This reads like a mummys first baby blog. I'm not sure if you are writing for a target audience but as somebody that a) doesn't have any kids and b) doesn't plan on having any kids in the next decade this is simply not interesting anymore. You could at least have some parrallel darkness/ evil plot happening. Plan to kidnap the babys, Harry developes a sickness that nobody can explain, SOMETHING. I mean teh last few chapters have consisted of baby teething, baby fever and some massages. The excitement is clearly at its peak right there. And everybody is so nice and all arguments are solved within a chapter. Heck they arn't even having sex anymore because ' it would take to long'. Here speaks Draco, a 16/17 year old teenaged boy. Riiiiiiiight. I'm also not sure how the baby having gold eyes was a "plot twist". Its about as surprising as a bird learning to fly or a dalmation getting spots. I mean we already KNEW he was a fairy. Why would he NOT have golden eyes eventually??? I do appreciate that Harry has decided to actually finish school instead of simply becoming a teenage baby making machine. But on some consideration I am realistically wondering how any other dracken manages it. Especially the large amounts of babys. I mean yes, you explained that bit about dry heat but still. Do you know how expensive it is to raise 1 baby?? What do Drackens do that don't have the support of a big family?? I mean theres your run of the mill Dracken who didn't even know about his heritage and his mate. The mate is 17 of course so she has barely finished school and has no further education. He is say, 23 and has just started his work after his studies. He has student loans, loans for a car and loans for a house and he has to work 24/7 because he has just started out in his job. How does that Dracken deal with having say 4-6 children within a few years?? I mean sure he may have parents that can help out a bit but do you know how expensive it is to raise a child??? What if he was raised by a single mother who also has to work? and then the babys just keep coming...within 10 years he could have between 8-20 children even if every second heat is dry. There is NO way he would have the space or the money to support that family.
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From ANON - H.G.N. on October 21, 2012
Star, I just realized how bad of a fan I have been; always reading and reading and never leaving a decent review. But really, I love everything you write, the thing I would write in every review is how awesome you're. But I decided I will write it after every chapter from now on, and you will still get my idiotic comments on FB (doesn't matter if you want them or not :P )

So, you are awesome, this story is awesome, I love your characters and I'm in love with a few of them. I hope your muse is staying now and work will leave you more time to write :(

I wanted to write this on FB but I hardly think anyone would be interested in my babbling)
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From KittyChen on October 21, 2012
Nice- just slightly overwhelmed over the sheer amount of babies
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From ANON - grim1989 on October 20, 2012
I'm curious if Harry is gonna have troubles with those female Faerie's that wanted to take Leolin from him, if so I can't wait to see Harry tear them apart, I'm also curious when Harry's uncle and aunt will be taken care of.
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From bloodshound on October 20, 2012
massaged into submission... yeah, i'll take that as a mood improver any time. :P
having your baby sick is really stressful for a parent... i imagine it would be doubly so for a dracken parent as protective as they are.
Valkyrie? What are Valkyrie... at least in this story? Are they creatures similar to fae so they're suitable for breeding or life partners?
gah, issues much. sounds like their won't be fae left if the current batch die.

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