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Reviews for Avenging a Wand\'s loss.

By : SSjDiizoid
  • From GertrudeFlint on November 01, 2013
    OMG, would you believe I've been writing a similar scene just this week? :D Makes it feel kind of weird to review your story, but I'll give it a shot. (Mine's got a pretty different tone - it's more like dub-con with horrible awkwardness, and all from Hermione's point of view.)

    Good story - I'm glad I came over from that forum to take a look. This is such an interesting point in the book for these two characters, isn't it? Offers so much scope for turning to some darker themes. Makes me curious: how much of your Harry's actions can be blamed on the Horcrux, and how much of this is just himself?

    Favorite parts: the forced blowjob, especially when he deliberately chokes her - you really make that moment come alive. And Hermione's humiliation comes across so powerfully right at the end, with her face in the dirt, the orgasm against her will - and most of all with her crying and begging as he cums inside her. I'm glad you wrote it that way: it seems the only natural conclusion, given the setup and all Harry's built-up anger, he wouldn't be satisfied with anything short of making it ultra-clear that she's helpless to stop him doing whatever he wants.

    So this story gets you at least an Exceeds Expectations for your characterization (both Harry and Hermione), your choice of canon moment to work with, the rough sex itself, and your handling of their emotions and power shifts.

    Unfortunately, it's T for Troll on your dialog punctuation and capitalization. *facepalms* Though since this story's over two years old, I guess you might have figured things out since then.
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  • From gypsybaby21 on September 08, 2013
    Hey, just to let you know I
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  • From ANON - just some loney guy on October 31, 2011
    this was very well written I thought. I enjoyed it very much so.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 07, 2011
    This was really great! You should continue it, or write more one shots.
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  • From TheChemist on June 05, 2011
    Great story. Very dark and very enjoyable. Hopefully this will spin-off into a few more chapters as I liked it very much
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  • From JayDee on June 04, 2011
    I thought this was a nicely entertaining story, there's enough nasty detail to drive home Harry's cruelty, and the section describing him getting her to put her arms back, and then tying was very good.
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 31, 2011
    Great first chapter. i know it is a one shot but you should think of maybe extending it a little more. It seems like it is missing something at the end. i do realize that is what you intended but just thought i would point out what this reader felt. it would be nice to add a little bit of romance in it as well, maybe make is appear as though the necklace fuiled whata normal harry would do and he was repenteded in the end, maybe blackout and di not reealize what he had done. he could do it again doing several things, and eventually somehow in this mess hermione can grow to like it, fall in love or something. you can definetly continue this sotry in so many different directions. she could remain quiet, get prenauant and ron could return, then a few months later, now there's a rival between harry and ron! you have great baseline. i feel you shoudl go on, i would love to read more! thanks for this littel ficlet.
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