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By : christinegranger
  • From ANON - mnfm on June 22, 2011
    Another great chapter. Keep them comming!
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  • From Jessica86 on June 22, 2011
    I liked this chapter. Poor Dumbledore, he's gonna have a hard time dealing with this...I hope that Snape will be good to Harry, thoug I also hope that Harry will not be entierly submissive all the time...I mean, he does have a very intense will of his own.
    When will the second mate come into the picture?
    I would love it if you made your chapters longer, cause then it wouldn't end so quickly...
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  • From HeartStar on June 22, 2011
    *S* very nice

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  • From on June 22, 2011
    I know it is wholly upt to you... but, please... could you mate Harry with another adult?
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  • From on June 22, 2011
    I love creature!fics. And sub!Harry - I cannot even imagine Snape in that position... yuck! :/

    I await the next chapter with a thuding heart :) Good luck with your writing!
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  • From coopershawk on June 22, 2011
    Please Lucius? I can't see how Snape could stay on as professor. Snape's knowledge of his own instincts and risk he poses to the student body should cause him to resign.
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  • From ravenwinter on June 22, 2011
    I'm doing my happy dance for the quick update, but crying because it was so short, but happy dance for harry sub sub and OMG dom Severus. I Can NOT Wait for the next chapter, "SLASH". Oh please, update soon *o*
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  • From ravenwinter on June 22, 2011
    I love your Harry so far. Hope Harry keeps the long hair. Glad Snape was there to save the day, and his mate, agian. Can't wait for more and thanks for the speedy update.
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  • From bloodshound on June 22, 2011
    A point I brought up on another fic. Sub doesn't mean doormat. Subs can have their own kind of power even if their main wish is to please thier dom. Their power is mainly to do with being appealing enough to make others want to protect them.

    Another point for Sev not wanting to bring up his heritage would have been Voldi. With his pure blood blather he would have ripped into a creature follower... or twisted him for his own purposes. So, yeah, Sev has good reason to keep this super secret.

    Not sure how he'll get around the possible violence to other students thing but with the teach/student thing, Harry's results in class could be indipendantly marked, like by Albus or something. Just a thought.
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  • From ANON - LostInYourThoughts on June 22, 2011
    I am curious as to who Harry's other mate is.. I am guessing a Malfoy? I hope it is Draco, but I wouldn't mind Lucius either. I hope that you update soon.
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  • From coopershawk on June 21, 2011
    I was hoping it would be Snape. I'm enjoying the story. Thanks for writing it.
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  • From ANON - Blue on June 21, 2011
    Great start, can't wait to see what Harry gets into next!
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  • From ANON - FYI on June 21, 2011
    With all due respect, unless these agressive unmated dominants are red, they are in fact "rogue" rather than "rouge". Happy writing
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  • From Orkchild on June 21, 2011
    I enjoy the story. But you don't give us where in the time line this is happening.
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  • From ANON - Splodge on June 21, 2011
    This story has promise! i would point out that Dumbledore gives Harry the password to his new private quarters, but doesn't tell Harry where they are, or how to get there, and the next minutes Harry has sorted out his things. You might want to make sure details like this are not missed out as they add greatly to the background of the story. You also have Dumbledore being aware of Harry's inheritance with no explanation of how or why he knows. This is a common theme in HP fiction, I know, but still needs to be explained to the reader. A short walk with Dumbledore taking Harry to his new rooms whilst talking about why he knows Harry came into his inheritance, or maybe that the book which registers the children for entrance at 11 makes it known to the headmaster if they come into a creature inheritance would solve the problems in the chapter. it would also allow the chapter to be more "show" than tell which will give it more depth. however, all that said I look forward to where you will be taking this tale.
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