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Reviews for Dux et Supplex

By : mistressdecadence
  • From ClaireR89 on December 30, 2017

    Noooooo  why did you stop!? 


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  • From Howlsword on May 18, 2015
    nice couple of chapters.......when are you going to finish it ?....
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  • From GertrudeFlint on November 10, 2013
    Looks like a promising start to this story, with Hermione and Harry discovering each other's orientation already, and all set to learn more. It's great that she's agreed to live with him. The whole thing with Ron finding the magazines and going ballistic... a bit over the top, but it works well enough to set up the initial conflict. I like how you highlight the solid friendship and affection between Harry and Hermione, and hope you'll keep this up as their relationship evolves.

    Recommend more attention to detail in spelling, grammar, and punctuation. And the wobbling around between past tense and present tense kind of made me seasick. Even happens within the same paragraph: "Was she flirting? She has to admit that she's flattered by Harry's chivalry." Please, please decide which tense you're using, and stick to it.

    Also recommend checking more carefully for weird word choices, e.g. in Chapter 1: "pressed them to her buxom" - should be "bosom," right? - Or seek out a sub with excellent spelling/grammar and make them beta-read your story (could even work as a punishment if the sub ships Ron/Hermione).

    What I'd like to see in later chapters: some more creative effort to integrate D/s with the wizarding world of HP canon. All too often in these first two chapters, Harry and Hermione are acting/talking like Muggles, and their discussion of D/s is firmly "real world," like any Lifestyle for Beginners information on any website. Hermione's breakfast-making adventure could have been written with any characters A and B from any fandom or original fic. Try introducing some D/s-compatible wizarding traditions, customs, rituals, spells, artefacts, potions - cut loose, let your imagination run wild! - just do something to remind us that we're reading HP fanfic. Please bring on the magic, and show us your ideas about how D/s might work in the unique world of witches and wizards.
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  • From ANON - Tina on August 08, 2011
    I love this story and can't wait for more!!
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  • From newtothis on August 08, 2011
    I like ron, and most of the flaws you see, some are just his age 14 15. As for hermoine and harry they both have the same flaws and some are worse, like hermoine will say think to hurt ron feeling, becouse he said something like not see she has a different hair style, and she call him names.
    As for why it would freak him out, first I don
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  • From sarahdaye9 on August 08, 2011
    Yay! Very excited about the training of Hermione, which I can only imagine that is what their trip is going to be able! Wonderful story, I am really enjoying it and can't wait to read more!
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  • From ANON - splattt on August 06, 2011
    Nice job setting the stage. Looking forward to what's next.
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  • From ANON - Miz Gir on July 30, 2011
    Sure hope there will be more chapters! cant wait for them!
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  • From ANON - Fairyrose on July 15, 2011
    Enjoyed this chapter. Would love to see where it goes.
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  • From ANON - kit on July 08, 2011
    very interesting story! I'm curious to see how the relationship between Harry and Hermione will further develop.
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  • From amsev on July 05, 2011
    very interesting beginning. Now to see them work it out AND get back at Ron for being a blabbermouth...
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  • From ANON - Karasu on June 26, 2011
    I'm...not sure that cutting out and vilifying virtually everyone Hermione knows other than Harry was necessary or wise. I don't think it's out of character for Ron to be enraged and want a divorce, MAYBE, but it IS very out of character for him to blab to the Prophet and make a total pariah out of her. To have that on top of her parents pretty much disowning her, means that Harry's the only one talking to her, and that makes their relationship weaker narratively. It seems less out of love or even lust, than it would pure desperation.

    Having said all that, apart from Hermione getting an elf, the two leads are very well characterized and as long as they don't stray too far OOC, I think this will turn into a great story. I'm looking forward to see what happens.
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  • From SalonKitty on June 25, 2011
    Well, it has potential.

    But ugh, MUST they speak in the jargon already? Hermione isn't even in the scene, hasn't even had anyone dominate her yet, but already she's got a label for everything? This is what I hate about BDSM fiction. Try to let your character speak a little more organically instead of like they're recruiting for the 'lifestyle'. And Harry is so blase about the whole thing. Might have provided some drama if you had him slowly come to the realization that he likes to engage in that kind of sex after experimenting with his friend a bit.

    And why is it that in every H/Hr pairing, it has to be established within the first handful of paragraphs that Hermione and Harry have always had a secret love for the other? People don't have to be in love with each other to start a sexual relationship. It's so overused and shows a lack of imagination. Where's the depth?

    Don't really buy Ron's horror with her magazine collection, either, but you're entitled to that easy way out, I guess. But telling the Prophet in an interview all about her kinks? No fucking way.

    I'll give your next chapter a shot and see what you do with this, but really, try to put a little effort into characterization. Otherwise you render the pair two dimensional.
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  • From ANON - Heather on June 25, 2011
    This seems like a great start! A good reason the hate Ron, a believable beginning to the H/HR, and a nice reason for Harry to know what he's doing and Hermione not so much. I love it!
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  • From CafeAuLait on June 25, 2011
    I usually don't ready ANY fics staring Harry, but something -- I don't know what-- made me click the link.

    Thanks for sharing


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