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Reviews for Under the Manor

By : WillGirl
  • From ANON - Janelle on December 06, 2011
    Sorry it's taken me so long to review but I have reread this chapter like four times. It's simply breathtaking! The way you write about Harry and Draco having sex . . . it's gorgeous, they both have so much passion behind their physical desires.

    Your words make it sound more like they are making love to each other rather than using each other like they think they are doing. You write sentences like: ". . .he was too consumed with the feel of Malfoy moving nakedly beneath him to pay any sort of coherent attention to how they had gotten there." Meaning that Harry only Draco was on his mind and he was oblivious to all else.

    The way you write of their kissing alone is enough to turn-on your readers: "Harry kissed his way down Malfoy
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  • From ANON - taboosofreality on December 03, 2011
    so glad you updated! :)
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  • From ANON - cats-eye on November 29, 2011
    Please continue this. I'd love to see the dis-function of them learn to function. Plus this fic is really hot. ;)
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  • From ANON - Nubia on November 28, 2011
    If Harry is a masochist both are your story I like

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  • From bloodshound on November 28, 2011
    alcohol is evil, evil stuff. *nods
    *winces. damn, they're both going to be feeling that one in the morning. I wonder if the the rivers of Egypt will be making another appearance.
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  • From bloodshound on October 16, 2011
    good luck explaining this one in the morning, Har.
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  • From ANON - CJB on October 14, 2011
    I'm so happy that you're continuing the story! I can't wait to read more! Thank you for thinking I should write stories. I have a couple of stories in mind; they are mainly novels and screenplays though. I try to work on my writing in-between school and homework but I have so many tough classes this semester that whenever I have freetime I spend it reading.
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  • From ANON - CJB on October 07, 2011
    I'm going crazy not knowing what happens next in your story. I check everyday to see if you have posted. Please continue your story.
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  • From ANON - Janelle on September 24, 2011
    This story still has plenty of potential. (And I don't just say that because you write some of the most passionate sex scenes I've ever read.) You have left both Harry and Draco with empty endings. No way was Harry just getting Draco out of his system.

    Throughout the novels, Harry is basically stocking Draco, watching his every move. This plot point allows your Harry character to feel sorry for Draco because Draco was forced to be a Death Eater on Lucius' request. Harry can level with Draco and tell him that it's not his fault and that he was doing what he could for the sake of his family (or at least mother). Your story can continue with Harry not only wanting Draco physically but emotionally. Harry and desire to know more about Draco and how he ended up as a Death Eater, the horrors he faced, and how it has changed him. Harry has always (even in the novels) been curious about Draco and his actions and you can have that trend continue.

    As for Draco, you still have him feeling cheated from his night with Harry because Harry was suppose to be the one to take him. Draco still needs to find rest from his nightmares. So, he is in the position to seek Harry out.

    One thing you could have them do (and something I've thought would happen) is to both desire to see the other again to have sex. So they both could meet at the bar, both waiting for the other, but pretend to just run into each other. They could end up in bed together again, perhaps this time with Harry topping and then spending the night. Draco's nightmares could abate for that night with Harry. He would assume that it's because Harry finally topped. But really it's because he had someone next to him. However, that line of plot is really in trend right now. So you could have Harry topping, spending the night and then wake to comfort Draco from a nightmare. Then that leads to them talking about their past. If you want to stretch it out longer then they could have a full out sexual affair where Harry is there for Draco.

    The only problem is what to do with Ginny. Killing her off is the easy way out. I suggest either having tabloids reporting that she's seeing another quidditch player while she's away and then Harry and Ginny can fight over it. Or Harry can be truthful. Really what you do about Ginny will depend on where the development of Draco and Harry's relationship is.

    I hope this helps because I REALLY want to you continue with this story. There is so much going on and so much left dangling to leave it where is currently is.
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  • From ANON - Spacefille on September 20, 2011
    Oh poor Draco! I love this so far and I'm itching to know where it goes. I hope he is able to eventually communicate with Harry... though that may be a bit hard... very yummy angst in this fic. Thank you for writing it!
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  • From Silvryfang on September 12, 2011
    aww poor draco, and harry is none the wiser which is exactly why i believe there is more to tell. And how Harry shall face Ginny and how all of that comes about. Please write more!
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  • From ANON - Opi-chan on September 01, 2011
    Gah, love it! Keep going please, Draco needs closure for his guilt!
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  • From ANON - semaphore on September 01, 2011
    I agree with everyone above, the story has much more potential and I'd like to read more. This ending would be really depressing ;)
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 31, 2011
    I would like to see Harry and Draco together at the end somehow. Perhaps Harry finding that no one can quite sate him the way Draco does and going more deeply into why, and his feelings. I am not sure, I think there are many ways to reach that conclusion but I would like to see them together somehow. Excellent work!
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  • From ANON - Lex on August 31, 2011
    This is my favorite ongoing fanfic ever, please don't end it now. There's so much to tell! Does Draco ever heal? Do he and Harry ever meet again? How does Harry feel after?
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