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Reviews for Within the Lies

By : Sylvia
  • From ANON - Rebecca on April 06, 2012
    I really enjoyed the story so far and look forward to the next chapters. Please, say you are still writing! I think that six mates are really nice. The ones I'm thinking you have in mind, Snape (Wisdom), George and Fred (Compassion and Grace), Voldimort (Power), Neville? (Faithful), ? (Strength). I did pick up that there was six strands in the heritage room coming from Harry's crystal and they could easily mean two Gryffindors, two Slytherins, and two Ravenclaws. Is Harry going to check his mate lines before they head back to Grimmauld Place?
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  • From ANON - jj on April 04, 2012
    Not bad!! I can't wait to see who are the rest of Harry's mates.
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  • From jgoodman on February 08, 2012
    Love this story and can't wait to read more
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  • From Leania07 on January 29, 2012
    O.o where has this one been hiding?! I thought I read a lot of the really interesting ones, then this one pops up because it was updated, and I have another wonderful story to follow. Another dimension, multiple mates (One might seem like Snape (after all he is protecting Harry), and that ominous 'hint' might give way to Voldie (makes sense, wisdom and all)...then there's Fred and George, wonder if Draco will be tossed into the mix? O.o will they even be all male?? Aaahh! I can't wait to read more, I'll be checking back often!

    Leania
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  • From ANON - Lauren on January 28, 2012
    I am loving this story, the only problem I see is that in one chapter you said he was going back to school in a month (seeing as how its his birthday in the chapters we've been reading so far) but in chapter 9 you said he was going on the train tomorrow.

    If you have a update email list will you please add me to it
    Thank you
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  • From cullengal101 on January 25, 2012
    hey
    love the story please keep updating

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  • From Darkserpentcat on January 24, 2012
    I am glad you updated this. However I have a few questions/suggestions

    1) Familiars- Now considering finding familiars wouldn't be a part of the CoMC course in real life I would suggest having Hagrid give this idea and then Dumbledore bending the rules for students with Owl's, Cat's, Toads and what not for a class thing in other words have it a completely knew addition to Hogwarts that interested Hagrid

    2) Creature inheritances: I don't know about you but after awhile I am kind of annoyed of how creature inheritance fics seem to go. I mean if creature inheritances were really commonly possible then there wouldn't be so many laws by pure bloods against them. My suggestion is to maybe have a creature inheritance sort of like special circumstances. I mean for Harry it could be because he was the only one able to take the creature inheritance from his ancestor but maybe there should be a price to pay for the ancestors. For example maybe some creatures like dementors, demons, and other few creatures can secretly pass down their powers. However the heir must meet certain requirements such as magical compatibility and the personal choice of the creature. However once the change is complete the ancestor not only loses their powers but their near immortalitiy which is why not many ancestors allow this to happen that and they can choose who take the powers and just don't usually find someone they trust and has the compatibility needed for it. Also if most of this only happens among demons then it could be personal greed to.

    Anyways glad you are feeling better and I hope you take the suggestions into consideration because I just don't see creature inheritances being so common and easy as I see in most creature Harry fics these days especially with all the prejudices also if you had a creature for the two Weasley's you don't think the idea would work since it should be only a few type of creatures you can always use a magical experiment goes awry
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  • From hotflower901 on January 24, 2012
    This is an interesting story. Shouldn't Harry have a least a month before his train ride. That gives the twins so much time to play with him. HE HE.
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  • From cullengal101 on January 24, 2012
    hey like the story please keep updating
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  • From AquamarieneStardust on January 24, 2012
    SO GREAT!!!! Update soon please!? I can't wait to read more! You are briliant, yes you are!
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  • From bloodshound on January 24, 2012
    well congrats on the baby...
    the chappie title made me grin... this is a lot less stupid that the movie was. thought the train bit hasn't come into play yet. those poor serpents, what thing to do to them. Hopefully har will find something better. har n voldi... atm that's just ewwwww. he needs a major make over before any comes of it.176
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  • From jujukitty on January 23, 2012
    yay for more story! and poor snape, i loved the bit about the distracted by sparklies because everybody who really knows me knows i have the same fascination lol. just curious how the shop owner knew what hte snakes were saying? or was she more just pickign up on their body language? an hermione found a bottomless box of books, well she'll be set for a week or so lol. and the twins...well hopefully you'll share that scene with us ;) and was that a bit of foreshadowing about voldie there? hmmm, have to wonder. keep up the great work, can't wait to see more of this :D
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  • From ANON - Jessica on January 19, 2012
    I have to say this story is addicting! I can't wait to see who the other mates are. I have a few guesses but I guess I will have to wait. Congratulations on the pregnancy!
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  • From ANON - orlando18 on December 08, 2011
    im really liking this fic, i think wisdom and power is Sev and Draco which that will be freaking awesome. for some reason i think it weird for the twin to have him first but still sexy cant wait 4 the next chapter.
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  • From BlackDesert on December 07, 2011
    i really hope one of the mates will be neville! he would fit perfectly for faith! (and if the mates have some fun with each other it would be interesting to see how the twins could 'corrupt' him ^^) this seems like an interesting fic, a different take on the much used creature fics
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