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From Darkserpentcat on September 06, 2011
Contest 2:that one is obviously Charlie Weasley (hm and now I am imagining Charlie, Harry and dragon whips)

Contest 1: An angle of Death or at least something related to Dementors also was she or one of her mates the founder of Azkaban prison?

Keep up the updates soon
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From ANON - Millania on September 06, 2011
Lovely story. I'm so glad you updated!! I have to say my guess for number 2 would be Charlie and I'm really not sure on number one just yet. Hopefully I'll have more ideas on the next chapter. Looking forward to more XD
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From newtothis on August 24, 2011
maybe have ron with hermoine, and a nother girl,. not sure have two fight in 7 year and ron the bad guy, hermoine did some bad thinks to but for some reason that ok. and ps ron did not want to stay at the house after it was attack, hell harry was going to leave on his own ron stop him, and made him take him, ron could have just pretened that he did not see harry leavine and he would be fine.

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From ANON - bill560682 on August 24, 2011
what kind of creature harry is, well since the house was covered in ice it would have to be something that deals with cold weather so i would guess something like a magical snow leopard that can take human form for mating but only on those rare times they find a witch or wizard worthy.

now since you seem to be heading this story to be a harry/snape and others which i totally hate by the way. i say you show snape as having a bit of a caring side by having him brewing potions to help fix up any spell damage his snakes may show up with come the beginning of the school year. such as the dark families teaching thier children how to block curses by shooting those curses at the child and if said child can not block it that is thier own stupid fault since they were shown how to block the curse. now of course since you can't show snape being too nice it would likely be along the lines of 'fine i will tell you what i am doing if it will get you to go the hell away'. now of course snape has to brew these potions at headquarters do to the wards up at hogwarts which prevent dark potions and dark spells from being done there. an yes i know 'but what about harry's 4th year and when dumbledore gets killed well dumbledore himself had to change the wards to allow those events to happen. which would also give a reason to why umbitch was not able to curse harry when she caught him in her office in book 5.
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From kitmistress on August 24, 2011
Ok now your just being mean. Leaving us with all these burning questions. It's mean but I guess if you update soon I'll have to forgive you (ok so that was really just my plead for you to update again) Thank you for the chapter and for leaving us with tons of questions and really no advance on who his mates are or what he is (which I'm dying to know) Please update soon!

Kit
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From ANON - bill560682 on August 23, 2011
i forgot to mention before things about ron as i am sure you likely recall in book 7 ron wanted them all to stay at his house simpley so he could have momma's cooking even thou that same home had already proved to be worthless when the wedding was attack which is late book 6 or early book 7. now even if the wedding was after that it does not really matter since he proved then to be a momma's boy. he wants his bed and momma's cooking an these are more important to him then saving the world.

an the reason i think molly and ginny disliked fluire so much is because she is not a pureblood. i mean think about it you have to be able to trace you're family back like ten generations on both sides and have nothing but witches and wizards in it. so they would not give that up cheaply, now for getting thier hands on the potter and black family vaults i think they would. now a major thing i hate about molly is she is a guest in sirius house and she runs around giving orders as if it is her house and that she is only allowing all of them there out of the goodness of her heart but if they want to stay in her house they will have to earn there keep. an of course you know molly will want to get rid of just about everything to do with the black family claiming it to be all dark items, so what really happened to those items listed as dark were they burned or sold off and the money shoved into someones bank account.
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From ANON - bill560682 on August 23, 2011
i have just read the reviews for this story an need to say malfoy or snape NO WAY, snape is a petty slimeball and the malfoys are snob ass pricks so if you want to use those 3 they need to be slaves to harry with him as the dominant one.

as far as grnger goes she needs someone with brains to challenger her. ron and her only end up together in cannon because she is shallow and needs someone to always be better then. so as long as she and ron are a pair she is always smarter and almost always right that sounds rather shallow to me. stick her with blaise or terry boot someone with a brain.
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From ANON - bill560682 on August 23, 2011
well as far as partners goes for harry i would pick the creevey brothers for males and luna, susan, hanna or just about anyone ruffly in his age group even tonks other then ginny for harry as the female.
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From ANON - elvinwitch on August 23, 2011
Wonderful story. I keep checking to see if you have updated. Don't know what type of creature he is yet but i'm excited to find out. I think Fred and George are two of the six and maybe Severus is one. The rest could be anyone.
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From Darkserpentcat on August 23, 2011
well I am glad you got this posted I was starting to think you would have to wait another day
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From Ravenheart on August 17, 2011
Huh... seriously, no holding up the suspense of Harry's creature! Also, count my -1 vote for Snape ;) I've no idea what people see in that prick and Harry, there's way too much history between James, Lily & Snape to make the pairing in anyway believable! Also... who would like to kiss, let alone have sex with a Professor that not only you had classes with, but also made those classes hell? (of course, James/Severus is another thing entirely! *nods to self*)
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From bloodshound on August 14, 2011
and i'm guessing their critter is compatible with Harry's critter if not mates. As to Harry's critter... some sort of elemental? I wonder if snape has critter blood?
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From Darkserpentcat on August 14, 2011
Okay I am breaking this review into parts so it is easier for me to think

first a reply to your forum reply your forum reply of my last review

It is not so much that I love crack pairing so much as I am a gay guy who loves gay bears and honestly like them either fat or muscular or a combination of them and there are not that many hairy chested guys in the book I have also come to recently lover interracial pairings to where a black guy dominates the white guy and the black guy is muscular. I also find it a real turn on when a bear or older and larger men dominates a twink which is why I love those pairings

I also love Dark Harry fics and I feel like Harry should always have either a mate bond or blood relationship such as father and son or grandson and grandson link so that is why I tend to put him as one of my fav pairings so those are why I love those pairings

Second: suggestions for creatures Harry

I would like to suggest a lamia Harry: If you need to search this I would suggest using the plural version lamiae, you can find them in greek mythology

A rare male Yuki-onna or some type of ice demon because of the powers he had already shown or a nymph who can control snow and ice

A succubus because I love fics where Harry is a succubus. Also just to clear it up I don't view succubae as female sex demons but sex demons who feed by being sexually penetrated

also if you might go higher then five I want to suggest a kitsune with Harry having nine tails to represent the number of mates and have each tail represent not only the number of mates but how inheritently powerful a kitsune is and nine being the highest and the more powerful a kitsune the more mates they have

Third my votes

I am unsure if you are only counting a person's vote once or if they need to vote each chapter incase they change there minds but basically I am voting for my same suggestions as earlier.

However if you are doing - votes I want to put

-100 votes Lucius,Draco and Snape merely because there are way to many of those already in the fanfic world and I would like some change plus they are some of my least favorite pairings with Harry along with Dumbledore (*wretch*)

+100 votes towards my original suggestions

Oh and I would love Remus to. can you imagine what it would be like if Harry had threesomes with Remus and Fenrir with Fenrir being Dominate (bed wise) Remus the versatile and Harry the sub (I like strong subs)

Part four: suggestions

also if you do Hermione with multi men I would make one or more of the men the creatures and have them mate with her and the other boys

also if you are still debating the number of mates can I suggest seven mates for Harry the reason being that in the magical world, even in HP this had been confirmed, seven is the most magical number. It was because of this that Voldemort purposely split his soul into seven pieces.

Now as I mentioned I hate Lucius/Harry and Snape/Harry Draco isn't that big of a problem to me I am just sick of seeing the amounts of Drarry and Snarry's. However I do love them as father and father figures to Harry and if Harry got his creature inheritance from his mother and she to was a creature with a harem I would love to see those two being in past relationships with Lily

Now are all of Harry's mates going to have a second mate in his harem because I think various threesomes with Harry and two members of his harem would be a good idea especially for the mates who are horny from watching Harry being taken and need to touch another

Part five: final comment

I know that the story is writing itself that is what I am doing on most of my fics on normal ff.net (I find it easier to put stories on there and I haven't gotten red lighted so until then that is where the stories go) which is why I keep making suggestions because I know this can help authors and I honestly hope that by doing so people might use them so I probably still will keep giving you suggestions for as long as you let me or I have any suggestions especially if you get stuck in writers block. Also logic for a suggestion tends to make it easier to think about
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From ANON - cobraqueen on August 12, 2011
-1 Draco.
Theo or someone not commonly used at least.

Love the story keep up the good work.
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From Ravenheart on August 11, 2011
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