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Reviews for Within the Lies

By : Sylvia
  • From ANON - rosealynne on August 11, 2011
    For harry pairing i think if there are 5 mates ... draco,sev,luc,fred,george.... and for hermione(sp?)... bas and/or nev... seeing as harry has more then one....as of ch 2 i love the plot (havent read 3 yet).. tho i cant figure out what harry is creature wise.. and i agree with... shoot forgot name(sorry) about mpreg think it should be one keep up great work
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  • From kelle611 on August 07, 2011
    I really like your concept and am enjoying the story so far. I love the twins and their interaction with Harry. The shift between dialogue and thoughts is a little confusing though. There were several times that I had to stop and reread sections to figure out if people were talking or thinking.
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  • From ANON - bittsweetmis on August 07, 2011
    Also forgot to mention that I'd love to beta for you! I've done it before for some authors who became inactive, and I'm a writer myself. I'm currently running ideas in my head for new fanfics and do need someone to chat with as well, so I think it'd be cool to correspond with you. email me to let me know what you think and if you have any questions. In case it doesn't come on the site my email is bittersweet_mis@hotmail.co.uk

    xx
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  • From ANON - bittsweetmis on August 07, 2011
    Hmm, Looking at the choices, I'd guess that you might be making Voldemort a Harry-Mate and I would love to see what king of combination he would make with the twins, Bill and Lucius. Can I negatively vote for Snape? I just don't like Snarry and don't get why it's so popular. Honestly it's kinda creepy seeing as Snape was in love with Lily and has so much history with Harry's parental figures, I don't think that either person's pride would allow them to get over that.

    So votes for Bill and Lucius because they're hot and I like their personalities. And another for Voldemort because he has that evil overlord thing going for him and you gotta admit, he knows how to work it!

    For Hermione, I think I'd prefer Blaise, and for Draco maybe Neville, or all four of them together? Harry doesn't have to be the only one who lucks into a polyamorous relationship!

    In terms of the storyline, I like the way it's going and I'm glad that it's not so heavy on the bashing which I find can easily ruin a fanfic, I'm curious as to what you're going to do with Ginny, part of me would like Harry and Ron to remain friends, but that is mainly because it's my favourite pairing at the moment and I think that the whole him being jealous and scared just shows that he's human, and he proved himself by going back and apologising to Harry. Also he hasn't abandoned Hermione and Harry during Horcrux hunting yet so I don't think that should be used against his character.

    Of course this is you're story, so it's all your choice! feel free to ignore my arguments against RonBashing (If none does occur, my favourite Ron pairing after RonHarry is BlaiseRon) :D
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  • From Orkchild on August 07, 2011
    my votes are for Harry/Snape and or Harry/Lucius
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  • From ANON - InuGuardian1984*notloggedin* on August 07, 2011
    Wow!!! Just....Wow!!!! I love fics with Fred, George, and Harry as partners. Yours is NOT disappointing me at all! I love it!! How many mates is Harry going to have in this fic? Cuz my votes are tied, sorta. I'm a huge fan of Draco/Harry, Snape/Harry, AND LV/Harry. My most favorite of them being Snape/Harry. I can't wait to read more!!!
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  • From ANON - theladykt on August 07, 2011
    ch3: yummy chapter. I vote for Snape.
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  • From bloodshound on August 06, 2011
    this is interesting. If you're mentioning mates, does that mean this is a creature fic? And if harry has a mate/mates where does that leave the twins? I think i need a bit more info before i cast a vote... and to see what the characters well characters are like. I'd hate to tie Har to death eater mode Luc or Snape the prick or draco the uppity, supremest snob.
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  • From Darkserpentcat on August 06, 2011
    I vote for

    Harry/Fenrir

    Harry/Voldemort (I just feel that when doing a dark Harry there should be a connection to Voldemort and if it is not a pairing then Voldemort should be his grandfather or father)

    Draco/Hermione

    keep up the good work and is any vote available because I have a few strange pairings I want to vote for such as

    Hagrid/Harry (I like gay bears and I can't really see Hagrid as a bad guy like members of the Order in some Harry goes dark fics or a part of the Dark after what Riddle did so I would make him more neutral where he is still Harry's lover but doesn't take place in battles also they were close in the books)

    Remus/Harry (I like gay incest and can you imagine a threesome between Fenrir/Remus/Harry),

    Kingsley/Harry,

    Firenze/Harry, (I know strange but I have a Beast/anthro kink)

    Viktor Krum/Harry (I thought the movie version of him was hot)

    Also some DE's if you keep there appearance cannon to the stories

    Rodolphus/Harry (Bella never had a loving relationship with her husband and loved LV but Harry taking them both would either piss her off or if she is going to be a Harry supporter she can support the relationship)

    Walden Macnair (the movie version is ugly but the book version sounds hot)

    please let me know what you think in your next chapter or by email
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  • From newtothis on August 06, 2011
    ron did not leave out of jeasule and fear, one he was injured, two in occulmoly was not as good as harry and hermoine, the locket play with him the most becosue he love hermoine and was afraid that she did not love him. the locket could not play hermoine saying ron love harry, and harry was never in love with hermoine, plus ron only left for a minute then tried to come back, was captured then the magic would not let him in find it again. he still save harry life, fought off a death eather, and help with the war.
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  • From Ravenheart on August 01, 2011
    I'm all for threesome, as long as Draco is nowhere near it! (I hate the prat)

    About Ron... two slips (due to jealousy and Horcux) and people are against him saying he's hateful, I don't get it... I really don't. Pairing... any chance of Harry/Voldemort/Bill?
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  • From curious123 on August 01, 2011
    hmmm...pairing for hermione. i don't see it often, but how about neville? he's a quieter, level headed sort that isn't afraid ot be fierce when he needs to be,and hermione can help with his self confidence. as for the five mates, could sev be one? and/or lucius?
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  • From ravenwinter on August 01, 2011
    If Harry goes dark the twins will have to go with him, they can't be broken apart. Ginni would do will on the darkside, there's already some darkness there, and she could be a good match for Draco. I think Hermione would do well with someone older, but I don't know who will be with Harry and who will be left over, so I can't say much. You have a lot of thinking and 'thinking' with very little "talking" and too much thinking. So, what's next?? Can there be mpreg??? Maybe knock Harry up a little??? Just asking. Please update soon.
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  • From kitmistress on August 01, 2011
    A beta? really i would never guess you needed one. you are doing so well. Love the plot, cant wait for more. As or guessing of the mates I'm going to guess Fred, George, Draco, (five right? and all male?) I almost want to say Neville and Snape. Really there are no indications but thats ok, it's more fun to find out as you write. Hmmm For Hermione I love seeing her with Blaise they can just be so cute and as Blaise is kind of an unknown personalitly wise as he came in so late and was ever overly writen he can be..twisted...to suit your story!

    Oh and I would like to give you a warning- I am also writing a Harry Potter story with mulipal mates and...the sex scene (which ended up writing itself) ended up being 5 pages of kink...beware of the crazy kinky plot bunnies ;) have fun!

    Please update again soon- there are so many questions!

    Kit
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  • From ANON - theladykt on July 31, 2011
    ch 2: A nice car accident for the Dursley's would be nice.
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